(1a) End of All

More like the Neverending Story than anything else, but with some romance.

Skyla, who is picked on by other elves, starts to notice strange things happening in Frew forest. Elves and other species going all zombie like for no reason. Some think it's a disease spreading, but Skyla doubts that. And it's definitely not a curse like the crazy shaman claims. Ever curious and caring for life, Skyla must figure out what's happening.

Along the way, she encounters two headed, tiger-like, scaly mirs; magical species; man-eating trees; the horned flute player; one eyed, long ... more »

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NatalieEGH

7/14/2011 11:42 PM PDT

I finished the story.

I liked it. The incestuous relationship was a bit of a surprise.

The questions about the soul-bringers at the end, was a possible opening for another story as well as whether it was just a build up that cause of End-of-All or if every time a mixed relationship took place, it would be another End-of-All. If it was just about balance, then the answer is definitely not every time.

I would like to see a sequel.

NatalieEGH

7/12/2011 10:41 PM PDT

General:
I just stumbled upon your website. I am not even sure how as I was curious. I would tell how but I got an update and it rebooted my system.

It was a good webcomic. I know you are interested in doing a graphic novel but why not a series. The story through chapter 6 page 3 was interesting. I plan on reading the book you are writing for it.

Character Development:
So far the story has fairly good character development. It is kind of obvious that Cloud and Skyla could be siblings. I am not positive but it is looking that way.

You are being consistent in the characters so far. At least in the webcomic form.

Architectus

4/30/2011 12:55 PM PDT

Keep in mind this is a rough draft. It's not even a first draft. Rough drafts are pron to have loads of errors and bad sentences. :p

Jonley

1/14/2011 6:59 PM PST

Thanks for the invite!

I enjoy reading your book. I have been following your tutorials for a while now and reading your graphic novel version of this on your site. I have not finished reading the whole thing yet, but it interesting to see where this is going(even though I know somewhat because I say the video). I think my only suggestion is that you proof read a few more times over some of the chapters. The overall balance is good, and it's engaging, but I have seen some places where you missed quotation marks or something similar. I only see little mechanical issues such as that. Not really a big deal.

I, myself, have never written a book or read a ton of them, but I love this so far. I hope you continue writing and story telling like this (as well as the tutorials. They have been a big help to me).

And I think I would like to see a sequel to this book, though I have not finished it yet. The idea of elemental elves is fascinating.

Continue the work!