sorry I've been busy, and now l'm strating the book, haha reading on

Awesome story, been reading it, definitely a story that I can't put down, it sucks that I have to sit at a computer to read it. You definitely have a gift. Its one of those stories you could curl up on the couch or lay in your bed and read on a stormy day and not put it down. I was wondering if you could do a huge favor for me, would you read my poetry and rate it for me?

Hey!! This is amazing! You are a wonderful writer you are going to go places with this right here! And It's way good. Lol. I know I already said that but I can't stop thinking about how good it really is! Lol. :)

family is a four letter word on amazon:

http://www.amazon.com/Family-Four-Letter-Katelyn-Brawn/dp/1452878072/ref=sr_1_8?ie=UTF8&s=books&qid=1274806902&sr=8-8

Definitely interesting. To make chapter one more powerful, "I said with a roll of my eyes, there was only one person who called me by my first name and well she wasn’t around anymore, but I’ll get back to that." I would take out the "but I'll get back to that" it makes it more intriguing.

This book looks exciting!

do i understand!! same thing happened to me!!how bout we b frends??

I really like the way this story is developing. Will continue to read more.

Great story, you got me hooked to it, and its like i had to finish reading it before anything else, aha . owell . But yeah . loved the story, and wish i could write like that (: Hope to be seeing more storys from you ? (:

I loved it. I can't wait to see this on the bookshelves of Barnes& Noble or Borders. I will be first in line to purchase it....

who the hell is mike and bill??? BigLaxfan?? wdf??
bestttt webookkk

who the hell is mike and bill??? BigLaxfan?? wdf??
bestttt webookkk

aha, what are you talking about biglaxfan? o.O


<3This is my favorite WEbook ever<3

um idk rerally know what the guy below this comment means so i am officially confused >.<

General:
This seems like a really good idea for a story. :)

Plot:
Delphi resents her father for abandoning her.  The sending off is a result of him being unable to look after her since her mother recently died in an auto accident.  The mother did most of the raising while he could never know how to raise his daughter.  Delphi and her father never got along because of his inability to raise her properly the way her mother could.  Ever since the accident, things only became worse and her father ended up with no other choice but to leave.  Deep down inside, he hates himself for doing so but sees that as the only solution to the dilemma since he never knew how to be a real father.   After being to sent to live with her brother, things don't fare any better.  The brother only knows how to do 3 things:  party, drink and do drugs.  So things are taking a steep downturn unless either the father or the brother get their act together by becoming more responsible the way a father and brother should. 

Character Development:
The main character:  Delphi, a 14 year old girl who has been traumautized by the death of her mother is sent to go live with her brother Mike who is equally traumautized.

Bill:  Delphi's irresponsible father who was unable to raise his daughter on his own.  As a result, he felt there was no other way to handle this but send her away to live with Mike.

Mike:  The out of control 19 year old who has been living on his own for quite a while well before the accident.  Although he's been working a steady job to support himself, his weaknesses have come out in the form of drinking, partying and drugs. 

Structure:
The story begins with the Meghan, Delphi's mother who has been killed in an accident.  As a result, the rest of the family are devestated by the news.  This story seems to be best told in a linear format.

Tone/Voice:
Since this is a drama, the tone to this story should be serious one.

Thanks for the invite

Thanks for the invite! (: I'll check it out when I have a chance. Life is pretty tense.

i like it. a couple typos....not that it bothered me, though. one of the best of this genre i've ever seen on webook.

i love it it is so good when i got your project invite for it i began reading it and i couldnt stop . . . Literally i almost got grounded , bcause i was supposed to be cleaning my room. SHHHHHhhh dont tell. heehee anywho I love this story so much that i am going to read it again and see each day if you have updated or not so please pleas PLEASE do I cant wait. but i do have an idea for it. . . you should have something bad happen to Delphi or have her dissapear in the middle of the night and her family not being able to find her. Something dramatic and such. Well once again I must say that I absoulutley LOVE this story SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
Much .
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McKenna

a tad busy these days but i'll stop by to tzke a peek when i have a sec.
best,
Dom

Dang! This is soooo good. I can't wait until you put up another chapter! ^_^ I seriously think that this should be published when your finished. This is one of the few books i would enjoy reading more than once!
                      -Kyrstin<3

Thanks for the invite. Sounds interesting, will be reading some soon. :)

Thankyou for the invite, i'll be sure to read some, sounds interesting.

Hey guys, I have started a new fan club for KatelynB! Please join!

http://www.webook.com/community/groupInfo.aspx?gId=7d5d3ebd94ca48dc96f4fcbb3b19243f


~Courtney

sounds really good...you have really good writing styles and book names.

Wow, i've read four chapters and im hooked. im sad now cuz its past midnight n im sleepy. n i cnt read more. sigh. but i will def come back to read more. keep on writing amzing things! ^_^
                              -Kyrstin<3   =D

It sounds an intresting plot for a story. I'm all for Reading different genres of storys...

This sounds really interesting. Sounds like I'll enjoy it, considering I like family drama stories :)

hey i thought family was a six letter word (sorry just trying to be funny) :D i like it so far!!

this story is really good and i cant wait to read more :)

just wondering what does that mean? i mean i like it but the only think i can think of for a four letter word for family is either a cuss word or love lol

Love? Is dat wat you mean?

Fmly. F'm'ly. Still not quite sure that does the trick.

The odd thing about this title is that I completely understand what you're trying to say even though it makes no sense.

pretty interesting title. Not very correct though.

OH my gosh! I really love the title! It's so interesting and it pulled me right in :D

When I read the description, it reminded me of a book I read. It's called "Lock and Key" by Sarah Dessen. Have you ever heard of it? You should read it and compare. Okay, I'm going to read now. Sounds interesting :-)

Sounds like a great book to read over the upcoming holidays!
I'll be sure to come back and check it out, thanks :)
Oh & your webook icon reminds me of the book cover of A Corner of the Universe by Ann M. Martin

Wow. Definitely a story I want to finish reading. I rarely ever read but love to write.

busy, busy, but I"ll take a look at a few chapters soon.  Thanks for the invite.

Busy time on here right now (vote etc).... ill come back to it though.

http://www.webook.com/project/The-Family is my book, four chapters submitted so far. Shah. X

Wow. That opening is really short but it really catches my attention. Very good job.

JaneAusten & K_Schwartz,
The term "four letter word", basically means a REALLY BAD WORD.


This sounds like a good idea for a story. Hopefully she can turn over a new leaf.

Heya
Just one thing Maybe you should consider leaving a bit of suspense whey you sum u your story here. What you have put is ok but it's like you have already told the reader the main point in the story and some people wouldn't read your story after that because they will think that they know what is going to happen .
Amber :)

ok, i joined your project, but since i cant write on it, then whats the point?

Wwo. :D. K_Schwartz, I'm picking that she did that because there's four members of the family- or am I wrong, KatelynB?

why is it called that?

this sounds really cool. Will read a chapter or two now and leave comments on grammer etc and let you know what I think! x

ill check it out when i get a chance :)