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11/30/2008 10:39 AM PT
i think it seems lke a comady
11/12/2008 08:40 AM PT
Hallo Jayne
your story is charming and gives humour to a thorny problem.
please take a look at the illustration I created inspired by your lovely theme.
kindest regards
karenruth
your story is charming and gives humour to a thorny problem.
please take a look at the illustration I created inspired by your lovely theme.
kindest regards
karenruth
10/17/2008 09:00 AM PT
Cute
10/12/2008 11:07 AM PT
Thats a cool poem!!!
10/7/2008 03:24 PM PT
I can't seem to submit my illustration in the way suggested so heres the URL(s)!
http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3137/2923010888_08fa9857c2_b.jpg
and
http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3176/2922158017_47156778cf_b.jpg
http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3137/2923010888_08fa9857c2_b.jpg
and
http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3176/2922158017_47156778cf_b.jpg
9/28/2008 02:48 PM PT
An excellent, creative and fun way to get kids to eat healthy.
Perhaps t-shirts with little veggie people colored all over the shirt by children would be a good illustration.
Perhaps t-shirts with little veggie people colored all over the shirt by children would be a good illustration.
9/27/2008 09:36 AM PT
9/16/2008 09:44 AM PT
If you're interested in submitting illustrations, go here: http://www.webook.com/project/Illustration-Competition-Shirt-for-Dessert . You'll want to read the guide to uploading images to your WEbook submissions in the FAQ first: http://www.webook.com/faq#multimedia
Good luck!
Good luck!
9/15/2008 04:11 PM PT
I'm interested in submitting illustrations. How does one go about doing so?
dizit
dizit
9/12/2008 02:00 AM PT
Are you looking for an illustrator? Let me know.
9/11/2008 05:14 AM PT
I have long realized that words with "r's" in them are funny- like grovel and cherub. Got a real chortle out of your title. Never forget Bugs Bunny's "ultra maroon." Pete Faber
9/10/2008 01:21 PM PT
well this girl had a really bite appat
9/8/2008 05:50 PM PT
You can always use a food she doesnt like and actully smear her clothes in it.Let him or her stay in the outfit for half a day.Do this every day for a week and just maybe the little darling wont chew on her/his clothes anymore
8/28/2008 11:10 AM PT
Vrey nice!
8/28/2008 05:42 AM PT
You go, girl!
Well done! I'm delighted that this book has been selected. It's a W-I-N-N-E-R!
nancy
Well done! I'm delighted that this book has been selected. It's a W-I-N-N-E-R!
nancy
8/1/2008 10:07 PM PT
Very cute story and it is just like a child!!!
8/1/2008 11:37 AM PT
When I read this I could see all the creative words run through my mind like a movie. I love how you took the not so yummy vegetables and put it on the shirt. I also liked how the mother was telling the story and at the end you here the kid say it for dessert great Job Aunt Jayne
8/1/2008 08:59 AM PT
I love this until the last paragraph. Why would Marley like eating vegetables when the vegetables caused her to stop eating and chewing on her clothes? This seems to be a forced rationale. I like it more as a story of a mom's problem solving creativity. But that's just me.
Thanks
Thanks
8/1/2008 08:52 AM PT
You are most definantly the real deal! Best of luck as I pray your talent will take far.
7/25/2008 08:29 AM PT
This is my favorite of your submissions I've read so far. It does need some editing and proofing, but it's funny and engaging, and it flows well. Good work!
7/24/2008 06:32 PM PT
Great rhythm and flow!
7/24/2008 06:14 PM PT
This story was fun to read. I wish I had young children to share it with.
7/24/2008 03:27 PM PT
Great!!! :)
7/23/2008 11:07 AM PT
Excellent Book
7/23/2008 10:44 AM PT
This is quick, easy to read, and hilarious. As far as children's books go, I don't think that you can get better. You really understand your genre, and this is excellent!
7/23/2008 06:55 AM PT
This is delightful. I am sure this will be on shelves someday,.
7/22/2008 06:56 PM PT
Great!
7/21/2008 05:27 AM PT
WOW!!! Fantabulous! Delicious! I love it! Love, Julie Evans XOXO
7/21/2008 04:23 AM PT
This is one of my favorites!!
7/20/2008 09:29 AM PT
That was very fun to read.
7/20/2008 07:06 AM PT
this was a very good story that would be great for children as well. any way you could have illustrations with it?
7/19/2008 12:22 PM PT
One suggestion: the line 'had lost all its taste and lost all its flavor' would flow much better with "had lost all its taste and lost all of its flavor". It would match the preceding sentence in rhythm that way. Otherwise, a completely adorable and wonderful story! Bravo and good luck!
~Britt~
~Britt~
7/19/2008 08:31 AM PT
Tasty!!
7/19/2008 08:17 AM PT
I really like this and I'd love to see it illustrated. My only advice would be to tidy the grammar in the intro paragraph. Good luck!
7/19/2008 08:06 AM PT
this is sooo cute!
7/19/2008 06:35 AM PT
I really have to share this one with my friends with small kids!
7/19/2008 02:20 AM PT
wonderful. very clever
7/18/2008 07:32 PM PT
Hungry for more!
7/18/2008 05:27 PM PT
Dr. Seuss has nothing on Jayne Bonilla! This piece is poetry at its best. Just great for kids of all ages! So cute and witty; a definate winner!!!
7/18/2008 05:26 PM PT
Loved it! Would recommend to all.
7/18/2008 03:27 PM PT
sorry, my vote should have been 4 ****
just learning how to vote
just learning how to vote
7/18/2008 01:03 PM PT
love this story and it's message!!
7/18/2008 11:22 AM PT
Very creative
7/18/2008 11:22 AM PT
Excellent! I agree, the next Dr. Seuss!
I do think that the following lines could use a bit of revision:
Her sweatshirt, her back pack, her gym shorts she’d savor,
had lost all its taste and lost all its flavor. -- consider, "she had savored" and lost all "their" taste and "their" flavor
The pajamas she ate instead of her meal,
no longer were scrumptious. They lost their appeal. -- consider, "she had eaten" and "They had lost"
Her swimsuit that used to be wet from her drool,
now Marley’s bikini gets wet from the pool. -- Consider 'her swimsuit no longer gets wet from her drool,"
This is definitely a WONDERFUL children's story
I do think that the following lines could use a bit of revision:
Her sweatshirt, her back pack, her gym shorts she’d savor,
had lost all its taste and lost all its flavor. -- consider, "she had savored" and lost all "their" taste and "their" flavor
The pajamas she ate instead of her meal,
no longer were scrumptious. They lost their appeal. -- consider, "she had eaten" and "They had lost"
Her swimsuit that used to be wet from her drool,
now Marley’s bikini gets wet from the pool. -- Consider 'her swimsuit no longer gets wet from her drool,"
This is definitely a WONDERFUL children's story
7/18/2008 09:48 AM PT
Adorable. Cute. Funny. Easy to read. Perhaps the best author of childrens books since Dr. Seuss. A can't miss.
7/18/2008 08:27 AM PT
one of my favorites.
7/18/2008 08:25 AM PT
very creative
7/18/2008 07:44 AM PT
the story is even better today
7/18/2008 06:32 AM PT
Fantastic story!
7/18/2008 06:07 AM PT
Fabulous!
7/18/2008 03:30 AM PT
This is a great and an original idea!
7/18/2008 01:05 AM PT
Fabulous rhyme!
(Just one typo in the last line - 'resonded' should be "responded.")
(Just one typo in the last line - 'resonded' should be "responded.")
7/17/2008 09:51 AM PT
What an excellent story. My daughter and i will read this over and over again
7/12/2008 06:43 PM PT
I enjoyed your overview, it seems very creative, and interesting. I like it, and hope you'll have cool illustrations. I think it will really come to life!
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