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Wings
Charlie's life was complicated enough between the drama of senior year and her family falling apart. But the day she stumbled upon a strange boy who seemed to have fallen from the sky her life changed forever.
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4/20/2009 2:08 PM PDT
Awesome read!
4/18/2009 5:54 PM PDT
This is a great teen book - they will love it!
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4/17/2009 7:52 AM PDT
I like it. I voted. Good luck.
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4/16/2009 5:33 PM PDT
Beautiful. :]
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4/15/2009 6:11 PM PDT
love it
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4/15/2009 5:09 PM PDT
this is good, and thanks for those feed backs ill have to work on my story more now=P
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4/15/2009 12:35 PM PDT
you got my vote! i love yours im very proud that you wrote the whole book! your verty good!
i loved it and also wish you the best luck also! :)
i loved it and also wish you the best luck also! :)
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4/15/2009 9:31 AM PDT
You have my vote!
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4/15/2009 3:44 AM PDT
wel ive read the first and its made me very much want to read the second!!!!! i wouldnt agree so much with karlene though. yer there is a few typos but they deffiantly dnt get in the way.
4/14/2009 7:21 AM PDT
We sped. . .and my ponytail danced in the warm wind. Several cars followed. . .
Delete unnecessary that's
I suggest you proofread this for typos and punctuation.
We had. . .tents popped up on the beach. . .
Too much passive voice. Use active voice instead of was and were.
I recommend reading Elements of Style by Strunk and White along with The Ten Percent Solution: Self Editing for the Modern Writer by Ken Rand.
The idea is good but typos and punctuation errors get in the way.
Karlene
Delete unnecessary that's
I suggest you proofread this for typos and punctuation.
We had. . .tents popped up on the beach. . .
Too much passive voice. Use active voice instead of was and were.
I recommend reading Elements of Style by Strunk and White along with The Ten Percent Solution: Self Editing for the Modern Writer by Ken Rand.
The idea is good but typos and punctuation errors get in the way.
Karlene
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4/13/2009 10:46 PM PDT
Love Breezy <3
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4/13/2009 6:10 PM PDT
voted
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4/13/2009 6:08 PM PDT
Just read the first chapter and absolutely love it! Way to go!
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4/13/2009 2:47 PM PDT
Absolutely captivating. Only chapter 2, and I love the story! I want to keep Icarus too T-T
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4/12/2009 12:31 PM PDT
I really liked it! It kept me intrigued the whole time, which is what a good story should do! :)
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4/12/2009 11:24 AM PDT
I'm so glad you let me read this. I'm crossing my fingers for you.
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4/11/2009 10:20 AM PDT
many good readable characters good job mike
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4/11/2009 10:18 AM PDT
wwell done unique story mike
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4/11/2009 9:20 AM PDT
This isn't my normal genre, but i enjoyed it. good luck! you have my vote.
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4/9/2009 10:16 AM PDT
hey I voted its actually really good. But do you mind voting for mine too? Its called "remembered for a lifetime"
Thanks!
Thanks!
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4/9/2009 2:58 AM PDT
Absolutely loved it!!! fantastic read!!! I voted for you, could you please vote for me??
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4/8/2009 4:40 PM PDT
i wish you success.
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4/8/2009 3:31 PM PDT
Haha, this was amazing. Some spelling and grammar, but that can be fixed. Definitely voting!
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4/8/2009 2:47 AM PDT
You've got my vote!
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4/7/2009 10:07 PM PDT
omg, i cried!!! u are one talented young lady!!
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4/7/2009 3:37 PM PDT
Got my vote - keep up the good work!
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4/6/2009 10:19 PM PDT
An intriguing story, I enjoyed reading it. You have my vote!
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4/6/2009 9:18 PM PDT
Well done!
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4/6/2009 8:17 PM PDT
Voted! A truly great story!
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4/6/2009 7:24 PM PDT
brilliant! you are brilliant child!
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4/6/2009 5:13 PM PDT
2 words
loved it
- K
loved it
- K
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4/6/2009 4:27 PM PDT
Awesome! You have my vote.
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4/6/2009 4:07 PM PDT
You are a very good writer I love your style. I voted for you please vote for my book "King Loverr: Diary of a Philosophical Loner.
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4/6/2009 2:02 PM PDT
Oh my gosh! I loved the whole book! I cried at the end, the whole thing is a book that absolutely NEEDS to be published! At first I was expecting a vampire story (which is wierd because it doesn't even look like one!) and now I absolutely LOVE it! It is now my favorite webook book!
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4/6/2009 1:39 PM PDT
ahhh... so this is the project that tooke my title! lol jk. its awesomeosis anyways. totally voted thumbs up.
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4/6/2009 7:43 AM PDT
Voted
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3/5/2009 3:20 PM PST
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
a finished story
(gasp, gasp, gasp)
this is the first finished story i found on webook
i have 2 read it!
a finished story
(gasp, gasp, gasp)
this is the first finished story i found on webook
i have 2 read it!
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10/1/2008 12:59 PM PDT
10/1 Wings is finished, in its rough form. I am going to spend the next few weeks editing and then I hope it will be polished up in time for the new voteing round!
8/15/2008 9:00 AM PDT
I think Bayen beat me to it, but as he implied- good story! The only problems i've seen are some misspellings/ word misuse, but those are easy to fix. Your story has kept me on the edge of my seat while reading it, and i look forward to your next installments!
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8/14/2008 10:40 AM PDT
8/14/08 - if anyone is fallowing my story so far let me tell you that becasue of recent life issues car/job/family/ect... i have not been able to sit down and work on this book for a while. that is why the pace of chapters come out came to a sudden stop. I think things are clearing up and hope to continue on chapter 7 soon. That is also why I haven't had time to check on others updates on their books. I have alot of catch up and I am excited to read all your guys stuff =) don't forget about me i promiss the story will continue!
8/10/2008 7:35 PM PDT
Awww! I read what you have so far, but we still haven't found out where Icarus came from! :( Good job, though - the suspense has me wanting to keep reading! Put up more soon!
8/6/2008 11:00 AM PDT
this story is drawing me into the work in spite of my general feelings on highschool soap-opera fiction. (nothing against your work, it simply is not a genre that i have ever been a fan of so i'm not really the best critic for this project.) i can tell you that your characters are strong and do a lot to carry the bones of the plot. they really make the story for me and give me the patience as a reader to see where the plot is going to take them. keep writing and developing.
7/21/2008 3:57 AM PDT
Dear FlameChild, I fell in love with your story. It is written very well, descriptive and captivating. I simply could not stop reading it because there was no lull in your story.
I also wanted to thank you for beginning to read my novel 'A Chosen Journey.' I do hope that you will vote for it for publication. You can find it on 'Body, Mind and Spirit' on Projects on page 2. Thank you for such an enticing story. Sincerely, Tamara0449
I also wanted to thank you for beginning to read my novel 'A Chosen Journey.' I do hope that you will vote for it for publication. You can find it on 'Body, Mind and Spirit' on Projects on page 2. Thank you for such an enticing story. Sincerely, Tamara0449
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