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Project Leader:
gonzodave
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Participants:
The WEbook community -
Who Can Write:
All Participants -
Category:
Poetry -
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General -
Language:
English
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Simply Poetry V - Converse (First Part of a Learning Series of Seven - Simply Poetry V - XI )
Jay Parini speaking of Thom Gunn in the Massachusetts Review - "Any poet worth thinking twice about possesses at least an energetic mind; but it is the harnessing of this energy which makes for excellence. In Gunn's work an apparently unlimited energy of vision finds, variously, the natural boundaries which make expression—and clarity—possible."
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(see also http://www.webook.com/project/Simply-Poetry-Arts-and-Crafts)
(rev #10 - 07.23.09)
I believe a greater opportunit ... more »
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(see also http://www.webook.com/project/Simply-Poetry-Arts-and-Crafts)
(rev #10 - 07.23.09)
I believe a greater opportunit ... more »
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Hey ~g..What a bloody brilliant idea. There is much benefit for anyone who wants a specific type of critique here. Good one!!!
~Ashlee and ~Gary_B. It's fine if you write for now on the front page comments. There are no 'advertisements' (titles) written by those soliciting poems for comments as yet.
Even I have not finished my example posting. Personally, I don't care for the nebulous word - feedback - that suggests some kind of golden grail. The feedback/critique scaling in the comment boxes is not of any concern for this project.
The idea is to fine tune the poetry commentary to a specific need or area recognized by the writer, not a stray comment from a webooker as is the usual happenstance.
When webookers choose to set-up shop, so to speak, then the writers can look through the TABLE of CONTENTS for different areas of commentary and enter their poems or partial poems into the comment box below that submission for the person who desires to critique a certain aspect of poetry.
In this way, writer and commenter both will benefit from the exercise.
My kind regards,
~g
Even I have not finished my example posting. Personally, I don't care for the nebulous word - feedback - that suggests some kind of golden grail. The feedback/critique scaling in the comment boxes is not of any concern for this project.
The idea is to fine tune the poetry commentary to a specific need or area recognized by the writer, not a stray comment from a webooker as is the usual happenstance.
When webookers choose to set-up shop, so to speak, then the writers can look through the TABLE of CONTENTS for different areas of commentary and enter their poems or partial poems into the comment box below that submission for the person who desires to critique a certain aspect of poetry.
In this way, writer and commenter both will benefit from the exercise.
My kind regards,
~g
This could be more of a song:
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Wherever you are, know that I'm hiding.
Waiting for you to come save me from myself.
Whenever you're ready, know that I'm smiling.
Holding my heart for you, in a jar on my shelf.
Dear you, wherever you are,
My patience is there but slowly parting.
So I'll continue my chase on a star,
Waiting for you while slowly flying.
Wherever you are, I'm turning inside out.
Folding into clouds while waiting for you.
Whenever you get here, my heart will shout:
My beats won't skip, no longer sad or blue.'
Dear you, wherever you are,
My patience is there but slowly parting.
So I'll continue my chase on a star,
Waiting for you while slowly flying.
I have to go now,
I’m tired of waiting.
I’ll see you at dusk,
With my heart in a jar.
Dear you, wherever you are,
My patience is there but slowly parting.
So I'll continue my chase on a star,
Waiting for you while slowly flying.
*
Wherever you are, know that I'm hiding.
Waiting for you to come save me from myself.
Whenever you're ready, know that I'm smiling.
Holding my heart for you, in a jar on my shelf.
Dear you, wherever you are,
My patience is there but slowly parting.
So I'll continue my chase on a star,
Waiting for you while slowly flying.
Wherever you are, I'm turning inside out.
Folding into clouds while waiting for you.
Whenever you get here, my heart will shout:
My beats won't skip, no longer sad or blue.'
Dear you, wherever you are,
My patience is there but slowly parting.
So I'll continue my chase on a star,
Waiting for you while slowly flying.
I have to go now,
I’m tired of waiting.
I’ll see you at dusk,
With my heart in a jar.
Dear you, wherever you are,
My patience is there but slowly parting.
So I'll continue my chase on a star,
Waiting for you while slowly flying.
Abuela
Bless’d be my thens, my way-back-whens,
O streets of Venezuela,
for know'n' not much more than the touch
of mi querida Abuela.
Be bless’d my mem’ries of her youth,
solemn and toned in sepia,
which painted worlds where all was black,
white and with hints of sienna.
Her hand’s silk skin, wrinkled and worn,
imprinted on my cheek
seaways for warm water to flow
and drown out my aquí.
And in soft age, my queen, my sage,
sighed smooth her last tomorrow,
and left alone my flesh and bone
to wander that old barrio.
So bless my whens and my back-thens,
O you, proud Venezuela!
For no land’s crest’s been better rest
than the breast of mi Abuela.
I'll bite first. I just finished this one (had the inspiration for it over my last night's cigarette) and was extremely eager for input. I can't italicize on this text box, so keep in mind anything that's written in Spanish in the poem is meant to be italicized.
Please, lay it on me thick. (Also, if I'm not using this system properly,GDave, let me know).
Bless’d be my thens, my way-back-whens,
O streets of Venezuela,
for know'n' not much more than the touch
of mi querida Abuela.
Be bless’d my mem’ries of her youth,
solemn and toned in sepia,
which painted worlds where all was black,
white and with hints of sienna.
Her hand’s silk skin, wrinkled and worn,
imprinted on my cheek
seaways for warm water to flow
and drown out my aquí.
And in soft age, my queen, my sage,
sighed smooth her last tomorrow,
and left alone my flesh and bone
to wander that old barrio.
So bless my whens and my back-thens,
O you, proud Venezuela!
For no land’s crest’s been better rest
than the breast of mi Abuela.
I'll bite first. I just finished this one (had the inspiration for it over my last night's cigarette) and was extremely eager for input. I can't italicize on this text box, so keep in mind anything that's written in Spanish in the poem is meant to be italicized.
Please, lay it on me thick. (Also, if I'm not using this system properly,GDave, let me know).
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