Book Info
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Project Leader:
KateGray
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Participants:
The WEbook community -
Who Can Write:
Project Leader Only -
Category:
Fiction -
Genre:
Sci Fi/Fantasy
Mystery -
Language:
English
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Sleep
Instead, she is brought forcibly from it, to the glare of lights, unfamiliar faces, and the emptiness of space, a mere few feet removed.... This is her crucible, the rebirth in fire that will completely reshape her, while asking of her to do what she could not do before; join a cause, fight a rising evil, and face her demons.
I will definitely give something back to the folks that help me out in this process - I would rather do it on a one on one basis at this point, so contact me if you are ... more »
I will definitely give something back to the folks that help me out in this process - I would rather do it on a one on one basis at this point, so contact me if you are ... more »
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Please tell me that "Sleep" won the publication contest. I have read some really great work on this website, and this is definitely my favorite work.
excellent! well written and thoughtful. i wonder if i could request that you give me some feedback on my story "With or Without You" in the Fifteen Years of Eden project
Terrific story telling Kate. I can't wait to read it all. Extremely grabbing from the beginning! Best of Luck to you!
Coming from a combat zone i can relate to this story...so i liked it a lot and would like to read the up coming one.
Strong, convincing storytelling so far--I'm on chapter 5 and enjoying every minute.
Your writing is very good! From what I have read thus far, it holds my interest. I like the introduction. You have me waiting for more. It is readable and engaging. The story and the characters pull you right into the story. The POV shifts uncomfortably in some places. I am sure you will fix them in revision. (For an example, see the shifts between Tark and the doctor's POV in Chapter 4.) I have not read it in its entirety, but so far, it is an excellent read. I love the flow of your words. You place such good graphic detail in each scene. It is definitely a great novel! You are a fantastic writer. Good luck with the votes. Hope my 5-rated vote helps!
I haven't read all the chapters yet, but so far it's an excellent read. I love the flow of your words and how you place so much graphic detail in them. Great Novel! You are a fantastic writer. Goodluck with the votes. Hope my 5 rated vote helps!
Holding thumbs
Caz
Holding thumbs
Caz
Hi Kathy,
1. My favorite lines:
“You can’t be cruel to a man with a sucking chest wound.”
“It is definitely zero hour. We’re supposed to be setting an example.”
2. I like the fact of having Suspense and Surprise.
3. By the way, there’s some parts to this story that you might like to know.” ---> there are? (instead of there is, there's)
4. There is a difficulty for me in the reading.
Ok, first we are in a house. Where is it? Is it located in an Island or in a shore? In the Mediterranean?
I have problems with the place. It is not clear for me. Even if this is the last page.
I would say as the Painting Teacher in a workshop. The Painting has to defend by itself, do not think that the frame is going to fix it.
5. Here is my Vote.
Please let me know if it counts and if you found my impressions helpful.
I am gonna read a little more and thanks for the invitation,
Pegasee
1. My favorite lines:
“You can’t be cruel to a man with a sucking chest wound.”
“It is definitely zero hour. We’re supposed to be setting an example.”
2. I like the fact of having Suspense and Surprise.
3. By the way, there’s some parts to this story that you might like to know.” ---> there are? (instead of there is, there's)
4. There is a difficulty for me in the reading.
Ok, first we are in a house. Where is it? Is it located in an Island or in a shore? In the Mediterranean?
I have problems with the place. It is not clear for me. Even if this is the last page.
I would say as the Painting Teacher in a workshop. The Painting has to defend by itself, do not think that the frame is going to fix it.
5. Here is my Vote.
Please let me know if it counts and if you found my impressions helpful.
I am gonna read a little more and thanks for the invitation,
Pegasee
Very good! I was interested from beginning to end. I also liked the introduction. You've got me waiting for more....
pattimari
pattimari
Cool introduction. Am curious to see what will happen next. Well written and makes for a good read.
Readable and engaging -- well done. The story and the characters pull me right in. The POV shifts uncomfortably in some places, and this should be fixed in revision. (For an example, see the shifts between Tark's and the doctor's POV in Chapter 4.)
Wow what an amazing tapestry of true human nature, and the unseen forces of hope and despair battling over a woman's soul
Kate - I'm sorry but I accidentally clicked one star instead of five and it won't let me change it... I look forward to reading your book. I haven just written my own MS so I know it's a labour of love. Good luck! Lora Lee
For those coming in - make sure you click on the stars to vote. Comments are good, but the stars actually leave the vote behind!
Great Story! some day I hope to get a children's book out there... I already started the illustrations! just haven't had the time to finish it...
Thats really awesome. i ended up joining this site purely to rate your story =)
obviously i expect your support when i have my own publication.
Good work though.
Rafael (leader of The Myspace Writers Group)
obviously i expect your support when i have my own publication.
Good work though.
Rafael (leader of The Myspace Writers Group)
niice.. ur pretty good.. can u give me some tips and also read my stories?? im only 12 years old.. but im not very good.. sooo yeah.. nice story.. im not done with mine yet.. but yeah..
Everyone else can send it their friends as well (don't mind the props!). So far, I think my family has procrastinated entirely on this, and I'm going to be having to wag my finger at them about it!
If I could vote 10 times on this, I'd vote top marks every time.
this is totaly awesome and deserves to be published. I'm probably going to send the url to my friends and make them read it too, it's that awesome!
this is totaly awesome and deserves to be published. I'm probably going to send the url to my friends and make them read it too, it's that awesome!
Wow, i'm surprised by how well you describe the action in this story. Also, a very interesting beginning
Your writing is quality adn you convey action very well... a seriously daunted task, and what you've done is great. However, I am confused. The first chapter set a contemporary feel, yet, we then segway into space. We also get too attached to the first character to lose her so quickly, at least that is my sense.
Nice to see some tight, compelling storywriting here. And SCI FI! I'm excited about this project.
Have not finished reading it yet, but am really enjoying it thus far. When reading scene details, I usually skip to the next dialogue, however, your descriptions of the surroundings are interesting and well written. Great job!
This is hands down the best thing I've read on WeBook so far. It unfortunately makes my work look like the writings of a third grader, but seriously. I loved your attention to the characters, something I really value in writing. Anyway, I voted for you and I really hope you win!
Kate, I found your story to be very interesting and voted for it. Please check out 'A Chosen Journey' under 'Body, Mind and Spirit' on Projects to Vote on it if you find it worthy.
Sincerely,
Tamara0449
Sincerely,
Tamara0449
Kate, I enjoyed reading some of your story and found it very interesting and almost sci-fiction torn between life. I want to vote for you story so do I click on where it says Vote Here above comments. Please check out my story again and if you find it worthy please Vote for 'A Chosen Journey' under 'Body, Mind and Spirit' on Projects. Sincerely, Tamara049
Excellent start - good characterisation and a griping, slightly unusual theme.
I have read the first five chapters of this story, and as a lover of science fiction, fantasy, and history, I really want this to win the publishing contest. As far as a title for this story, I would entitle it "Catching Zs and Commies." Maybe, "Sleeping Awake" could be another potential title. "Sleeping Beneath the Iron Curtain" is another possibility. I don't know; those are terrible suggestions. It's still a great concept and story.
this is a great story, about the struggles during the Cold War. Very interesting, lots of action. Historical speculation and science fiction, although it could have happened. It will be a great novel and with some work a good movie.
Nicely done. I always wanted to know the trick to writing like that.... feel free to clue me in at any time. :)
Nancy
Nancy
I really like this. Nice feel to it.
Must confess I've only just come across it so I haven't had chance to read fully but I like what I've read.
Must confess I've only just come across it so I haven't had chance to read fully but I like what I've read.
It's down to the wire! Thanks to everyone who has read so far - hope you come back to vote!
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