Book Info
Participants:
The WEbook community
The WEbook community
Who Can Write:
Project Leader Only
Project Leader Only
Format:
Continuous/Novel
Continuous/Novel
Type:
Fiction
Fiction
Genre:
Science Fiction and Fantasy
Science Fiction and Fantasy
Language:
English
English
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8/25/2008 08:42 PM PT
Please tell me that "Sleep" won the publication contest. I have read some really great work on this website, and this is definitely my favorite work.
8/1/2008 06:25 PM PT
Fast paced and leaves me wanting more...
8/1/2008 01:26 PM PT
Wunderbar! Ausgezeichnet!!!
8/1/2008 06:52 AM PT
excellent! well written and thoughtful. i wonder if i could request that you give me some feedback on my story "With or Without You" in the Fifteen Years of Eden project
7/31/2008 10:54 PM PT
Terrific story telling Kate. I can't wait to read it all. Extremely grabbing from the beginning! Best of Luck to you!
7/31/2008 10:37 PM PT
Nice work! I found myself drawn in from the first word.
7/31/2008 06:34 PM PT
Great Job! looking forward to reading the rest on vacation!
7/31/2008 06:20 PM PT
Always great stuff from this author.
7/31/2008 03:46 PM PT
Coming from a combat zone i can relate to this story...so i liked it a lot and would like to read the up coming one.
7/31/2008 09:52 AM PT
Strong, convincing storytelling so far--I'm on chapter 5 and enjoying every minute.
7/31/2008 08:57 AM PT
I will be back to finish reading this story. Again I wish you good luck!!!!!!
7/31/2008 08:56 AM PT
Your writing is very good! From what I have read thus far, it holds my interest. I like the introduction. You have me waiting for more. It is readable and engaging. The story and the characters pull you right into the story. The POV shifts uncomfortably in some places. I am sure you will fix them in revision. (For an example, see the shifts between Tark and the doctor's POV in Chapter 4.) I have not read it in its entirety, but so far, it is an excellent read. I love the flow of your words. You place such good graphic detail in each scene. It is definitely a great novel! You are a fantastic writer. Good luck with the votes. Hope my 5-rated vote helps!
7/31/2008 05:08 AM PT
really got into this, am still reading through it.
7/30/2008 07:31 PM PT
Keep up the awesome work!!!
7/30/2008 05:57 PM PT
I haven't read all the chapters yet, but so far it's an excellent read. I love the flow of your words and how you place so much graphic detail in them. Great Novel! You are a fantastic writer. Goodluck with the votes. Hope my 5 rated vote helps!
Holding thumbs
Caz
Holding thumbs
Caz
7/30/2008 05:18 PM PT
Kate I cast my vote good luck mike the voice.
7/30/2008 04:17 PM PT
uno vote for tu
7/30/2008 03:33 PM PT
I like it. Well done you got my vote.
7/30/2008 02:35 PM PT
Hi Kathy,
1. My favorite lines:
“You can’t be cruel to a man with a sucking chest wound.”
“It is definitely zero hour. We’re supposed to be setting an example.”
2. I like the fact of having Suspense and Surprise.
3. By the way, there’s some parts to this story that you might like to know.” ---> there are? (instead of there is, there's)
4. There is a difficulty for me in the reading.
Ok, first we are in a house. Where is it? Is it located in an Island or in a shore? In the Mediterranean?
I have problems with the place. It is not clear for me. Even if this is the last page.
I would say as the Painting Teacher in a workshop. The Painting has to defend by itself, do not think that the frame is going to fix it.
5. Here is my Vote.
Please let me know if it counts and if you found my impressions helpful.
I am gonna read a little more and thanks for the invitation,
Pegasee
1. My favorite lines:
“You can’t be cruel to a man with a sucking chest wound.”
“It is definitely zero hour. We’re supposed to be setting an example.”
2. I like the fact of having Suspense and Surprise.
3. By the way, there’s some parts to this story that you might like to know.” ---> there are? (instead of there is, there's)
4. There is a difficulty for me in the reading.
Ok, first we are in a house. Where is it? Is it located in an Island or in a shore? In the Mediterranean?
I have problems with the place. It is not clear for me. Even if this is the last page.
I would say as the Painting Teacher in a workshop. The Painting has to defend by itself, do not think that the frame is going to fix it.
5. Here is my Vote.
Please let me know if it counts and if you found my impressions helpful.
I am gonna read a little more and thanks for the invitation,
Pegasee
7/30/2008 12:45 PM PT
Your work deserves to be published.
7/30/2008 09:51 AM PT
thats rank... did any of your other bookz get published yet?
7/30/2008 09:43 AM PT
Forgot to tell you I voted a five for you.
7/30/2008 09:43 AM PT
Very good! I was interested from beginning to end. I also liked the introduction. You've got me waiting for more....
pattimari
pattimari
7/30/2008 09:20 AM PT
I like how you kept things mysterious.
7/30/2008 06:54 AM PT
Cool introduction. Am curious to see what will happen next. Well written and makes for a good read.
7/30/2008 06:27 AM PT
Neat storyline - :)
7/29/2008 11:36 AM PT
You've got my vote!! x
7/29/2008 09:25 AM PT
Readable and engaging -- well done. The story and the characters pull me right in. The POV shifts uncomfortably in some places, and this should be fixed in revision. (For an example, see the shifts between Tark's and the doctor's POV in Chapter 4.)
7/28/2008 02:42 PM PT
We're here for you Anna!!!
7/26/2008 07:41 PM PT
Wow what an amazing tapestry of true human nature, and the unseen forces of hope and despair battling over a woman's soul
7/26/2008 12:40 PM PT
It's still a vote! Click those stars!
7/26/2008 10:42 AM PT
Kate - I'm sorry but I accidentally clicked one star instead of five and it won't let me change it... I look forward to reading your book. I haven just written my own MS so I know it's a labour of love. Good luck! Lora Lee
7/25/2008 05:22 AM PT
For those coming in - make sure you click on the stars to vote. Comments are good, but the stars actually leave the vote behind!
7/24/2008 08:34 PM PT
Great Story! some day I hope to get a children's book out there... I already started the illustrations! just haven't had the time to finish it...
7/24/2008 03:19 PM PT
Thats really awesome. i ended up joining this site purely to rate your story =)
obviously i expect your support when i have my own publication.
Good work though.
Rafael (leader of The Myspace Writers Group)
obviously i expect your support when i have my own publication.
Good work though.
Rafael (leader of The Myspace Writers Group)
7/24/2008 07:23 AM PT
Great story!
7/24/2008 05:49 AM PT
Good plot though the language was a little too strong for my tastes.
7/24/2008 03:08 AM PT
Looking forward to reading the rest.
7/23/2008 10:32 PM PT
niice.. ur pretty good.. can u give me some tips and also read my stories?? im only 12 years old.. but im not very good.. sooo yeah.. nice story.. im not done with mine yet.. but yeah..
7/23/2008 06:18 PM PT
Everyone else can send it their friends as well (don't mind the props!). So far, I think my family has procrastinated entirely on this, and I'm going to be having to wag my finger at them about it!
7/23/2008 02:40 PM PT
wow this is too awesome
7/23/2008 11:45 AM PT
If I could vote 10 times on this, I'd vote top marks every time.
this is totaly awesome and deserves to be published. I'm probably going to send the url to my friends and make them read it too, it's that awesome!
this is totaly awesome and deserves to be published. I'm probably going to send the url to my friends and make them read it too, it's that awesome!
7/23/2008 12:02 AM PT
Wow, i'm surprised by how well you describe the action in this story. Also, a very interesting beginning
7/22/2008 02:16 PM PT
Your writing is quality adn you convey action very well... a seriously daunted task, and what you've done is great. However, I am confused. The first chapter set a contemporary feel, yet, we then segway into space. We also get too attached to the first character to lose her so quickly, at least that is my sense.
7/22/2008 09:10 AM PT
Nice to see some tight, compelling storywriting here. And SCI FI! I'm excited about this project.
7/21/2008 05:00 PM PT
Have not finished reading it yet, but am really enjoying it thus far. When reading scene details, I usually skip to the next dialogue, however, your descriptions of the surroundings are interesting and well written. Great job!
7/20/2008 05:02 PM PT
This is hands down the best thing I've read on WeBook so far. It unfortunately makes my work look like the writings of a third grader, but seriously. I loved your attention to the characters, something I really value in writing. Anyway, I voted for you and I really hope you win!
7/20/2008 02:55 PM PT
Kate, I found your story to be very interesting and voted for it. Please check out 'A Chosen Journey' under 'Body, Mind and Spirit' on Projects to Vote on it if you find it worthy.
Sincerely,
Tamara0449
Sincerely,
Tamara0449
7/20/2008 02:51 PM PT
Kate, I enjoyed reading some of your story and found it very interesting and almost sci-fiction torn between life. I want to vote for you story so do I click on where it says Vote Here above comments. Please check out my story again and if you find it worthy please Vote for 'A Chosen Journey' under 'Body, Mind and Spirit' on Projects. Sincerely, Tamara049
7/19/2008 06:15 PM PT
Love this! Your writing is great.
7/19/2008 03:08 PM PT
awsome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
7/19/2008 11:41 AM PT
Sorry - gripping!!!!
7/19/2008 11:39 AM PT
Excellent start - good characterisation and a griping, slightly unusual theme.
7/19/2008 11:27 AM PT
I have read the first five chapters of this story, and as a lover of science fiction, fantasy, and history, I really want this to win the publishing contest. As far as a title for this story, I would entitle it "Catching Zs and Commies." Maybe, "Sleeping Awake" could be another potential title. "Sleeping Beneath the Iron Curtain" is another possibility. I don't know; those are terrible suggestions. It's still a great concept and story.
7/19/2008 10:10 AM PT
Really interesting--I love historical fiction.
Kathy
Kathy
7/19/2008 09:24 AM PT
this is a great story, about the struggles during the Cold War. Very interesting, lots of action. Historical speculation and science fiction, although it could have happened. It will be a great novel and with some work a good movie.
7/19/2008 07:23 AM PT
Nicely done. I always wanted to know the trick to writing like that.... feel free to clue me in at any time. :)
Nancy
Nancy
7/19/2008 06:17 AM PT
Well written. Good Luck!
7/18/2008 07:05 AM PT
I have always considered it to be a working title - open to any suggestions!
7/18/2008 06:53 AM PT
Needs a better title, but the story is intriguing and well-told.
7/18/2008 06:28 AM PT
Good Luck Kate
7/18/2008 03:50 AM PT
I really like this. Nice feel to it.
Must confess I've only just come across it so I haven't had chance to read fully but I like what I've read.
Must confess I've only just come across it so I haven't had chance to read fully but I like what I've read.
7/17/2008 08:09 AM PT
It's down to the wire! Thanks to everyone who has read so far - hope you come back to vote!
7/4/2008 06:53 PM PT
You're right - that's what I get for not rereading carefully enough!
7/4/2008 08:40 AM PT
'While what I've written is, a set-in-the-future fiction novel, but don't make the mistake of dismissing it as "just sci-fi". ' Try deleting the first comma and the but following the second comma.
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