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Project Leader:
KateGray
Participants:
The WEbook community
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Category:
Fiction
Genre:
Sci Fi/Fantasy
Mystery
Language:
English

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Sleep

While what I've written is a set-in-the-future fiction novel, don't make the mistake of dismissing it as "just sci-fi". This story is about people, and the choices we make in times of crisis. Some of us rise up out of the ashes and triumph immediately. Some of us stumble, falter, and fall into darkness, perhaps to emerge one day, or perhaps to remain there forever. What makes the difference? For Kiara Howard, there isn't enough time to process all of the horrors piling up around her. She chooses to go to sleep, hoping, in some sense, never to awaken.

Instead, she is brought forcibly from it, to the glare of lights, unfamiliar faces, and the emptiness of space, a mere few feet removed.... This is her crucible, the rebirth in fire that will completely reshape her, while asking of her to do what she could not do before; join a cause, fight a rising evil, and face her demons.

I will definitely give something back to the folks that help me out in this process - I would rather do it on a one on one basis at this point, so contact me if you are ... more »

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BenjaminAshley

8/25/2008 8:42 PM PDT

Please tell me that "Sleep" won the publication contest. I have read some really great work on this website, and this is definitely my favorite work.

DeweyGMan

8/1/2008 6:25 PM PDT

Fast paced and leaves me wanting more...

ccs80

8/1/2008 1:26 PM PDT

Wunderbar! Ausgezeichnet!!!

Jacob_Brower

8/1/2008 6:52 AM PDT

excellent! well written and thoughtful. i wonder if i could request that you give me some feedback on my story "With or Without You" in the Fifteen Years of Eden project

jaynebonilla

7/31/2008 10:54 PM PDT

Terrific story telling Kate. I can't wait to read it all. Extremely grabbing from the beginning! Best of Luck to you!

Shiona_D

7/31/2008 10:37 PM PDT

Nice work! I found myself drawn in from the first word.

Danielle_P

7/31/2008 6:34 PM PDT

Great Job! looking forward to reading the rest on vacation!

Kathy

7/31/2008 6:20 PM PDT

Always great stuff from this author.

daydreamer

7/31/2008 3:46 PM PDT

Coming from a combat zone i can relate to this story...so i liked it a lot and would like to read the up coming one.

TsungChi

7/31/2008 9:52 AM PDT

Strong, convincing storytelling so far--I'm on chapter 5 and enjoying every minute.

GLFernandez

7/31/2008 8:57 AM PDT

I will be back to finish reading this story. Again I wish you good luck!!!!!!

GLFernandez

7/31/2008 8:56 AM PDT

Your writing is very good! From what I have read thus far, it holds my interest. I like the introduction. You have me waiting for more. It is readable and engaging. The story and the characters pull you right into the story. The POV shifts uncomfortably in some places. I am sure you will fix them in revision. (For an example, see the shifts between Tark and the doctor's POV in Chapter 4.) I have not read it in its entirety, but so far, it is an excellent read. I love the flow of your words. You place such good graphic detail in each scene. It is definitely a great novel! You are a fantastic writer. Good luck with the votes. Hope my 5-rated vote helps!

mumdrivenmad

7/31/2008 5:08 AM PDT

really got into this, am still reading through it.

EdithWeymouth

7/30/2008 7:31 PM PDT

Keep up the awesome work!!!

Caz_Steele

7/30/2008 5:57 PM PDT

I haven't read all the chapters yet, but so far it's an excellent read. I love the flow of your words and how you place so much graphic detail in them. Great Novel! You are a fantastic writer. Goodluck with the votes. Hope my 5 rated vote helps!

Holding thumbs
Caz

thevoice

7/30/2008 5:18 PM PDT

Kate I cast my vote good luck mike the voice.

TheBreeze

7/30/2008 4:17 PM PDT

uno vote for tu

Kenneth

7/30/2008 3:33 PM PDT

I like it. Well done you got my vote.

Pegasee

7/30/2008 2:35 PM PDT

Hi Kathy,

1. My favorite lines:
“You can’t be cruel to a man with a sucking chest wound.”
“It is definitely zero hour. We’re supposed to be setting an example.”
2. I like the fact of having Suspense and Surprise.
3. By the way, there’s some parts to this story that you might like to know.” ---> there are? (instead of there is, there's)
4. There is a difficulty for me in the reading.
Ok, first we are in a house. Where is it? Is it located in an Island or in a shore? In the Mediterranean?
I have problems with the place. It is not clear for me. Even if this is the last page.
I would say as the Painting Teacher in a workshop. The Painting has to defend by itself, do not think that the frame is going to fix it.
5. Here is my Vote.
Please let me know if it counts and if you found my impressions helpful.

I am gonna read a little more and thanks for the invitation,
Pegasee

lordgatt

7/30/2008 12:45 PM PDT

Your work deserves to be published.

peoples_voices

7/30/2008 9:51 AM PDT

thats rank... did any of your other bookz get published yet?

pattimari

7/30/2008 9:43 AM PDT

Forgot to tell you I voted a five for you.

pattimari

7/30/2008 9:43 AM PDT

Very good! I was interested from beginning to end. I also liked the introduction. You've got me waiting for more....

pattimari

flavaunit2

7/30/2008 9:20 AM PDT

I like how you kept things mysterious.

EssieBohme

7/30/2008 6:54 AM PDT

Cool introduction. Am curious to see what will happen next. Well written and makes for a good read.

Radiojen

7/30/2008 6:27 AM PDT

Neat storyline - :)

Scarlett

7/29/2008 11:36 AM PDT

You've got my vote!! x

Melissa

7/29/2008 9:25 AM PDT

Readable and engaging -- well done. The story and the characters pull me right in. The POV shifts uncomfortably in some places, and this should be fixed in revision. (For an example, see the shifts between Tark's and the doctor's POV in Chapter 4.)

Dawnzer

7/28/2008 2:42 PM PDT

We're here for you Anna!!!

JKGB

7/26/2008 7:41 PM PDT

Wow what an amazing tapestry of true human nature, and the unseen forces of hope and despair battling over a woman's soul

KateGray

7/26/2008 12:40 PM PDT

It's still a vote! Click those stars!

loraleeb

7/26/2008 10:42 AM PDT

Kate - I'm sorry but I accidentally clicked one star instead of five and it won't let me change it... I look forward to reading your book. I haven just written my own MS so I know it's a labour of love. Good luck! Lora Lee

KateGray

7/25/2008 5:22 AM PDT

For those coming in - make sure you click on the stars to vote. Comments are good, but the stars actually leave the vote behind!

Tess

7/24/2008 8:34 PM PDT

Great Story! some day I hope to get a children's book out there... I already started the illustrations! just haven't had the time to finish it...

Rafael_SW

7/24/2008 3:19 PM PDT

Thats really awesome. i ended up joining this site purely to rate your story =)
obviously i expect your support when i have my own publication.

Good work though.

Rafael (leader of The Myspace Writers Group)

CTmomster

7/24/2008 7:23 AM PDT

Great story!

Chris_Mitchell

7/24/2008 5:49 AM PDT

Good plot though the language was a little too strong for my tastes.

KarlLee

7/24/2008 3:08 AM PDT

Looking forward to reading the rest.

martyh

7/23/2008 10:32 PM PDT

niice.. ur pretty good.. can u give me some tips and also read my stories?? im only 12 years old.. but im not very good.. sooo yeah.. nice story.. im not done with mine yet.. but yeah..

KateGray

7/23/2008 6:18 PM PDT

Everyone else can send it their friends as well (don't mind the props!). So far, I think my family has procrastinated entirely on this, and I'm going to be having to wag my finger at them about it!

Ashleigh

7/23/2008 2:40 PM PDT

wow this is too awesome

Aloria

7/23/2008 11:45 AM PDT

If I could vote 10 times on this, I'd vote top marks every time.
this is totaly awesome and deserves to be published. I'm probably going to send the url to my friends and make them read it too, it's that awesome!

alankster

7/23/2008 12:02 AM PDT

Wow, i'm surprised by how well you describe the action in this story. Also, a very interesting beginning

westwood

7/22/2008 2:16 PM PDT

Your writing is quality adn you convey action very well... a seriously daunted task, and what you've done is great. However, I am confused. The first chapter set a contemporary feel, yet, we then segway into space. We also get too attached to the first character to lose her so quickly, at least that is my sense.

ducktoes

7/22/2008 9:10 AM PDT

Nice to see some tight, compelling storywriting here. And SCI FI! I'm excited about this project.

KSaltant

7/21/2008 5:00 PM PDT

Have not finished reading it yet, but am really enjoying it thus far. When reading scene details, I usually skip to the next dialogue, however, your descriptions of the surroundings are interesting and well written. Great job!

Casio_Blythe

7/20/2008 5:02 PM PDT

This is hands down the best thing I've read on WeBook so far. It unfortunately makes my work look like the writings of a third grader, but seriously. I loved your attention to the characters, something I really value in writing. Anyway, I voted for you and I really hope you win!

Tamara0449

7/20/2008 2:55 PM PDT

Kate, I found your story to be very interesting and voted for it. Please check out 'A Chosen Journey' under 'Body, Mind and Spirit' on Projects to Vote on it if you find it worthy.
Sincerely,
Tamara0449

Tamara0449

7/20/2008 2:51 PM PDT

Kate, I enjoyed reading some of your story and found it very interesting and almost sci-fiction torn between life. I want to vote for you story so do I click on where it says Vote Here above comments. Please check out my story again and if you find it worthy please Vote for 'A Chosen Journey' under 'Body, Mind and Spirit' on Projects. Sincerely, Tamara049

mjbcreative

7/19/2008 6:15 PM PDT

Love this! Your writing is great.

gonff

7/19/2008 3:08 PM PDT

awsome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Alhadji

7/19/2008 11:41 AM PDT

Sorry - gripping!!!!

Alhadji

7/19/2008 11:39 AM PDT

Excellent start - good characterisation and a griping, slightly unusual theme.

BenjaminAshley

7/19/2008 11:27 AM PDT

I have read the first five chapters of this story, and as a lover of science fiction, fantasy, and history, I really want this to win the publishing contest. As far as a title for this story, I would entitle it "Catching Zs and Commies." Maybe, "Sleeping Awake" could be another potential title. "Sleeping Beneath the Iron Curtain" is another possibility. I don't know; those are terrible suggestions. It's still a great concept and story.

K_B_Watts

7/19/2008 10:10 AM PDT

Really interesting--I love historical fiction.
Kathy

chord0

7/19/2008 9:24 AM PDT

this is a great story, about the struggles during the Cold War. Very interesting, lots of action. Historical speculation and science fiction, although it could have happened. It will be a great novel and with some work a good movie.

iwrite

7/19/2008 7:23 AM PDT

Nicely done. I always wanted to know the trick to writing like that.... feel free to clue me in at any time. :)
Nancy

nrhatch

7/19/2008 6:17 AM PDT

Well written. Good Luck!

KateGray

7/18/2008 7:05 AM PDT

I have always considered it to be a working title - open to any suggestions!

AndiJayne

7/18/2008 6:53 AM PDT

Needs a better title, but the story is intriguing and well-told.

Motomo

7/18/2008 6:28 AM PDT

Good Luck Kate

scouser7

7/18/2008 3:50 AM PDT

I really like this. Nice feel to it.
Must confess I've only just come across it so I haven't had chance to read fully but I like what I've read.

KateGray

7/17/2008 8:09 AM PDT

It's down to the wire! Thanks to everyone who has read so far - hope you come back to vote!

KateGray

7/4/2008 6:53 PM PDT

You're right - that's what I get for not rereading carefully enough!

KitFerguson

7/4/2008 8:40 AM PDT

'While what I've written is, a set-in-the-future fiction novel, but don't make the mistake of dismissing it as "just sci-fi". ' Try deleting the first comma and the but following the second comma.