Split Ends and Caramel Frappuccinos

Book Info

Project Leader:

Ashleigh

Participants:
The WEbook community

Who Can Write:
Project Leader Only

Format:
Poetry

Type:
Fiction

Genre:
Teen

Language:
English

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Split Ends and Caramel Frappuccinos

This is a collection of poetry I have written over the past eight years

Split Ends and Caramel Frappuccinos is a collection of poetry I have written over the past eight years, starting when I was ten up until now. Some of these are a few funny lines from a creative child, all the way up to my teenage experiences that dealt with love, friendship, loss, and heartache.

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RKRickerd

11/16/2008 02:24 PM PT

This is very good and I enjoyed it. What I don't understand with all of the comments below that have read also, Why are there only two thumbs up. I hope this starts a new trend for you I will give you the third Russ

writer122

11/14/2008 04:29 PM PT

you have my vote

Write4Fun

11/10/2008 06:00 PM PT

I love this one!

naiveandwitty

11/7/2008 11:40 AM PT

absolutely yes!

Cleveland

8/1/2008 01:23 PM PT

I like happy endings. i was afraid it was going to be one of those religion-bashing rants but then I got to the end and it was perfect. I like how you went from questioning and doubting to confident belief -- telling the whole story in such a simple way.

talisha

8/1/2008 08:55 AM PT

Bueatiful. I love your technique. Good luck.

Pradeep

7/31/2008 11:28 PM PT

I simply loved this poem! Enjoyed the metaphysical tone.

greerhart

7/31/2008 05:39 PM PT

very philasophical. You questioned religion really well there. "...Bible is called a sword." prbs my favourite part.

CaptainPoet

7/31/2008 01:08 PM PT

This is beautiful.

CaptainPoet

7/31/2008 01:03 PM PT

I love it!!! Very insightful!

Sydney_R

7/31/2008 12:36 PM PT

wow, I'd really like to hear this one sung in its true song form. do you have the music in your head, or did you write it up somewhere? well, anyway, these lyrics are really good and I love the phrase "Ill bow out now" its so final.

TylerJames3

7/31/2008 10:49 AM PT

hello, i am sorry it posted my feed back to your other poem under this one, i dont know why it did that.

but i could fosho see this being aired on MTV or on my ipod

the only question is if you would sing your own work or leave that to fergie or christina aguilara or madonna. no im kidding.

TylerJames3

7/31/2008 10:40 AM PT

this, my friend, is how you are supposed to use the tools of repetition and assonance. good stuff.

GLFernandez

7/31/2008 09:22 AM PT

That is a thought that fits the make up of my own life.

GLFernandez

7/31/2008 09:20 AM PT

This is as good as the first. You go girl.

GLFernandez

7/31/2008 09:19 AM PT

I am not a poet, but you seem to have the gift. I initially came to read your work just because you asked, but I stayed and kept reading because you are good enough to hold my interest. I have to give you five stars your ability. I enjoy your sense of imagery. I also like how your words illustrate emotion. I feel something, whether it be love, animosity, or sorrow. You have the ability to make me feel. I like that in a writer. Keep up the good work.

Mitch_McCracken

7/31/2008 06:36 AM PT

I'm not a poet and I know it! You are. I read your work because I asked you to read my Betsy Reno story. I didn't know what to expect, what I didn't expect was something this beautiful. I'm a romantic and this really touched me. You have a gift...don't stop. I give you 5 stars!

dittywriter

7/31/2008 12:30 AM PT

Keep up the good work.may your pen overflow with the recesses of your mind that are yet to be explored

Qrushqrusader

7/30/2008 09:55 PM PT

I can truely relate to this work. good job. Qrush

Nautical_Miles

7/30/2008 04:49 PM PT

I enjoy the sense of imagery, and how your words appeal to the emotions. I like that I can feel something, whether it be love, animosity, or sorrow.

Italianpoet

7/30/2008 01:35 PM PT

I have read a few of your writing and I appreciated this one the most. You have a great creative side, I thank you for the opportunity .

l_daniel_m

7/30/2008 09:52 AM PT

I was there! I felt that kiss... I saw the stars and heard the ocean waves! Thanx...

joyce

7/30/2008 07:27 AM PT

This is really good

Barbara_Terry

7/29/2008 09:12 PM PT

Passionately romantic, and there is magic in that moonlit kiss. I agree with the others too, you wrote an amazing love story, passionate, romantic, and image rich. Thank you for sharing.

peaceonelove

7/29/2008 07:38 PM PT

wow, those are some beautifuly chosen words, you have an amazing gift and you on the right path...stellar job!!!

Jordan_

7/29/2008 06:10 PM PT

OMG I LOVE THIS.
:]]]]] I love the last line...I just came back from my third year at a youth conference where the theme was "Witness".
You're really gifted...keep it upppp :D

pastelspring

7/29/2008 12:14 PM PT

wow

peoples_voices

7/29/2008 02:57 AM PT

thats pretty touchin is it about u?

peoples_voices

7/28/2008 02:43 PM PT

i think its pretty good keep it up.... but more from the heart

Ashleigh

7/28/2008 07:24 AM PT

thank you

Charmlessman

7/27/2008 10:00 PM PT

Straight to the point and done in a heart beat, I liked it. A little bit of what the world has become, with out a care not to give a second thought that life is short and none of us are forever. That is what I got from the poem, I read a thing not to long agoe that asked people what was the chances of an astroide hiting the earth If i remember it was 78% believed no it will never happen and 17% believed it was posible showing I think how people have forgoten how fragile life really is, any way thats what got from it that life in all forms seem to come and go with a blink of an eye and we should embrace it while we can.

cheers,

Casey_Masters

7/27/2008 03:59 PM PT

I wasn't sure what to say until the last two lines- they sold me on it. Not bad at all.

mattj

7/27/2008 02:25 AM PT

Wonderful! really good.

J_C_Bryant

7/26/2008 01:57 PM PT

Wow! I can picture the moment this takes place. We have all been there if we haven't then this is what it feel like. Hard to imagine how its possible that we do move on from moments such as these...but we do and are all the better for it.

J_C_Bryant

7/26/2008 01:53 PM PT

Really nicely written, I can almost hear the music that ought to be attached to these lyrics. I wish I knew how to write music!

XSavior

7/26/2008 08:37 AM PT

Elicits feelings...which is what I look for. Enjoyed it.

careyjonz95

7/26/2008 08:15 AM PT

i love the all is lost poem!

jdanbarnes

7/26/2008 06:03 AM PT

I think it's a great job. I enjoyed your poem, and wish there was some more of it.

If you have ever read the Left Behind books and watched the movie, it's a good illustration. In the books, 2 of the main characters accept Jesus though a great deal of struggle and inner turmoil. In the movies, they cry a little and then get that enlightened look on their face. My suggestion would be to move closer to the book, and see how it comes out to narrate some of the internal workings as the Holy Spirit draws the individual. Good poem!

DBell

7/25/2008 09:45 AM PT

....that was a really deep description of how love feels....particularly the burning type!! It def feels good when you are in love!.... you just got a new fan!...I think I'm in love now :-) (Jk)

hanlon

7/25/2008 06:28 AM PT

amazing poem ( all is lost ) very deep.

Mr_Big_Boy

7/24/2008 10:44 PM PT

wow
thas real good

baby_brie

7/24/2008 07:59 PM PT

your great i love your work. you should read some of the poems i write. there not as good as yours but they are okay. im a big fan you must been writting for years

moejoe

7/24/2008 07:23 PM PT

NICE TO NO I AM NOT ALONG YOU HAVE A GIFT THANKS YOUR WORDS CAN HEAL SOULS

Periwinkle

7/24/2008 05:17 PM PT

Your poems are great! I think it would be interesting to read them in the order that you wrote them.

teekieb

7/24/2008 10:01 AM PT

I'd love to hear this with some music, lovely words especially when you can relate to the feeling

DLGabriel

7/24/2008 12:32 AM PT

Stunning work throughout this project. Very heart-felt and honest. Your work truly captures the emotions brought out through them.

dragonpoet

7/23/2008 02:20 PM PT

I liked this work so far. I hope it gets into book format so that I could truely enjoy this work of art!

KateGray

7/23/2008 08:23 AM PT

I have already said how much I enjoyed these - good luck!

Hope you can come and look at my project in contention as well!
"Sleep"

levernw24

7/22/2008 09:28 PM PT

I like your style u kinda deep...u got talent -stay focused-

-KODAK

hugsANDkisses

7/22/2008 11:38 AM PT

this was really beautiful....woah.

TheOne

7/22/2008 11:02 AM PT

nice....ur poetry really makes me think...interesting....good stuff

annmur

7/21/2008 11:11 PM PT

That' really beautiful.
I especially like the second half.

Jamesg72

7/21/2008 10:56 PM PT

that's interesting and deep; Were you sad or depressed when you wrote it? How about a sequel "All Is Found Again" starting with the sunrise, new life, new love etc.