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The Character Creation Challenge
Some writers argue that stories live and die by the strength of their characters. Gut-wrenching plots and expertly crafted prose amount to zip if a reader can't engage with the characters.
With that sentiment in mind, this challenge will be all about character creation. Fill out the following information for a character you've either written about already, or made up on the spot. Try to be as specific and unique as possible.
Name:
Age:
Birth place:
Job:
Most admirable action:
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With that sentiment in mind, this challenge will be all about character creation. Fill out the following information for a character you've either written about already, or made up on the spot. Try to be as specific and unique as possible.
Name:
Age:
Birth place:
Job:
Most admirable action:
Least a ... more »
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11/19/2011 5:39 PM PST
Character Development:
David Spencer is a correctional officer for the Washington State Penitentiary in his hometown of Walla Walla. He has been employed with the WSP for nearly ten of his thirty plus years on this planet and, through the course of his career, has become callous and cold in order to survive the rigors of guarding the world against the worst humanity has to offer.
Though his expansive training in defense and combat clearly shine through as his most admirable traits which he has used more than once to protect survivors in his charge, his biting words and caustic wit often do their own damage on an already fragile group of scared souls, making nearly every action of opening his mouth an action which diminishes admiration.
Though he would never share his weaknesses with others, his greatest fears aren't the liberation of the many dregs of society he has sworn to keep in place but rather, that his own actions would put him in the same place as those below him. Sadly, his sickest desires bring him dangerously close to facing that fear as he often contemplates the elimination of the entire human race. A desire which he secretly acted upon recently during the zombie outbreak in which he gunned down an innocent woman more for his pleasure than to eliminate her living dead brother she was trying to protect.
Though his nihilistic philosophy is, "We're all meat, its only a matter of who eats who"; his steely resolve is a facade and the thing that would drive this man to tears is the threat of being truly alone, without those he loves or shuns. Sadly, all he needs to drive him to murder is the potential of dodging legal responsibility. This potential is one that is quickly realized when the zombie outbreak destroys his society.
David Spencer is a correctional officer for the Washington State Penitentiary in his hometown of Walla Walla. He has been employed with the WSP for nearly ten of his thirty plus years on this planet and, through the course of his career, has become callous and cold in order to survive the rigors of guarding the world against the worst humanity has to offer.
Though his expansive training in defense and combat clearly shine through as his most admirable traits which he has used more than once to protect survivors in his charge, his biting words and caustic wit often do their own damage on an already fragile group of scared souls, making nearly every action of opening his mouth an action which diminishes admiration.
Though he would never share his weaknesses with others, his greatest fears aren't the liberation of the many dregs of society he has sworn to keep in place but rather, that his own actions would put him in the same place as those below him. Sadly, his sickest desires bring him dangerously close to facing that fear as he often contemplates the elimination of the entire human race. A desire which he secretly acted upon recently during the zombie outbreak in which he gunned down an innocent woman more for his pleasure than to eliminate her living dead brother she was trying to protect.
Though his nihilistic philosophy is, "We're all meat, its only a matter of who eats who"; his steely resolve is a facade and the thing that would drive this man to tears is the threat of being truly alone, without those he loves or shuns. Sadly, all he needs to drive him to murder is the potential of dodging legal responsibility. This potential is one that is quickly realized when the zombie outbreak destroys his society.
8/24/2010 3:14 PM PDT
Just wanted to say I think this is an excellent exercise for any character. :)
7/19/2010 5:30 PM PDT
Name: Brandon Michael Foxe
Age: 18
Birth place: Evansdale, Oregon
Job: Student at Evansdale High; No current employment
Most admirable action: Giving up drugs and alcohol in fear of driving away the girl he's secretly in love with.
Least admirable action: Forcing his family to watch him be summered into the life of addict - seeming to want to fail in everything he does.
Greatest fear: Giving back into drugs because of his inner pain - which would lead to him losing his love.
Greatest desire: To marry and live happily ever after with his true love - never to be bothered by his dark past again.
Darkest secret: He was sexual abused by his cousin James when he was twelve, causing him to cope using narcotics and alcohol.
One sentence philosophy on life: Only miracles can bring people like me back into the light - and there is no such thing.
Things that would drive character to tears: The thought of his love leaving him or telling him he is no good.
Things that would drive character to murder: To find out that anyone had said or done to his love that would harm her or hurt her in any way or form.
Age: 18
Birth place: Evansdale, Oregon
Job: Student at Evansdale High; No current employment
Most admirable action: Giving up drugs and alcohol in fear of driving away the girl he's secretly in love with.
Least admirable action: Forcing his family to watch him be summered into the life of addict - seeming to want to fail in everything he does.
Greatest fear: Giving back into drugs because of his inner pain - which would lead to him losing his love.
Greatest desire: To marry and live happily ever after with his true love - never to be bothered by his dark past again.
Darkest secret: He was sexual abused by his cousin James when he was twelve, causing him to cope using narcotics and alcohol.
One sentence philosophy on life: Only miracles can bring people like me back into the light - and there is no such thing.
Things that would drive character to tears: The thought of his love leaving him or telling him he is no good.
Things that would drive character to murder: To find out that anyone had said or done to his love that would harm her or hurt her in any way or form.
7/9/2010 2:31 AM PDT
Name: Matthew Neuer
Age: 17
Birth place: Templeton, Massachusetts
Job: "Scoop boy" at the Ice Cream shop down the road, the only business within 3 miles.
Most admirable action: The smile he plastered on his face everyday, making everyone around him think he was as happy as they were.
Least admirable action: Lying to every single person he has ever met.
Greatest fear: That some one will find out his secrets.
Greatest desire: To one day live the life he wants to, and to be called Michelle.
Darkest secret: Every night, before he falls asleep, he prays that one day, he'll be a woman, and that one day, he can be himself with people he loves.
One sentence philosophy on life: Why should I let these people know who I am, when they don't even care to ask?
Things that would drive character to tears: Never being allowed to leave his cage of a town, never getting his dream.
Things that would drive character to murder: Someone forcing him to be someone he isn't, someone making him stay in Templeton.
Age: 17
Birth place: Templeton, Massachusetts
Job: "Scoop boy" at the Ice Cream shop down the road, the only business within 3 miles.
Most admirable action: The smile he plastered on his face everyday, making everyone around him think he was as happy as they were.
Least admirable action: Lying to every single person he has ever met.
Greatest fear: That some one will find out his secrets.
Greatest desire: To one day live the life he wants to, and to be called Michelle.
Darkest secret: Every night, before he falls asleep, he prays that one day, he'll be a woman, and that one day, he can be himself with people he loves.
One sentence philosophy on life: Why should I let these people know who I am, when they don't even care to ask?
Things that would drive character to tears: Never being allowed to leave his cage of a town, never getting his dream.
Things that would drive character to murder: Someone forcing him to be someone he isn't, someone making him stay in Templeton.
7/8/2010 1:02 PM PDT
Name: Casey Pastred
Age: 19
Birth Place: Winnipeg, Manitoba
Job: In Collage to be a Teacher
Most admirable action: Giving blood to a child who had a disease.
Least admirable action: Running over a cat
Greatest fear: Running over two cats. As she loves animals.
Greatest desire: She doesnt know
Darkest secret: She didnt flush.
Things that would drive the character to tears: No animals left on the planet.
Things that would drive her to murder: Nothing
Age: 19
Birth Place: Winnipeg, Manitoba
Job: In Collage to be a Teacher
Most admirable action: Giving blood to a child who had a disease.
Least admirable action: Running over a cat
Greatest fear: Running over two cats. As she loves animals.
Greatest desire: She doesnt know
Darkest secret: She didnt flush.
Things that would drive the character to tears: No animals left on the planet.
Things that would drive her to murder: Nothing
7/5/2010 3:43 PM PDT
Name: Emma Gabriel
Age: 28
Birth PLace: Louisville, Kentucky
Job: Emma doesn't consider what she does a job, to her it's a way of life. She's gifted with the ability to defend herself and others against evil forces that seek to do them wrong, but she didn't ask for this responsibilty; she took because someone had to.
Most Admirable Action: Will fight to the death anything( i.e., evil forces) that threaten to harm her or an innoncent being.
Least Admirable Action: Is obsessive to a fault in her regards to not being able to lead a normal life and expierence things like falling in love and being loved, getting married or having children.
Greatest Fear: That she will fail, dooming the people that she loves to certain death.
Greatest Desire: To become a normal woman and marry, have kids and white picket fence.
Darkest Secret: That she knows her destiny (though she lets on that she doesnt) and is almost certain she will die protecting her friends.
1 Sentence Philoshpy on Life: Those things that hide in the dark wont stay too long when I'm around.
Things that would drive her to tears: Losing her adoptive father.
Things that would drive her to murder: Losing her adoptive father.
Age: 28
Birth PLace: Louisville, Kentucky
Job: Emma doesn't consider what she does a job, to her it's a way of life. She's gifted with the ability to defend herself and others against evil forces that seek to do them wrong, but she didn't ask for this responsibilty; she took because someone had to.
Most Admirable Action: Will fight to the death anything( i.e., evil forces) that threaten to harm her or an innoncent being.
Least Admirable Action: Is obsessive to a fault in her regards to not being able to lead a normal life and expierence things like falling in love and being loved, getting married or having children.
Greatest Fear: That she will fail, dooming the people that she loves to certain death.
Greatest Desire: To become a normal woman and marry, have kids and white picket fence.
Darkest Secret: That she knows her destiny (though she lets on that she doesnt) and is almost certain she will die protecting her friends.
1 Sentence Philoshpy on Life: Those things that hide in the dark wont stay too long when I'm around.
Things that would drive her to tears: Losing her adoptive father.
Things that would drive her to murder: Losing her adoptive father.
7/2/2010 3:18 AM PDT
Name: Vera
Age: 31
Birth Place: She doesn't know.
Job: Unemployed
Most admirable action: Saving a little orphan girl from a being hit by a car and adopting her.
Least admirable action: Running away.
Greatest fear: Someone taking away her adopted daughter.
Darkest secret: Killing her sister.
One sentence philosophy on life: Live through life, one day at a time.
Things that would drive character to tears: Someone finding out about her past.
Things that would drive character to murder: Whoever steals her little girl.
Age: 31
Birth Place: She doesn't know.
Job: Unemployed
Most admirable action: Saving a little orphan girl from a being hit by a car and adopting her.
Least admirable action: Running away.
Greatest fear: Someone taking away her adopted daughter.
Darkest secret: Killing her sister.
One sentence philosophy on life: Live through life, one day at a time.
Things that would drive character to tears: Someone finding out about her past.
Things that would drive character to murder: Whoever steals her little girl.
6/29/2010 5:00 PM PDT
General:
Her name is Torrine she is 18yrs old. she just graduated from high school and is away at college in New York City. Torrine is a normal girl with normal ambitions. She thinks her life is pretty mediocre nothing to exciting happens to her, until one day a simple trip to the university library to study turns into a crazy web of lies that forces her to lead 2 different lives.
Plot:
Torrine spends the next 10 years of her life living 2 lives one a lie and one reality. She becomes a person that doesnt exist and falls in love with a man who doesnt know the real her.
Character Development:
Torrine becomes this liar who even at times suprises herself with the stories that she comes up with. No one knows of Torrines secret lie. THe man she falls or believes her lie to be true and in turn falls in love with her. She keeps him on a leash as far away from the actual her as possible. THings begin to get tricky as he pushes to meet her in person and to meet her family and friends. Torrines lies have to become much more elaborate and she has to make sure to keep up with all the deceit. She truly loves this man and he truly loves her but she knows nothing will come out of their relationship but hurt and pain as the truth will reveal itself
Structure:
Torrine is a pretty girl average height and a little on the chunky side. She is mixed a true mutt of many nationalities but she calls her self black and has an exotic look. Torrine has shoulder length curly brown hair and a light creamy butterscotch color with small brown freclkes on her nose and cheeks.
Tone/Voice:
Torrine has a smooth relaxing voice, some say she sounds like she is from a carribean island
Her name is Torrine she is 18yrs old. she just graduated from high school and is away at college in New York City. Torrine is a normal girl with normal ambitions. She thinks her life is pretty mediocre nothing to exciting happens to her, until one day a simple trip to the university library to study turns into a crazy web of lies that forces her to lead 2 different lives.
Plot:
Torrine spends the next 10 years of her life living 2 lives one a lie and one reality. She becomes a person that doesnt exist and falls in love with a man who doesnt know the real her.
Character Development:
Torrine becomes this liar who even at times suprises herself with the stories that she comes up with. No one knows of Torrines secret lie. THe man she falls or believes her lie to be true and in turn falls in love with her. She keeps him on a leash as far away from the actual her as possible. THings begin to get tricky as he pushes to meet her in person and to meet her family and friends. Torrines lies have to become much more elaborate and she has to make sure to keep up with all the deceit. She truly loves this man and he truly loves her but she knows nothing will come out of their relationship but hurt and pain as the truth will reveal itself
Structure:
Torrine is a pretty girl average height and a little on the chunky side. She is mixed a true mutt of many nationalities but she calls her self black and has an exotic look. Torrine has shoulder length curly brown hair and a light creamy butterscotch color with small brown freclkes on her nose and cheeks.
Tone/Voice:
Torrine has a smooth relaxing voice, some say she sounds like she is from a carribean island
6/23/2010 4:02 AM PDT
So sad that I missed this one! Characters are the most important part of any book -- from great characters spring great plots, right?
Great job to all those who participated!
Great job to all those who participated!
6/19/2010 4:56 AM PDT
General:
Her name is Sandra and she had just turned 16. She is a hunter and has performed no admirable actions through her life preferring to earn her money using under-hand techniques such as pickpocketing and theft. Living all her life with freedom her greatest fear is being trapped. Although she never lets it show, her greatest desire is a family. Her darkest secret is she is an alcoholic but where she lives everyone else is too.
Plot:
She doesn't know anything about her family, being abandoned at birth and sold into slavery. Now she lives as an underpaid hunter, roaming the forest for bounty.
Character Development:
Sandra turns from hunter to the most dangerous criminal on the streets and has soon developed a reputation for herself. However when she catches the attention of the King's Gaurds she ends up fighting for her life.
She lives with the philosophy "Kill or be killed."
Structure:
Sandra although well built is also very lithe. She has short black hair cropped unevenly. Her face is gaunt and bony. However amidst the ivory white skin explodes her eyes which is a bright sky-blue and is vibrant in contrast to the black and white of her face.
Tone/Voice:
She has a flowing and smooth voice that oozes self-confidence. She is also a very good singer.
Her name is Sandra and she had just turned 16. She is a hunter and has performed no admirable actions through her life preferring to earn her money using under-hand techniques such as pickpocketing and theft. Living all her life with freedom her greatest fear is being trapped. Although she never lets it show, her greatest desire is a family. Her darkest secret is she is an alcoholic but where she lives everyone else is too.
Plot:
She doesn't know anything about her family, being abandoned at birth and sold into slavery. Now she lives as an underpaid hunter, roaming the forest for bounty.
Character Development:
Sandra turns from hunter to the most dangerous criminal on the streets and has soon developed a reputation for herself. However when she catches the attention of the King's Gaurds she ends up fighting for her life.
She lives with the philosophy "Kill or be killed."
Structure:
Sandra although well built is also very lithe. She has short black hair cropped unevenly. Her face is gaunt and bony. However amidst the ivory white skin explodes her eyes which is a bright sky-blue and is vibrant in contrast to the black and white of her face.
Tone/Voice:
She has a flowing and smooth voice that oozes self-confidence. She is also a very good singer.
6/19/2010 1:24 AM PDT
General:
he is not overly tall, in fact he stands just a little under five feet seven inches, he is mysterious in a way, and has dealings with dark entities.
he is not in the habit of random violence, and plans his actions with extreme care. his plots and actions are complex enough to often be mistaken as random, but there are always score's of unseen connections that a truly clever person may follow.
Plot:
"every city has a devil, no no I"m not saying i have met this cities devil, you see i am him. and this is my story.
Character Development:
He fell in love with a gentle vampire girl, and when they killed her for loving a human he stole her power, and the power of many of her friends using trickery and alchemy. He's not really human anymore, but nor really vampyre or werewolf either, rather he is a tailor made creature with a repertoire of feats and abilities that make him formidable.
Structure:
normal human appearance really, bald early twenties looking. He has an eight pointed star embedded in his chest. his body is tight, not so much athletic as just dense and compact. His eye's are gray but change slightly according to moos. when angered they appear a very bright blue. when sad a dark cloudy green.
Tone/Voice:
his voice is light and conversational mostly. His collection and application of tone over valume in conversation make's him pleasant to listen to, if a bit unnerving.
he is not overly tall, in fact he stands just a little under five feet seven inches, he is mysterious in a way, and has dealings with dark entities.
he is not in the habit of random violence, and plans his actions with extreme care. his plots and actions are complex enough to often be mistaken as random, but there are always score's of unseen connections that a truly clever person may follow.
Plot:
"every city has a devil, no no I"m not saying i have met this cities devil, you see i am him. and this is my story.
Character Development:
He fell in love with a gentle vampire girl, and when they killed her for loving a human he stole her power, and the power of many of her friends using trickery and alchemy. He's not really human anymore, but nor really vampyre or werewolf either, rather he is a tailor made creature with a repertoire of feats and abilities that make him formidable.
Structure:
normal human appearance really, bald early twenties looking. He has an eight pointed star embedded in his chest. his body is tight, not so much athletic as just dense and compact. His eye's are gray but change slightly according to moos. when angered they appear a very bright blue. when sad a dark cloudy green.
Tone/Voice:
his voice is light and conversational mostly. His collection and application of tone over valume in conversation make's him pleasant to listen to, if a bit unnerving.
6/16/2010 2:19 AM PDT
I thought you were supposed to write a chapter for this. Not put it in comments. By the way, this could be a great way to rate someone's characters. Nice job Bnaslund
6/15/2010 12:43 PM PDT
Does anyone know when the results go up for this competition?
6/12/2010 7:44 PM PDT
Name: Jocelyn Ustrel
Age: 17
Birth place: England
Job: Volunteers at animal shelters
Most admirable action: Will help anyone in need of help
Least admirable action: biting her fingernails
Greatest fear:: blood and death
Greatest desire: to be able to do something to help the world
Darkest secret: She knows of the secret world of undead and dead creatures of the night.
One sentence philosophy on life: Always treasure your loved ones because you never know when they willl be taken away from you.
Things that would drive character to tears: Jocelyn is driven into tears at the thought of death to anyone closes to her.
Things that would drive character to murder: If the character were force to murder, she would rather murder herself but if her loved ones are in harm's way that is the only way she would be driven to murder.
Age: 17
Birth place: England
Job: Volunteers at animal shelters
Most admirable action: Will help anyone in need of help
Least admirable action: biting her fingernails
Greatest fear:: blood and death
Greatest desire: to be able to do something to help the world
Darkest secret: She knows of the secret world of undead and dead creatures of the night.
One sentence philosophy on life: Always treasure your loved ones because you never know when they willl be taken away from you.
Things that would drive character to tears: Jocelyn is driven into tears at the thought of death to anyone closes to her.
Things that would drive character to murder: If the character were force to murder, she would rather murder herself but if her loved ones are in harm's way that is the only way she would be driven to murder.
6/12/2010 11:20 AM PDT
Name: Tod
Age: 24
Birth place: NY, NY
Job: Employee
Most admirable action: Helps his dad with his lung condition
Least admirable action: Has a bad habit of being judgemental
Greatest fear: Not ever being able to quite smoking cigerattes
Greatest Desire: To be able to get at least somewhere with his boss Mikayla
Darkest secret: He was the reason for Michael's family's loss of their son
One sentence philosophy on life: Don't let life pass you by, take a risk before it all ends
Things that would drive character to tears: Realizing what people say about you
Things that would drive character to murder: Watching people laugh at your retarded brother (His brother was retarded from birth, the doctors couldnt get the embellacal cord off from around his brothers neck soon enough)
Age: 24
Birth place: NY, NY
Job: Employee
Most admirable action: Helps his dad with his lung condition
Least admirable action: Has a bad habit of being judgemental
Greatest fear: Not ever being able to quite smoking cigerattes
Greatest Desire: To be able to get at least somewhere with his boss Mikayla
Darkest secret: He was the reason for Michael's family's loss of their son
One sentence philosophy on life: Don't let life pass you by, take a risk before it all ends
Things that would drive character to tears: Realizing what people say about you
Things that would drive character to murder: Watching people laugh at your retarded brother (His brother was retarded from birth, the doctors couldnt get the embellacal cord off from around his brothers neck soon enough)
6/11/2010 2:03 AM PDT
Name: Myron
Age: 29
Birth place: Somewhere In Wyoming
Job: Accountant
Most admirable action: Makes sure he remembers everybody's birthday.
Least admirable action: Reading co-workers emails.
Greatest fear: Rejection.
Greatest desire: Confidence.
Darkest secret: Extreme loneliness.
One sentence philosophy on life: Work hard, play moderate.
Things that would drive character to tears: Self Realization.
Things that would drive character to murder: Embarrassment.
Age: 29
Birth place: Somewhere In Wyoming
Job: Accountant
Most admirable action: Makes sure he remembers everybody's birthday.
Least admirable action: Reading co-workers emails.
Greatest fear: Rejection.
Greatest desire: Confidence.
Darkest secret: Extreme loneliness.
One sentence philosophy on life: Work hard, play moderate.
Things that would drive character to tears: Self Realization.
Things that would drive character to murder: Embarrassment.
6/10/2010 9:04 PM PDT
Name: Hazel Baudeviere
Age: 22
Birth place: New Orleans. Daughter of a soldier and a whore.
Job: Vagabond/ Singer.
Most admirable action: Getting drunk, selling all of her possessions, and hitting the open road, heading west.
Least admirable action: Had sex with a man for money in an hour of intense self-loathing. This preceded the Most Admirable Action.
Greatest fear: Dying without self-actualization, and realizing that there truly is no Divine plan, that her theories of being a meaningless speck in the sea of mindless nothing that her universe consists of are indeed, accurate.
Greatest desire: To achieve some sort of peace.
Darkest secret: She practices voodoo in the graveyards at night.
One sentence philosophy on life: Proud are we that stood once Free.
Things that would drive character to tears: The underdog being beaten down.
Things that would drive character to murder: Someone putting their hands on her mother. Incidentally, it was a her mother's pimp. She fed him to the alligators, the smashed bullet that went through his head she keeps in an old music box her father left her when she was three.
Age: 22
Birth place: New Orleans. Daughter of a soldier and a whore.
Job: Vagabond/ Singer.
Most admirable action: Getting drunk, selling all of her possessions, and hitting the open road, heading west.
Least admirable action: Had sex with a man for money in an hour of intense self-loathing. This preceded the Most Admirable Action.
Greatest fear: Dying without self-actualization, and realizing that there truly is no Divine plan, that her theories of being a meaningless speck in the sea of mindless nothing that her universe consists of are indeed, accurate.
Greatest desire: To achieve some sort of peace.
Darkest secret: She practices voodoo in the graveyards at night.
One sentence philosophy on life: Proud are we that stood once Free.
Things that would drive character to tears: The underdog being beaten down.
Things that would drive character to murder: Someone putting their hands on her mother. Incidentally, it was a her mother's pimp. She fed him to the alligators, the smashed bullet that went through his head she keeps in an old music box her father left her when she was three.
6/10/2010 1:11 PM PDT
Name: Cinder Craven
Age: 17
Birth Place: The alleyways of the lower cities
Job: Unemployed
Most admirable action: Taking a street orphan under his wing
Least admirable action: Robbing and murdering several more fortunate families
Greatest fear: Being utterly alone at his time of death
Greatest desire: To find a home
Darkest secret: He has had several warning signs of oncoming insanity.
One sentence philosophy on life: Anyone can obtain what they want, it takes true heart to realize what you need.
Things that would drive character to tears: The death of a close friend (he has no family)
Things that would drive character to murder: Not much
Age: 17
Birth Place: The alleyways of the lower cities
Job: Unemployed
Most admirable action: Taking a street orphan under his wing
Least admirable action: Robbing and murdering several more fortunate families
Greatest fear: Being utterly alone at his time of death
Greatest desire: To find a home
Darkest secret: He has had several warning signs of oncoming insanity.
One sentence philosophy on life: Anyone can obtain what they want, it takes true heart to realize what you need.
Things that would drive character to tears: The death of a close friend (he has no family)
Things that would drive character to murder: Not much
6/9/2010 8:15 AM PDT
it's tittled: HALO
6/9/2010 8:15 AM PDT
Read mine please. I'll read and rate yours to. I'm just afriad my won't get looked at because it's on the very bottom. Please.
6/8/2010 11:42 AM PDT
Same here! Anyone who reads and comments on my work will recieve the same from me. It I have forgotten anyone, just shoot me a message :)
6/8/2010 9:43 AM PDT
I'm glad to see my rating climbing. I've notice this happening with each contest. I wish people wouldn't score my work when I first post because Webook comments only make entries better. If you were one of the early viewers who gave me a low score, please look again and reconsider the rating.
Once again, I always try to comment when folks comment on my work. If I didn't get to yours, please message me.
Thanks!
Once again, I always try to comment when folks comment on my work. If I didn't get to yours, please message me.
Thanks!
6/7/2010 8:15 PM PDT
When I first joined Webook, I posted my story in the comments section and missed being in the contest. To get feedback and be entered in the contest, you must push the blue button that reads, "Start a New Chapter" and post there.
6/7/2010 4:49 PM PDT
Name: Marie
Age: Looks to be about 16
Birth place: n/a
Job: Her job is to get rid of anyone that exposes her way of life.
Most admirable action: Sparing a humans life because she had a family that needed her.
Least admirable action: Killing people to protect her own kind
Marie is not human. She isnt an alien either. She is a species that lives on earth but hides from humans bc they "destroy everything they touch" They have many talents. Shape shifing, reading the minds of anyone thats seen death, levetation, and speaking to your mind, if you let your gaurd down they can control your emotions.
Greatest fear: That her people will be exosed
Greatest desire: To get rid of any information threatening to expose her people
Darkest secret: she is in love with a human
One sentence philosophy on life: "Live for what you love, protect people you care about, destroy everything that threatans it."
Things that would drive character to tears: Seeing one of her kind die
Things that would drive character to murder: finding out someone exposed her kind. She is very protective of her people.
Age: Looks to be about 16
Birth place: n/a
Job: Her job is to get rid of anyone that exposes her way of life.
Most admirable action: Sparing a humans life because she had a family that needed her.
Least admirable action: Killing people to protect her own kind
Marie is not human. She isnt an alien either. She is a species that lives on earth but hides from humans bc they "destroy everything they touch" They have many talents. Shape shifing, reading the minds of anyone thats seen death, levetation, and speaking to your mind, if you let your gaurd down they can control your emotions.
Greatest fear: That her people will be exosed
Greatest desire: To get rid of any information threatening to expose her people
Darkest secret: she is in love with a human
One sentence philosophy on life: "Live for what you love, protect people you care about, destroy everything that threatans it."
Things that would drive character to tears: Seeing one of her kind die
Things that would drive character to murder: finding out someone exposed her kind. She is very protective of her people.
6/7/2010 1:57 PM PDT
Name: Kenneth Clarke
Age: 37
Birth place: St. Louis, Missouri
Job: Investigative Journalist - or a reporter to you and me.
Most admirable action: Honesty. Ken looks at the world differently than most of us. He doesn't understand the American desire to bend the truth, lie, cheat. He is a good man, with a good heart.
Least admirable action: Lying. Ken looks at the world differently than most of us. He doesn't understand the American desire to always tell the truth. He isn't a good man, and does not have a good heart.
Greatest fear: Being figured out. Having someone he knows actually know all about him.
Greatest desire: Being figured out. Having someone he knows actually know all about him.
Darkest secret: Secret? Ken doesn't keep anything to himself. If you know Ken, you know everything about ken. There are no secrets in his world.
One sentence philosophy on life: Live life freely. Do not squander time, use your wit, use your intellect, use your mind to get the most out of your life.
Things that would drive character to tears: His girlfriend. She knows too much.
Things that would drive character to murder: His girlfriend. She knows too much.
Age: 37
Birth place: St. Louis, Missouri
Job: Investigative Journalist - or a reporter to you and me.
Most admirable action: Honesty. Ken looks at the world differently than most of us. He doesn't understand the American desire to bend the truth, lie, cheat. He is a good man, with a good heart.
Least admirable action: Lying. Ken looks at the world differently than most of us. He doesn't understand the American desire to always tell the truth. He isn't a good man, and does not have a good heart.
Greatest fear: Being figured out. Having someone he knows actually know all about him.
Greatest desire: Being figured out. Having someone he knows actually know all about him.
Darkest secret: Secret? Ken doesn't keep anything to himself. If you know Ken, you know everything about ken. There are no secrets in his world.
One sentence philosophy on life: Live life freely. Do not squander time, use your wit, use your intellect, use your mind to get the most out of your life.
Things that would drive character to tears: His girlfriend. She knows too much.
Things that would drive character to murder: His girlfriend. She knows too much.
6/4/2010 10:00 PM PDT
sorry for removing my submission but i need to really think it over...
6/4/2010 9:32 PM PDT
Name: Elsu the Wild
Age:23
Birth place: The back of a trade wagon skirting the edge of the Fae's forest. Bandits attacked his trader parents and he is orphaned into the care of the mysterious, sometimes man-eating beings inhabiting the forest
Job: Sellsword, soldier, and semi-talented mage. When he leaves the forest of his childhood, he travels with a small group of scholars and a mercenary for a while, the latter of which sort of adopts him and teaches him his trade. As war escalates between the Monarchy of Favlend and the Commonwealth of Gald, he is drafted into the army and eventually becomes the captain of a small band separated from the main army in the invasion of Kurisdale. Throughout his time in civilized lands he takes odd jobs as a mage, though his talent isn't technically magic in the same sense as what is widely practiced.
Most admirable action: During an attack on the only non-sea route between Favlend and Gald, a small pass between the deadly forest of the Fae and the Ocean, Elsu and his band collapse the land pass into the ocean through a combination of "magic" and civil engineering, holding back Gald's first legion and turning the war around.
Least admirable action: Second least admirable action deserves an honerable mention;On the night of a party in his honor commemorating his deeds in war, Elsu sneaks into the King's chambers and slays the ruler in his sleep. The king had done nothing wrong, but had instead been an obstacle that was inadvertently causing unrest among the populace, and so Elsu kills him to prevent civil war. He is greatly ashamed of this kill, especially since the man's son was his good friend, but he firmly believes that it needed to be done and does not regret it.
Absolute least admirable action is when he lays an entire town to waste using his "magic" while in the throes of an unbelievable rage caused by the death his mentor, Boa.
Greatest fear: Elsu greatly fears a bloody civil war caused by friction between those who can use magic and those who don't. He fears Galdish rule of Favlend even more. More than that, Elsu fears the loss of what few friends he has in civilized lands, namely that of his love interest Kana. But above all, he fears that he will lose control again one day and get lost in the pattern of hatred and death, causing untold damage to the surrounding countryside and possibly killing his friends.
Greatest desire: Elsu's greatest desire for most of the story is to return to the forest of his childhood, even though the Fae more or less kicked him out, but as he grows his desire expands to learn all the patterns of the world, these patterns forming the basis for his "magic", an example being the pattern of the wind letting him step "into the wind" and vanish into the folds of air, traveling swiftly without being seen. He hopes that when he has learned enough patterns, he can quell the pattern of rage that occasionally surfaces in him once and for all.
Darkest secret: The burial location of Traznyr, the queen of demons, a legendary figure who once sucked the blood from Astek, the Father of Gods. Traznyr is imprisoned by Mahraghen, an ancient king of trees that was buried beneath the mountains in the catastrophic final battle between Astek and Traznyr. If a few select members of Astek's brood discovered this location, they would seek to release her and set hell loose on the planet.
One sentence philosophy on life: "Between gods and men, the only difference is the scale of their folly."
Things that would drive character to tears: The death of his closest friends, including Boa, Kana, and Tedlu, his father figure among the Fae. He also weeps as he is forced to kill the King of Favlend and the first time he witnesses the widespread destruction of war, and whenever he loses control to his inner demons and commits violent acts he didn't mean.
Things that would drive character to murder: Assuming murder as not counting warfare, if the perceived "greater good" requires it, and on one occasion, a blind rage that consumes the population of an entire town. At other times he performs vicious acts of torture bringing enemies so close to death they begin begging for it, and then leaving them to die.
Age:23
Birth place: The back of a trade wagon skirting the edge of the Fae's forest. Bandits attacked his trader parents and he is orphaned into the care of the mysterious, sometimes man-eating beings inhabiting the forest
Job: Sellsword, soldier, and semi-talented mage. When he leaves the forest of his childhood, he travels with a small group of scholars and a mercenary for a while, the latter of which sort of adopts him and teaches him his trade. As war escalates between the Monarchy of Favlend and the Commonwealth of Gald, he is drafted into the army and eventually becomes the captain of a small band separated from the main army in the invasion of Kurisdale. Throughout his time in civilized lands he takes odd jobs as a mage, though his talent isn't technically magic in the same sense as what is widely practiced.
Most admirable action: During an attack on the only non-sea route between Favlend and Gald, a small pass between the deadly forest of the Fae and the Ocean, Elsu and his band collapse the land pass into the ocean through a combination of "magic" and civil engineering, holding back Gald's first legion and turning the war around.
Least admirable action: Second least admirable action deserves an honerable mention;On the night of a party in his honor commemorating his deeds in war, Elsu sneaks into the King's chambers and slays the ruler in his sleep. The king had done nothing wrong, but had instead been an obstacle that was inadvertently causing unrest among the populace, and so Elsu kills him to prevent civil war. He is greatly ashamed of this kill, especially since the man's son was his good friend, but he firmly believes that it needed to be done and does not regret it.
Absolute least admirable action is when he lays an entire town to waste using his "magic" while in the throes of an unbelievable rage caused by the death his mentor, Boa.
Greatest fear: Elsu greatly fears a bloody civil war caused by friction between those who can use magic and those who don't. He fears Galdish rule of Favlend even more. More than that, Elsu fears the loss of what few friends he has in civilized lands, namely that of his love interest Kana. But above all, he fears that he will lose control again one day and get lost in the pattern of hatred and death, causing untold damage to the surrounding countryside and possibly killing his friends.
Greatest desire: Elsu's greatest desire for most of the story is to return to the forest of his childhood, even though the Fae more or less kicked him out, but as he grows his desire expands to learn all the patterns of the world, these patterns forming the basis for his "magic", an example being the pattern of the wind letting him step "into the wind" and vanish into the folds of air, traveling swiftly without being seen. He hopes that when he has learned enough patterns, he can quell the pattern of rage that occasionally surfaces in him once and for all.
Darkest secret: The burial location of Traznyr, the queen of demons, a legendary figure who once sucked the blood from Astek, the Father of Gods. Traznyr is imprisoned by Mahraghen, an ancient king of trees that was buried beneath the mountains in the catastrophic final battle between Astek and Traznyr. If a few select members of Astek's brood discovered this location, they would seek to release her and set hell loose on the planet.
One sentence philosophy on life: "Between gods and men, the only difference is the scale of their folly."
Things that would drive character to tears: The death of his closest friends, including Boa, Kana, and Tedlu, his father figure among the Fae. He also weeps as he is forced to kill the King of Favlend and the first time he witnesses the widespread destruction of war, and whenever he loses control to his inner demons and commits violent acts he didn't mean.
Things that would drive character to murder: Assuming murder as not counting warfare, if the perceived "greater good" requires it, and on one occasion, a blind rage that consumes the population of an entire town. At other times he performs vicious acts of torture bringing enemies so close to death they begin begging for it, and then leaving them to die.
6/4/2010 8:57 AM PDT
Am I a Hero?
In his last weeks, as he lay dying, over and over he asked, “Am I a hero?”
I found it distressing because in spite of our reassurances his voice quavered as he picked at the scab of his doubtings.
Yes, he was a hero. When he enlisted in the Army Air Corps (WWII) he served for three long years away from home, not even a short visit after he had completed his training in Nebraska, but shipped overseas to make sure the planes were fit to fly.
He was required to fly with the crew in planes that he had repaired. His official title was “Flight Engineer,” but he preferred “Airplane Mechanic.” Their highly explosive cargo, barrels of High Octane gasoline, transported “over the hump” between China and India, made it a nervous ride.
His return home was not as the crow flies but rather as circuitous as a serpent ‘s tail. He was dropped off and picked up in one exotic location after another. He saw the world but missed the party. The party his family threw for the heroes returned from the wars: two of his brothers, two nephews, and a number of in-laws. But they were not called heroes back then. It was expected that the young enlistees and draftees would, and should, defend their country.
So now he lay petulant, his brain addled by Alzheimer’s, feeling un-hero-like and unimportant. He knew he was dying and I suspect that he wanted to take something with him, a major accomplishment worthy of reward.
After he died I thought to return to the novel I was writing. I had stopped writing before his final illness (a massive growth in his chest) because I could not handle his dying and the three upcoming deaths in my novel. I was ill as well, not always thinking coherently, certain that I, too, was dying.
Post mortem I embarked on an interval of feeling sorry for myself. About six months earlier our cat, Orpheus, had died and I’d cried uncontrollably for three months, and incredibly almost every day. But when my husband died I didn’t cry. Perhaps I felt that if I started crying I would never stop, or maybe the crying over Orpheus was my grieving for my husband in advance. Who understands the mechanism of grief, anyway? I don’t.
In his last weeks, as he lay dying, over and over he asked, “Am I a hero?”
I found it distressing because in spite of our reassurances his voice quavered as he picked at the scab of his doubtings.
Yes, he was a hero. When he enlisted in the Army Air Corps (WWII) he served for three long years away from home, not even a short visit after he had completed his training in Nebraska, but shipped overseas to make sure the planes were fit to fly.
He was required to fly with the crew in planes that he had repaired. His official title was “Flight Engineer,” but he preferred “Airplane Mechanic.” Their highly explosive cargo, barrels of High Octane gasoline, transported “over the hump” between China and India, made it a nervous ride.
His return home was not as the crow flies but rather as circuitous as a serpent ‘s tail. He was dropped off and picked up in one exotic location after another. He saw the world but missed the party. The party his family threw for the heroes returned from the wars: two of his brothers, two nephews, and a number of in-laws. But they were not called heroes back then. It was expected that the young enlistees and draftees would, and should, defend their country.
So now he lay petulant, his brain addled by Alzheimer’s, feeling un-hero-like and unimportant. He knew he was dying and I suspect that he wanted to take something with him, a major accomplishment worthy of reward.
After he died I thought to return to the novel I was writing. I had stopped writing before his final illness (a massive growth in his chest) because I could not handle his dying and the three upcoming deaths in my novel. I was ill as well, not always thinking coherently, certain that I, too, was dying.
Post mortem I embarked on an interval of feeling sorry for myself. About six months earlier our cat, Orpheus, had died and I’d cried uncontrollably for three months, and incredibly almost every day. But when my husband died I didn’t cry. Perhaps I felt that if I started crying I would never stop, or maybe the crying over Orpheus was my grieving for my husband in advance. Who understands the mechanism of grief, anyway? I don’t.
6/3/2010 7:48 PM PDT
Name: Kat-Yen; renamed "Kat" by her 1st master
Age: 17-21 years old
Birth Place: A small hut with a dried-grass roof, last and lingering memory of home is looking up at the grass-roof ablaze as her fellow villagers are cut down in a raid by the "civilized ones"
Job: Slave; Kat has clawed her way up the slave ladder in her 1st master's home. Her wise and at times conniving mannerism have rendered her irreplaceable in her master's home until she is sold via her own devious plan to make her 1st master more money.
Most admirable action: Refusing to use her body to gain ground in an admirer's eye that could give her freedom, at the cost of her 2nd master, who secretly loves Kat's admirer.
The unwillingness to use her body to gain ground and favor in a wealthy friend of her 2nd master. Were she to indulge his love for her, her 2nd master would certainly be devastated, esp. since Kat's 2nd master loves her friend immensely.
Least admirable action: Creating a scheme for her 1st master to cover the expenses of stolen property and gold stolen by a lower slave. The scheme entails a slave and a golden statue to be presented and "raffled off", little will the winner know that it is the slave or "figure" they will be winning instead of the slave. By a twist of fate, Kat is the slave who is raffled off.
Greatest fear: Returning the love of a friend of her 2nd master. If she does she will never be able to freely leave the place she has sworn to loathe for all eternity. Kat fears that her selfish persona that has kept her alive during her enslavement will be lost in the overwhelming and unselfish love that is burning out of control within. Were she to give in she will lose all hope of returning to her homeland.
Greatest desire: Kat yearns to be free and return to her homeland, but she wants to leave with power and authority instead of a worthless runaway who is forgotten. She yearns to break a thousand hearts when she leaves the land of her captors in exchange for the thousand heartbreaks she endured during her 7 years of hell as well as the loss of her village sweetheart.
Darkest secret: Kat was a member of a certain tribe in her homeland that forbids its members to marry or fornicate with foreigners. Anyone who does so can never return to the heaven-like land of Kat's tribe. Kat finds that remaining a virgin until she returns is extremely difficult in a land where slaves earn small privileges with one-night stands with their masters and/or superiors and at times, even fellow slaves.
Were her secret to be found out, there would be plenty of foreign men who would love to sleep with Kat out of spite.
One sentence philosophy on life: If the enemy made you bleed, keep it secret until you can take ten fold the blood they took from you.
Things that would drive character to tears: The heartache of being torn between a rare, kind and loving foreigner and the heavenly realm of her homeland. As well as the possibility of never being able to return home/ having nothing to return to.
Things that would drive character to murder: Someone attempting to rape her; Kat's virginity (or lack of) is the only thing that can truly keep her from returning to her homeland. Kat's sense of innocence and empathy have long been dead. Kat's original value was based on the fact that she nearly beat a fellow countrywoman to death because it had been the woman's infant's crying that had caused their capture as well as the death of her sweetheart. The appeal of a young beautiful woman who could commit mutiny against her own people was considered a trait of devout loyalty to a future master.
Age: 17-21 years old
Birth Place: A small hut with a dried-grass roof, last and lingering memory of home is looking up at the grass-roof ablaze as her fellow villagers are cut down in a raid by the "civilized ones"
Job: Slave; Kat has clawed her way up the slave ladder in her 1st master's home. Her wise and at times conniving mannerism have rendered her irreplaceable in her master's home until she is sold via her own devious plan to make her 1st master more money.
Most admirable action: Refusing to use her body to gain ground in an admirer's eye that could give her freedom, at the cost of her 2nd master, who secretly loves Kat's admirer.
The unwillingness to use her body to gain ground and favor in a wealthy friend of her 2nd master. Were she to indulge his love for her, her 2nd master would certainly be devastated, esp. since Kat's 2nd master loves her friend immensely.
Least admirable action: Creating a scheme for her 1st master to cover the expenses of stolen property and gold stolen by a lower slave. The scheme entails a slave and a golden statue to be presented and "raffled off", little will the winner know that it is the slave or "figure" they will be winning instead of the slave. By a twist of fate, Kat is the slave who is raffled off.
Greatest fear: Returning the love of a friend of her 2nd master. If she does she will never be able to freely leave the place she has sworn to loathe for all eternity. Kat fears that her selfish persona that has kept her alive during her enslavement will be lost in the overwhelming and unselfish love that is burning out of control within. Were she to give in she will lose all hope of returning to her homeland.
Greatest desire: Kat yearns to be free and return to her homeland, but she wants to leave with power and authority instead of a worthless runaway who is forgotten. She yearns to break a thousand hearts when she leaves the land of her captors in exchange for the thousand heartbreaks she endured during her 7 years of hell as well as the loss of her village sweetheart.
Darkest secret: Kat was a member of a certain tribe in her homeland that forbids its members to marry or fornicate with foreigners. Anyone who does so can never return to the heaven-like land of Kat's tribe. Kat finds that remaining a virgin until she returns is extremely difficult in a land where slaves earn small privileges with one-night stands with their masters and/or superiors and at times, even fellow slaves.
Were her secret to be found out, there would be plenty of foreign men who would love to sleep with Kat out of spite.
One sentence philosophy on life: If the enemy made you bleed, keep it secret until you can take ten fold the blood they took from you.
Things that would drive character to tears: The heartache of being torn between a rare, kind and loving foreigner and the heavenly realm of her homeland. As well as the possibility of never being able to return home/ having nothing to return to.
Things that would drive character to murder: Someone attempting to rape her; Kat's virginity (or lack of) is the only thing that can truly keep her from returning to her homeland. Kat's sense of innocence and empathy have long been dead. Kat's original value was based on the fact that she nearly beat a fellow countrywoman to death because it had been the woman's infant's crying that had caused their capture as well as the death of her sweetheart. The appeal of a young beautiful woman who could commit mutiny against her own people was considered a trait of devout loyalty to a future master.
6/2/2010 9:47 PM PDT
Name: Irene Zastrow
Age: 96
Birth place: Madison, Wisconsin
Job: Retired. used to be a seamstress
Most admirable action: Putting out a fire with her hands and a few wet towels, a large fire.
Least admirable action: Leaving her daughter to get to the hospital by herself when she sliced her hand open because she couldn't get off work.
Greatest fear: Losing her family before she can say that she loves them one more time.
Greatest desire: To live to see her great-grandchildren become adults.
Darkest secret: She murdered someone when she was 32 because they tried to kill her son.
One sentence philosophy on life: You only have one life to live so live it.
Things that would drive character to tears: She'd break down sobbing is she saw her family fighting or if someone was hurting someone innocent, even just an animal on the street.
Things that would drive character to murder: After seeing blood on her hands once she would rather die than murder again.
P.S. This may not be original but other than the murder fact, this is a tribute to my great-grandma that just passed away because of a fire. Most of it is real.
Age: 96
Birth place: Madison, Wisconsin
Job: Retired. used to be a seamstress
Most admirable action: Putting out a fire with her hands and a few wet towels, a large fire.
Least admirable action: Leaving her daughter to get to the hospital by herself when she sliced her hand open because she couldn't get off work.
Greatest fear: Losing her family before she can say that she loves them one more time.
Greatest desire: To live to see her great-grandchildren become adults.
Darkest secret: She murdered someone when she was 32 because they tried to kill her son.
One sentence philosophy on life: You only have one life to live so live it.
Things that would drive character to tears: She'd break down sobbing is she saw her family fighting or if someone was hurting someone innocent, even just an animal on the street.
Things that would drive character to murder: After seeing blood on her hands once she would rather die than murder again.
P.S. This may not be original but other than the murder fact, this is a tribute to my great-grandma that just passed away because of a fire. Most of it is real.
6/2/2010 7:26 PM PDT
Name: 'Big Daddy Cash'
Description of his Life: 'Big Daddy Cash'
The life of 'Big Daddy Cash' could keep you reading for hours. I see 'Big Daddy Cash' first of all as a long lost friend whom I want to have contact with once again. He has been my inspiration and kept me writing for quite a while. Big Daddy Cash' has lived a long life full of love for his children and his Wife that walked out on him.
Least Admirable Actions: He also lived a life of meaness, drunkeness, tough guy that wouldn't give you a break, and a man that had his own place in the Mafia.
Greatest Fear: He feared that he would die a lonely old man.
Greatest Desire: He softened with age and found his friendship with his dogs and his tenants; this is when he found that love was waiting for him in the darkness of night. He became gentle and caring for others and was not only a landlord but a best friend, grandpa, and confidant to his tenants.
Greatest Fear: He was afraid of being alone. As he grew older and found it hard to get around he became familiar with the computer and found weBooks.com to pull him out of a deep depression. Yes, he had his dogs as his family but he longed for something more.
Greatest Desire: 'Big Daddy Cash' began writing poetry and short stories to share with others. His poetry shared his lifes stories and brightened the days for many who were down and out.
Darkest Secret: 'Big Daddy has secrets about his life that would make you shudder with fear of all that he has done in his life. He has tried to make all of his sins be forgiven by loving God the Father and reaching out to others to give back happiness instead of breaking hearts and tearing lives apart.
One Sentence philosophy on life: If it doesn't kill you, it will make you stronger.
Things that will bring character to tears 'Big Daddy Cash' knew just what to say to make you smile and laugh when you felt like crying. He was and is everyone's best friend on whom you can rely on. His Spirit will always remain in our hearts forever when he leaves this world because he has shared so much of his heart and soul with anyone that he met.
Things that would drive Character to murder: The things that would drive 'Big Daddy Cash' to murder would be to see someone abusing a child or an animal. He also detests men who beat their wives, all of these actions sets a fire in his heart that could make him want to commit murder. I am sure that he would find another way to end any torture rather than murder another person. His heart is too soft to murder any other person.
Best Friend: 'Big Daddy Cash' has been one of my Supporters and best friend that has made me feel good about myself. He made me smile, laugh and wonder at the life that he has led and where it brought him back to know what life is supposed to mean to you. His love is so bright, he share his heart and support with anyone that he meets. He knows no stranger and has been one of the best writers and friend that anyone could meet on weBook.com. I want everyone to know and love my best friend for his compassion, willingness to help others with their poetry or even their lifes problems. He is an Angel to all of us and I praise him for giving so much of himself.
Description of his Life: 'Big Daddy Cash'
The life of 'Big Daddy Cash' could keep you reading for hours. I see 'Big Daddy Cash' first of all as a long lost friend whom I want to have contact with once again. He has been my inspiration and kept me writing for quite a while. Big Daddy Cash' has lived a long life full of love for his children and his Wife that walked out on him.
Least Admirable Actions: He also lived a life of meaness, drunkeness, tough guy that wouldn't give you a break, and a man that had his own place in the Mafia.
Greatest Fear: He feared that he would die a lonely old man.
Greatest Desire: He softened with age and found his friendship with his dogs and his tenants; this is when he found that love was waiting for him in the darkness of night. He became gentle and caring for others and was not only a landlord but a best friend, grandpa, and confidant to his tenants.
Greatest Fear: He was afraid of being alone. As he grew older and found it hard to get around he became familiar with the computer and found weBooks.com to pull him out of a deep depression. Yes, he had his dogs as his family but he longed for something more.
Greatest Desire: 'Big Daddy Cash' began writing poetry and short stories to share with others. His poetry shared his lifes stories and brightened the days for many who were down and out.
Darkest Secret: 'Big Daddy has secrets about his life that would make you shudder with fear of all that he has done in his life. He has tried to make all of his sins be forgiven by loving God the Father and reaching out to others to give back happiness instead of breaking hearts and tearing lives apart.
One Sentence philosophy on life: If it doesn't kill you, it will make you stronger.
Things that will bring character to tears 'Big Daddy Cash' knew just what to say to make you smile and laugh when you felt like crying. He was and is everyone's best friend on whom you can rely on. His Spirit will always remain in our hearts forever when he leaves this world because he has shared so much of his heart and soul with anyone that he met.
Things that would drive Character to murder: The things that would drive 'Big Daddy Cash' to murder would be to see someone abusing a child or an animal. He also detests men who beat their wives, all of these actions sets a fire in his heart that could make him want to commit murder. I am sure that he would find another way to end any torture rather than murder another person. His heart is too soft to murder any other person.
Best Friend: 'Big Daddy Cash' has been one of my Supporters and best friend that has made me feel good about myself. He made me smile, laugh and wonder at the life that he has led and where it brought him back to know what life is supposed to mean to you. His love is so bright, he share his heart and support with anyone that he meets. He knows no stranger and has been one of the best writers and friend that anyone could meet on weBook.com. I want everyone to know and love my best friend for his compassion, willingness to help others with their poetry or even their lifes problems. He is an Angel to all of us and I praise him for giving so much of himself.
6/2/2010 6:53 PM PDT
'Big Daddy Cash'
The life of 'Big Daddy Cash' could keep you reading for hours.
I see 'Big Daddy Cash' first of all as a long lost friend whom I want to have contact with once again. He has been my inspiration and kept me writing for quite a while. 'Big Daddy Cash' has lived a long life full of love for his children and his Wife that walked out on him. He also lived a life of meaness, drunkeness, tough guy that wouldn't give you a break, and a man that had his own place in the Mafia. He also softened with age and found his friendship with his dogs and his tenants; this is when he found that love was waiting for him in the darkness of night. He became gentle and caring for others and was not only a landlord but a best friend, grandpa, and confidant to his tenants.
As he grew older and found it hard to get around he became familiar with the computer and found weBooks.com to pull him out of a deep depression. Yes, he had his dogs as his family but he longed for something more.
'Big Daddy Cash' began writing poetry and short stories to share with others. His poetry shared his lifes stories and brightened the days for many who were down and out. 'Big Daddy Cash' knew just what to say to make you smile and laugh when you felt like crying. He was and is everyone's best friend on whom you can rely on. His Spirit will always remain in our hearts forever when he leaves this world because he has shared so much of his heart and soul with anyone that he met.
'Big Daddy Cash' has been one of my Supporters and best friend that made me feel good about myself. He made me smile, laugh and wonder at the life that he has led and where it brought him back to know what life is supposed to mean to you. His love is so bright, he share his heart and support with anyone that he meets. He knows no stranger and has been one of the best writers and friend that anyone could meet on weBook.com. I want everyone to know and love my best friend for his compassion, willingness to help others with their poetry or even their lifes problems. He is an Angel to all of us and I praise him for giving so much of himself.
The life of 'Big Daddy Cash' could keep you reading for hours.
I see 'Big Daddy Cash' first of all as a long lost friend whom I want to have contact with once again. He has been my inspiration and kept me writing for quite a while. 'Big Daddy Cash' has lived a long life full of love for his children and his Wife that walked out on him. He also lived a life of meaness, drunkeness, tough guy that wouldn't give you a break, and a man that had his own place in the Mafia. He also softened with age and found his friendship with his dogs and his tenants; this is when he found that love was waiting for him in the darkness of night. He became gentle and caring for others and was not only a landlord but a best friend, grandpa, and confidant to his tenants.
As he grew older and found it hard to get around he became familiar with the computer and found weBooks.com to pull him out of a deep depression. Yes, he had his dogs as his family but he longed for something more.
'Big Daddy Cash' began writing poetry and short stories to share with others. His poetry shared his lifes stories and brightened the days for many who were down and out. 'Big Daddy Cash' knew just what to say to make you smile and laugh when you felt like crying. He was and is everyone's best friend on whom you can rely on. His Spirit will always remain in our hearts forever when he leaves this world because he has shared so much of his heart and soul with anyone that he met.
'Big Daddy Cash' has been one of my Supporters and best friend that made me feel good about myself. He made me smile, laugh and wonder at the life that he has led and where it brought him back to know what life is supposed to mean to you. His love is so bright, he share his heart and support with anyone that he meets. He knows no stranger and has been one of the best writers and friend that anyone could meet on weBook.com. I want everyone to know and love my best friend for his compassion, willingness to help others with their poetry or even their lifes problems. He is an Angel to all of us and I praise him for giving so much of himself.
6/2/2010 6:00 PM PDT
Name: Nolan Amadeus Reed
Age: 25
Birthplace: Vermont
Job: Actor and playwrite
Most admirable action: (General) Helping anyone he can, whenever he can. (Specific Instance) Jumped into a lake to save a little girl who was drowning.
Least admirable action: Didn't stand by his friend, and let him take the fall for something he didn't do in order to fit in at school.
Greatest fear: Failure to fulfill his dreams
Greatest desire: To be a successful playwrite and actor
Darkest secret: He's never been in love. Even though he's 25 and has had girlfriends he has never been in love and this makes him sad and feels like he's missing something in his life.
One sentence philosophy on life: Everything happens for a reason.
Things that would drive character to tears: Being completly helpless; not being able to help someone who really needed it.
Things that would drive character to murder: He is not a very confrontational person so it would take A LOT! Nolan would murder someone if it was absoluetly neccessary in saving his life or the lives of people he cares about.
Age: 25
Birthplace: Vermont
Job: Actor and playwrite
Most admirable action: (General) Helping anyone he can, whenever he can. (Specific Instance) Jumped into a lake to save a little girl who was drowning.
Least admirable action: Didn't stand by his friend, and let him take the fall for something he didn't do in order to fit in at school.
Greatest fear: Failure to fulfill his dreams
Greatest desire: To be a successful playwrite and actor
Darkest secret: He's never been in love. Even though he's 25 and has had girlfriends he has never been in love and this makes him sad and feels like he's missing something in his life.
One sentence philosophy on life: Everything happens for a reason.
Things that would drive character to tears: Being completly helpless; not being able to help someone who really needed it.
Things that would drive character to murder: He is not a very confrontational person so it would take A LOT! Nolan would murder someone if it was absoluetly neccessary in saving his life or the lives of people he cares about.
6/2/2010 2:14 PM PDT
This is pretty fun. like the other one! Once again. I was late and now my little person is at the end :(
But.....It's called Bell Witheridge! So, Check it out!(:
But.....It's called Bell Witheridge! So, Check it out!(:
6/2/2010 2:08 PM PDT
Name: Junsu
Age: 16
Birth place: Tokyo Japan
Job: Singer
Most admirable action: Helping others in need.
Least admirable action: Being stubborn
Greatest fear: Losing someone important
Greatest desire: Finding true love
Darkest secret: Accidently killing his family in a house fire
One sentence philosophy on life: Don't leave anyone behind
Things that would drive character to tears: Remembering his family
Things that would drive character to murder: Self-defence; like if you were trying to kill him
Age: 16
Birth place: Tokyo Japan
Job: Singer
Most admirable action: Helping others in need.
Least admirable action: Being stubborn
Greatest fear: Losing someone important
Greatest desire: Finding true love
Darkest secret: Accidently killing his family in a house fire
One sentence philosophy on life: Don't leave anyone behind
Things that would drive character to tears: Remembering his family
Things that would drive character to murder: Self-defence; like if you were trying to kill him
6/2/2010 12:16 PM PDT
Name: Carl Rivers
Age: 30-something
Birth place: Pittsfield, MA
Job: Unemployed/ Plasma and sperm seller
Most admirable action: Neglects bills and rent to make child support payments because he wants his son to have the money.
Least admirable action: Womanizer
Greatest fear: Losing privileges to see his son on the weekends
Greatest desire: To finally land a job and fight for custody of his son
Darkest secret: He was the driver of the hit-and-run that resulted in his ex-wife's current husband's wheel chair bound condition
One sentence philosophy on life: Good things come to those who wait.
Things that would drive character to tears: Alcohol. He is a sad drunk and ofter cries at the bar.
Things that would drive character to murder: He's considered killing for money if it brought him a big enough income, but he's always sided against it. And, of course, he would kill anyone that fucked with his son.
Age: 30-something
Birth place: Pittsfield, MA
Job: Unemployed/ Plasma and sperm seller
Most admirable action: Neglects bills and rent to make child support payments because he wants his son to have the money.
Least admirable action: Womanizer
Greatest fear: Losing privileges to see his son on the weekends
Greatest desire: To finally land a job and fight for custody of his son
Darkest secret: He was the driver of the hit-and-run that resulted in his ex-wife's current husband's wheel chair bound condition
One sentence philosophy on life: Good things come to those who wait.
Things that would drive character to tears: Alcohol. He is a sad drunk and ofter cries at the bar.
Things that would drive character to murder: He's considered killing for money if it brought him a big enough income, but he's always sided against it. And, of course, he would kill anyone that fucked with his son.
6/2/2010 9:31 AM PDT
Name: Only he remembers. When he checks in after trips he's know by his ID number, and to his passengers he's known as "Captain."
Age: physically, late thirties. Temporally, even he doesn't know anymore. He started piloting before they tracked the time dilations.
Birth place: Earth
Job: Interstellar pilot
Most admirable action: Giving up his life to serve "the greater good" as a pilot.
Least admirable action: Leaving behind every person he knew to become a pilot.
Greatest fear: To return from a voyage to find that the human race has disappeared.
Greatest desire: To make a connection with another human being again.
Darkest secret: Committed murder, leading him to flee his home and eventually his planet. He still justifies his actions but regrets their consequences.
One sentence philosophy on life: Enjoy it while you can.
Things that would drive the character to tears: He learned long ago to hide his tears, but he feels intense sorrow when recalling the people he left behind.
Things that would drive the character to murder: Other than in self-defense, nothing. He'd rather not make the same mistake twice.
Age: physically, late thirties. Temporally, even he doesn't know anymore. He started piloting before they tracked the time dilations.
Birth place: Earth
Job: Interstellar pilot
Most admirable action: Giving up his life to serve "the greater good" as a pilot.
Least admirable action: Leaving behind every person he knew to become a pilot.
Greatest fear: To return from a voyage to find that the human race has disappeared.
Greatest desire: To make a connection with another human being again.
Darkest secret: Committed murder, leading him to flee his home and eventually his planet. He still justifies his actions but regrets their consequences.
One sentence philosophy on life: Enjoy it while you can.
Things that would drive the character to tears: He learned long ago to hide his tears, but he feels intense sorrow when recalling the people he left behind.
Things that would drive the character to murder: Other than in self-defense, nothing. He'd rather not make the same mistake twice.
6/2/2010 6:03 AM PDT
Name: Alminora Kyaska
Age: 16 years old
Birth place: On a planet called Elizha but doesn't know that and grew up in a small village in the woods on Earth.
Job: She was just accepted into a school for fighting, but she doesn't have a job.
Most admirable action: I'm not too far into the story, but probably having the will to fight for her village when it's attacked, even though she knows that she might be made fun of afterwords if someone sees her eyes.
Least admirable action: She's pretty admirable, or at least not not admirable. Perhaps slightly making fun of the teacher? Or perhaps her surprisingly brutal behavior when fighting?
Greatest fear: Having to live her life as a sewer or a potter or just some guys husband.
Greatest desire: She longs for adventure, and the power to fight for her small village.
Darkest secret: Well, she doesn't even know this, but she is a princess of a planet called Elizha, the land of elves. She also has an extremely important destiny. The secret she knows is about her eyes, which she hides because of her fear of them being seen, after all, they are bright silver.
One sentence philosophy on life: If one doesn't wish for adventure, how will they know the troubles of life?
Things that would drive character to tears: Her family (mother) dying, not being believed, feeling lost, but not pain; she has a strong will.
Things that would drive character to murder: Being attacked, but that's more to defend. Having the fate of the universe on her (as well as a couple of others).
Age: 16 years old
Birth place: On a planet called Elizha but doesn't know that and grew up in a small village in the woods on Earth.
Job: She was just accepted into a school for fighting, but she doesn't have a job.
Most admirable action: I'm not too far into the story, but probably having the will to fight for her village when it's attacked, even though she knows that she might be made fun of afterwords if someone sees her eyes.
Least admirable action: She's pretty admirable, or at least not not admirable. Perhaps slightly making fun of the teacher? Or perhaps her surprisingly brutal behavior when fighting?
Greatest fear: Having to live her life as a sewer or a potter or just some guys husband.
Greatest desire: She longs for adventure, and the power to fight for her small village.
Darkest secret: Well, she doesn't even know this, but she is a princess of a planet called Elizha, the land of elves. She also has an extremely important destiny. The secret she knows is about her eyes, which she hides because of her fear of them being seen, after all, they are bright silver.
One sentence philosophy on life: If one doesn't wish for adventure, how will they know the troubles of life?
Things that would drive character to tears: Her family (mother) dying, not being believed, feeling lost, but not pain; she has a strong will.
Things that would drive character to murder: Being attacked, but that's more to defend. Having the fate of the universe on her (as well as a couple of others).
6/2/2010 2:28 AM PDT
Character Development:
Name: Luc Girard
Age: 32 years old
Birth place: Surinam, Mauritius, Indian Ocean
Job: Right Hand man to the Head of the Mauritian Mafia Family known as Jacques Dubois
Most admirable action: Saved the life of Jacques' daughter, Francoise.
Least admirable action: Accidentally leads the enemy to Francoise.
Greatest fear: That he will die before avenging his father's death.
Greatest desire: He wants to aveng his father, do Jacques proud and win the heart of Francoise.
Darkest secret: Only he knows the whereabouts of Jacques Dubois's wife and daughter who are in hiding, from the Enemies of a Rival Mafia Family, run by Father and son, Clement and David Moreau, respectfully.
One sentence philosophy on life: Always look ahead, never back because that's where the hurt is.
Things that would drive character to tears: to be dissappointing in the eyes of Jacques Dubois, he has been like a father to him, taking him under his wing as a young man about 17 years old, after his father was killed by the Clement Moreau.
Things that would drive character to murder: Not much, it is part of his job to kill when necessary or instructed to do so. However, the memory of the man that killed his father often helps him complete the gruesome tasks.
Name: Luc Girard
Age: 32 years old
Birth place: Surinam, Mauritius, Indian Ocean
Job: Right Hand man to the Head of the Mauritian Mafia Family known as Jacques Dubois
Most admirable action: Saved the life of Jacques' daughter, Francoise.
Least admirable action: Accidentally leads the enemy to Francoise.
Greatest fear: That he will die before avenging his father's death.
Greatest desire: He wants to aveng his father, do Jacques proud and win the heart of Francoise.
Darkest secret: Only he knows the whereabouts of Jacques Dubois's wife and daughter who are in hiding, from the Enemies of a Rival Mafia Family, run by Father and son, Clement and David Moreau, respectfully.
One sentence philosophy on life: Always look ahead, never back because that's where the hurt is.
Things that would drive character to tears: to be dissappointing in the eyes of Jacques Dubois, he has been like a father to him, taking him under his wing as a young man about 17 years old, after his father was killed by the Clement Moreau.
Things that would drive character to murder: Not much, it is part of his job to kill when necessary or instructed to do so. However, the memory of the man that killed his father often helps him complete the gruesome tasks.
6/1/2010 5:43 PM PDT
Name: Felix Banks
Age: 7
Birth Place: Northeast Cardynia (It's in another world that I invented)
Job: Student/Explorer
Most Admirable Action: Going on adventures and saving the day
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Least Admirable Action: Getting in trouble while saving the day.
Greatest Fear: Dying
Greatest Desire: Going exploring
Darkest Secret: He has a changling who wants to take over the world by covering it with darkness (Note: A changeling is a fairy from Celtic folklore who tries to take the place of a human)
One sentence philosophy on life: Adventure is everywhere.
Things that would drive character to tears: Failing to protect anyone he's devoted to protect like a community or a friend or even someone dear to him
Things that would drive character to murder: A killing of a loved one performed by his changeling or any of his changeling's head minions
Age: 7
Birth Place: Northeast Cardynia (It's in another world that I invented)
Job: Student/Explorer
Most Admirable Action: Going on adventures and saving the day
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Least Admirable Action: Getting in trouble while saving the day.
Greatest Fear: Dying
Greatest Desire: Going exploring
Darkest Secret: He has a changling who wants to take over the world by covering it with darkness (Note: A changeling is a fairy from Celtic folklore who tries to take the place of a human)
One sentence philosophy on life: Adventure is everywhere.
Things that would drive character to tears: Failing to protect anyone he's devoted to protect like a community or a friend or even someone dear to him
Things that would drive character to murder: A killing of a loved one performed by his changeling or any of his changeling's head minions
6/1/2010 3:26 PM PDT
Name: Cyrus Williams
Age: 3647 years old, but looks about 25
Birthplace: Ancient Babylon
Job: Doesn't have one, he tends to stay away from society
Most admirable action: Stopping a huge battle that would destroy Babylon and all its citizens
Least admirable action: Killing his friends and family so he could become immortal
Greatest fear: Living for another century
Greatest desire: Regaining his mortality
Darkest secret: He discovered the secrets of immortality
One sentence philosophy on life: It's not worth it
Things that would drive him to tears: Losing another lover (he has lost quite a few)
Things that would drive him to murder: Somebody getting in the way of his plan (to regain mortality)
All right thats my character, hope you like him.
Age: 3647 years old, but looks about 25
Birthplace: Ancient Babylon
Job: Doesn't have one, he tends to stay away from society
Most admirable action: Stopping a huge battle that would destroy Babylon and all its citizens
Least admirable action: Killing his friends and family so he could become immortal
Greatest fear: Living for another century
Greatest desire: Regaining his mortality
Darkest secret: He discovered the secrets of immortality
One sentence philosophy on life: It's not worth it
Things that would drive him to tears: Losing another lover (he has lost quite a few)
Things that would drive him to murder: Somebody getting in the way of his plan (to regain mortality)
All right thats my character, hope you like him.
6/1/2010 1:43 AM PDT
@ShanaPupik
No the average person doesn't go around murdering, but the idea of something that would drive them to murder is different than just plain old murder.
Murderer does it cause they think its fun
Driven to Murder, means that something has happened that would make that character kill another person (for example, maybe a lover was tortured and killed, or a family member was raped/attacked or something along those lines)
No the average person doesn't go around murdering, but the idea of something that would drive them to murder is different than just plain old murder.
Murderer does it cause they think its fun
Driven to Murder, means that something has happened that would make that character kill another person (for example, maybe a lover was tortured and killed, or a family member was raped/attacked or something along those lines)
5/31/2010 10:30 PM PDT
Name: Gabry Falls
Age: 25
Birth place: Toronto. Or what used to be Toronto, anyway.
Job: Let’s just say legal serial killer and leave it at that, alright?
Most admirable action: I saved us.
Least admirable action: I saved us all.
Greatest fear: Leaving nothing behind when I am gone. There is nothing more terrifying than the realization of how heartbreakingly finite our lives are. I just want to make sure that even after my life has ended, something of myself continues.
Greatest desire: Immortality.
Darkest secret: I hate killing. I always have.
One sentence philosophy on life: All that is good is not necessarily right.
Things that would drive character to tears: Meeting the families of those she has murdered.
Things that would drive character to murder: Necessity.
Age: 25
Birth place: Toronto. Or what used to be Toronto, anyway.
Job: Let’s just say legal serial killer and leave it at that, alright?
Most admirable action: I saved us.
Least admirable action: I saved us all.
Greatest fear: Leaving nothing behind when I am gone. There is nothing more terrifying than the realization of how heartbreakingly finite our lives are. I just want to make sure that even after my life has ended, something of myself continues.
Greatest desire: Immortality.
Darkest secret: I hate killing. I always have.
One sentence philosophy on life: All that is good is not necessarily right.
Things that would drive character to tears: Meeting the families of those she has murdered.
Things that would drive character to murder: Necessity.
5/30/2010 8:00 PM PDT
Am I missing something?
Who in the everyday world murders people? Why would my character be considered stronger than usual for not being a killer? Does it take any kind of resistance to spare a life? These comments to the idea that my character is not a killer are scaring me. Please tell me that average people don't kill other people. I've never murdered someone, have you?
Who in the everyday world murders people? Why would my character be considered stronger than usual for not being a killer? Does it take any kind of resistance to spare a life? These comments to the idea that my character is not a killer are scaring me. Please tell me that average people don't kill other people. I've never murdered someone, have you?
5/30/2010 6:38 PM PDT
name: Gibore
Age: 31
birth place: farm in the middle of the arabian desert
job: soldier for hire
most admirable action: protecting the woman he loves (Yafa)
least admirable action: killing woman and children
greatest fear: the death of Yafa
greatest desire: to retire on a tropical island with Yafa, far from war and violence
darkest secret: when he was a boy he accidently pushed his brother down a well leading to his death
philosophy on life: life is short, get what you can from it before you die, because you never know when that will be
tears: something bad happening to Yafa
murder: the right price
Age: 31
birth place: farm in the middle of the arabian desert
job: soldier for hire
most admirable action: protecting the woman he loves (Yafa)
least admirable action: killing woman and children
greatest fear: the death of Yafa
greatest desire: to retire on a tropical island with Yafa, far from war and violence
darkest secret: when he was a boy he accidently pushed his brother down a well leading to his death
philosophy on life: life is short, get what you can from it before you die, because you never know when that will be
tears: something bad happening to Yafa
murder: the right price
5/30/2010 7:06 AM PDT
You just have to click on one of them. They are all listed on the right hand side ---->
5/29/2010 4:22 PM PDT
Cool! I've submitted... but how do you view other submissions? I'm new here, in case you haven't noticed.
5/29/2010 4:15 AM PDT
YAY! i like the idea of this.... now which character to choose.....??
5/28/2010 10:15 PM PDT
I love character sketches and often use them to cure writer's block!!!
Once again, I am looking to read/comment on more submissions. So, if you post some great feedback for my piece I would love to reciprocate.
Once again, I am looking to read/comment on more submissions. So, if you post some great feedback for my piece I would love to reciprocate.
5/28/2010 6:19 PM PDT
Name: Anna Litscheski
Age: 37, but physically appears 14.
Birth place: New York.
Job: Social Worker-esque situation- cares for a group of tenagers.
Most admirable action: Giving herself up to save her father figure.
Least admirable action: Killing the man she gave herself up to.
Greatest fear: Being captured again. She hates that.
Greatest desire: To be able to feel again.
Darkest secret: She'd find it hard to pick which is the darkest. If forced to, she'd probably tell you that she tried to commit suicide once. It didn't work... At all.
One sentence philosophy on life: Never care.
Things that would drive character to tears: Being reunited with her family... And having them taken away. Again.
Things that would drive character to murder: Hurting someone she cares about. Luckily for her, she doesn't care anymore. Period.
Not yet, at least.
Age: 37, but physically appears 14.
Birth place: New York.
Job: Social Worker-esque situation- cares for a group of tenagers.
Most admirable action: Giving herself up to save her father figure.
Least admirable action: Killing the man she gave herself up to.
Greatest fear: Being captured again. She hates that.
Greatest desire: To be able to feel again.
Darkest secret: She'd find it hard to pick which is the darkest. If forced to, she'd probably tell you that she tried to commit suicide once. It didn't work... At all.
One sentence philosophy on life: Never care.
Things that would drive character to tears: Being reunited with her family... And having them taken away. Again.
Things that would drive character to murder: Hurting someone she cares about. Luckily for her, she doesn't care anymore. Period.
Not yet, at least.
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