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The Devil Will Cry (CURRENTLY REVISING WITH AN EDITOR--even the 'revised chapters')
Victoria Orpha Leslie is not just any lady of the ton by any means. She hides a deadly secret. A secret that would shock polite society and banish her into seclusion if anyone caught wind of her abilities or talents. Victoria soon realizes on one fateful evening that her life will never be the same. The new Earl of Stone suddenly appears into society on a mission that will create havoc in his wake, and he will not stop for anything. What mission? A mission that has Lady Victoria’s name s
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I would continue reading. I am new to the site and still learning to navigate around. Do you have more written?
Thank you for all of your help on the "OLD chapter one"
I had a different turn in the story so it needed to be changed.
Please let me know what you think!!!! ;p
Great hook! It definately catches my attention. i think it could use a little smoothing out.
"...caught wind of her abilities or talents, if you will. But she soon..."
I would drop the "if you will" and the "But" on the next sentence. to smooth the flow a little. Can't wait to read more.
"...caught wind of her abilities or talents, if you will. But she soon..."
I would drop the "if you will" and the "But" on the next sentence. to smooth the flow a little. Can't wait to read more.
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I hope you all are pleased with the read ;p Thank you for your nice comments!
Not sure if I confused anyone but the reference to 'Skipper Davenport not being able to finish her novel' is all apart of the plot of, The Devil Will cry ;p
A little twist, if you will. hehe :)
It's not about me, the author, ha...if that makes any sense .
A little twist, if you will. hehe :)
It's not about me, the author, ha...if that makes any sense .
wow, great idea and very intriguing intro! You could even turn this into a movie plot. It would sell.
You've got something interesting here, go for it!
You've got something interesting here, go for it!
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At the present , with the holidays close at hand I have been trying my best to get around to all the people who have called upon me to read their creative writing. As time permits and after the holidays have finally ended, " I hate the holidays by the way," I'll try my best to read your chapters here. This sound like a very interesting plot with characters to match. Good luck with your writing.
~ Ivy
~ Ivy
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This is ridiculously awesome-sounding. In an awesome way.
I'm going to set this aside for... as long as I can and use it for incentive to finish writing a hard scene in the Blood Feud. BUT! I will probably be back in about three minutes.
I'm going to set this aside for... as long as I can and use it for incentive to finish writing a hard scene in the Blood Feud. BUT! I will probably be back in about three minutes.
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it sounds really captivating, and don't worry, you're not the only one who has a hard time finishing novels
Plot:
the plot seems very captivating, you hooked me in on the first sentence
Tone/Voice:
i can feel a lot of suspense already, getting all of this into just the intro isn't easy to do, it just shows that you have a good deal of talent.
it sounds really captivating, and don't worry, you're not the only one who has a hard time finishing novels
Plot:
the plot seems very captivating, you hooked me in on the first sentence
Tone/Voice:
i can feel a lot of suspense already, getting all of this into just the intro isn't easy to do, it just shows that you have a good deal of talent.
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:O OMG
Plot:
"What would you do if you found out that you were the main character in you own romance novel?"
That first line already hooked me!! You can bet I'll be reading chapter one :D
:O OMG
Plot:
"What would you do if you found out that you were the main character in you own romance novel?"
That first line already hooked me!! You can bet I'll be reading chapter one :D
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