like, nice for write...
about my countryside?

General:
Can I just say, CREATIVE!!!

Tone/Voice:
AMAZINGLY STRONG AND LOTS OF SENSE.

I just joined webook yesterday and found the flash fiction challenge today.  I don't suppose it's possible to still enter the contest?  I already have several of these exact stories to choose from that I've written very recently & I was really excited to enter, but now I'm bummed. 
Any help would be appreciated.

im late?

Woken up by the pounding rain, he shot out of bed to see the gun in the monster's hand. The adrenaline rushed through him as he looked at his wife and saw her sound asleep. Without waking her up he saw his brother aim the gun at his chest. His brother motioned to the dresser where the safe was and he quietly got out of bed and went over to it. He opened the safe with the combination and silently pulled out his gun and turned and shot his brother and saw him die at his feet all for drugs.

This was a great challenge, it is interesting seeing what everyone comes up with, and on the whole, it's very impressive.

I was working on my father's farm. It was a cloudy day, like everyday, but it never rained. Our fields were all dried, no water, no crops. We were poor, hungry and diseased, and so was the condition of 200 other villagers. We hoped, we prayed for someone to come and end all our sufferings. We offered prayers to the god of rain, and perhaps it was the fruit of these prayers that one section of our village still provided us food, not enough to live, but not too scanty to die.
And so one cloudy morning when I was praying to the lord while working, something very bright appeared in the sky. Large winds blew, and the noise almost deafened us. The clouds were thundering and as they parted we saw a saucer shaped structure in the sky.
"It was an UFO", one of the villagers who perhaps had got the privelege to study said. However no one else heeded him.
The giant remained in the sky for a while and then started nearing the ground. We were elated, for we thought it was god's messenger. The saucer giant choose the greenest part of our village to land. It was too close to the ground, and the fans on the bottom of the giant blew the crops away. Then suddenly it started scoopiong up the crops. We were stunned, angry. People started throwing stones on it, but none would hit. The agitation amongst us increased, and the giant scooped fast. Some young men ran towards the giant, only to dissappear in the cloud of dust therein.

Soon the giant was gone. The cloud of dust settled. We ran towards the field, and alas, everything was finished. The young men's lied on ground, .dead And the villagers too lied afterwards, wishing to be dead.
"That's what we prayed for', one old man said.
And the silence spread afterwards.

I wish people wouldn't rate work when it first appears in the challenge. I've made a lot of revisions to Faucet Head, and it is nothing like my initial rough draft, yet I am stuck with low ratings bringing my average down. If you scored it initially, please return to Faucet Head and take a second look.

Also as always, I try to critique everyone who critiques me. If you don't get a comment from me, send a message. However, I am planning a trip to help my son move apartments in Charleston and may be out of pocket for a few days.

cmon guys send some feedback and i'll do same to yours.

Something caught Mikey's eye on the lower branches of the maple tree. It was a yellow package; in fact, one that glowed. How strange...
"Wow," the four-year-old breathed. "Is dat a present?"
He reached with eager, outstretched arms and jumped, attempting to grab it.
Suddenly, an amused voice sounded, "Need help, Michael?"
Mikey twisted his head around, trying to locate the voice. "Huh? Wazzat?"
A beautiful woman submerged, melting away from the trunk of the very tree. Her long flowing locks caressed the middle of her back in rhythm to the wind. She smiled kindly at the small boy and took the package. "This is for you."
The woman disappeared.

I notice the word count as you are typing it in is different from the word count after you post it. Mine said 102 words in the entry screen and 112 words after I submitted it. If you manually count the words the entry screen is correct. Microsoft Word gives a different number as well. Be careful!

hope you guys enjoy my little story...

mine is right at the bottom :(

I like this, it's fun!!
But even tho it doesn't rly matter, i'd still like to see what people think of it. It sucks cuz mines at the end, since I just made mine. lol. But.....
It's called The Creature of the Night. Take a look(:

Eeep, I did it too nick, lol!!

It was her worst nightmare come to fruition. She stood frozen for a time, her mind not clearly registering what she was seeing.

The next moment was colored in the red of rage as she moved forward. She raised the pen then brought it down in one fluid motion. It found home in the jellied flesh of his right eye. She scooped the crying child from his arms and headed for the door.  The 911 operator sounded tired "What's your emergency?"

"I've killed my husband, please send the police." She rattled off her address and sat down to wait.

@umnick: I wouldn't worry about it, just submit again as a new chapter.

woops sorry I meant to submit as a story... How does one remove feedback?

Tiny asteroid rocked smoothly in the rays of the distant sun. Silvery dust, a witness of the wild youth of the world, shimmered around the ancient rocks.

Paula sighed. Behind the thick plastic of the helmet, her eyes were like two dark bottomless pools reflecting the liquid, glittering diamonds of the infinite stars.

- But, Jim – she whispered – what about the Universe?

He smiled, slowly undoing the numerous clips of her spacesuit.

- The Universe is all grown up, baby. It can take care of itself for one night.

She closed her eyes and surrendered to the inevitable.

I agree. This will be interesting and, being new to this site I'm excited to try this out.

Just as Aubrie said: I'll touch yours if you touch mine. (or something along those lines)

To the Top.

This should be a lot of fun and I am looking forward to it.

I'm going to try and read more entries this time around.

So, anyone who graciously takes the time to read my piece(s) will recieve a review in return.

Good luck everyone!