The Name Stealer

Two names, two destinies, one gift; The Power of Name-Giving.

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In a cruel world where Names have more power than people realises, a young boy stumbles across a secret that hasn’t be revealed for centuries. He is flung into a legacy that started from the start of time. Now the war has begun; a war that is solely based on the boy and his power.
The power of Name-Giving.

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henrythomasgirl

10/7/2009 6:16 PM PDT

Wow sounds great!

Avarius

9/23/2009 10:11 AM PDT

General:
I think this introduction it gives way to the possibility to a great adventure to read about. I would though expand it a little more that way it gives it more of a clencher for the reader to get hooked by.

Structure:
I have found a few things in your synopsis you might want to consider.

++In a cruel world where Names have more power than people realises
--Spelling: Should be realize; no need for plural.

I would also end the sentence with realize then start a new sentence about the boy.

++He is flung into a legacy that started from the start of time.
-- Suggestion: What about; Now that he has found this secret he is flung into a legacy as ancient as the beginning of time?

Tone/Voice:
Has a very mysterious feel to it. But like I said I would develope this a little more and you should be good : )