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RAstone
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Category:
Fiction
Genre:
Teen
Sci Fi/Fantasy
Language:
English

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Spirit Twin (Revised)

If your mind isn't your own, how can you trust your heart?

I totally revised everything. There are fewer chapters because I combined some. So a few comments don't match up anymore.

When Jake Hart shows up in Natalie's town, her life takes a surprising dive into the unreal. Not only is there a strange mental connection between her thoughts and Jake's but she finds herself being pulled toward him by a force stronger than gravity. As Jake and Natalie try to figure out what it is that brought them together and welded a bond between them, they come to k ... more »

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FindingMyself

12/23/2009 4:26 AM PST

wow, sounds very original and great

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SailingWaves

7/14/2009 12:13 PM PDT

I just finished reading the book, and i i really liked it. are you done with it now? if you are, submit it. it has a really good chance.

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SailingWaves

7/14/2009 9:13 AM PDT

Consider this feedback a review for the first four chapters. I really liked this book. I like the idea of it, and it could make a great real novel someway. The chapters are a good length. The grammar is good. I really think that this could turn into something real. I love the Jake/Natalie relastionship. How it's so intent. I like how they can feel eachothers pain and love.
This is truly great. Keep it up!

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envirogirl25

7/7/2009 7:56 PM PDT

looks really good

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BoOk_WoRM

6/24/2009 4:01 PM PDT

So far, I've read both of your books and let me just say they are great. They have a really inspiring way about them. I really hope you get one published someday.

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RAstone

6/22/2009 9:21 PM PDT

thanks so much everyone. i'm revising it right now, so hopefully i can post a more refined version soon

love love love

also check out my other project called Discovering Rainee

moonlite9856

6/22/2009 6:08 PM PDT

I just read your story in one sitting and I absolutely loved it! When I first started reading it, a lot of things reminded me of a mixture between two of mine but it was a lot better. I really hope it gets published. You're such a good author.

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AshleyNichole

6/22/2009 6:04 PM PDT

Just reading your summary of this story has me entranced. I absolutely love the line "If your mind isn't you own, how can you trust your heart?" AMAZING! I can tell this story is going to be one for the books "no pun intended" I can't wait to get started and leave you loads of possitive feedback.

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Destane

6/20/2009 9:24 PM PDT

sounds outstanding

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Zuma

6/15/2009 4:52 PM PDT

This is the first story on webook that I've been so engrossed in that I read the whole thing. It was really well written and thought out. You deserve to have this published! The only thing I thought kind of weird was the ending, unless you aren't finished with it yet? Anyway, overall it was awesome! Good luck getting published.

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LoriLye

6/14/2009 9:31 PM PDT

You keep on writing now, you are bringing characters to vivid life for your reader. I would have continued reading. Good steady fast paced writing.

good luck. Lori

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Destane

6/4/2009 9:26 AM PDT

interesting

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