The Sturtles

11/22/2008 9:53 PM PST

Good Day
I hope that you - being one of the 25 who were supposed to be included as one of the winners of the vote process will complain - there were 540 projects in the competition - 54 were supposed to be chosen but webook took less than half in order to cut their work load. They told me that they chose ten percent of the projects which received more than 10 votes.
I hope you will let them know, just as i have, what you think of their unethical behavior.

Kirby_Jane_Ross

11/18/2008 4:39 PM PST

Deserves to be published

Blake_Madison

11/18/2008 2:14 PM PST

Thanks :-)

HayleyGrenenger

11/18/2008 1:14 PM PST

I recon its a great and sutible book for kids =)

DarkDre

11/18/2008 8:00 AM PST

its cute :)

Abirwanada

11/18/2008 7:14 AM PST

good work

Blake_Madison

11/18/2008 5:45 AM PST

thanks...i can't fix it until after the contention is over, but I will make note of it. I actually have a revised version with slightly different pictures. Thank you all for voting though!

mailbag

11/18/2008 5:37 AM PST

This is a cute one for the children...AS for punctuations I think the comma after outside should be removed

kittyluver

11/17/2008 5:04 PM PST

srry.. but this is bothering me: "And at the end of the day, they went home hand in hand." there should be a coma after 'home'..

besides that i love it, your drawings are really great, but once you get them done more professionally, it would make an amazing book for toddlers!

Blake_Madison

11/15/2008 4:08 PM PST

Thanks everyone! I'm keeping my fingers crossed.

MissKitty

11/15/2008 9:44 AM PST

This is really cute.

danielway

11/14/2008 7:05 PM PST

This would make a nice cloth book for babies.

JazminTruth

11/13/2008 11:02 PM PST

Very cute book. I could see reading this to my kids when they were babies as a first book.

dantesfire

11/13/2008 6:40 AM PST

nice one!

billygoat

11/11/2008 9:01 AM PST

Cute illustrations, but the story (even your revised version) seems a bit simplistic and minimalistic for all but the youngest readers.

Perhaps you could expand it still more?

Cahoots

11/11/2008 8:20 AM PST

That's adorable- like a visual poem with your illustrations. Are you planning a series. Good start. Is there more?

JessicaLynn

11/9/2008 9:45 PM PST

Thanks for your vote!
This is excellent; definitely got a thumbs up from me! :]

dannyboi

11/9/2008 4:15 PM PST

I want a sturtle!!

Brinii

11/9/2008 11:15 AM PST

this is great! its the exact thing i would have loved as a child

michaeldeshazer

11/9/2008 8:44 AM PST

THUMBS WAY UP!

Noelene_Douglas

11/9/2008 2:10 AM PST

Sweet little story that should enchant the very young, nice simple message of friendship. Goodluck in the vote

Nina_Hunter

11/8/2008 9:06 PM PST

That was cute, I'm not just being nice either. I'm absolutely in love with the sturtles.

emk69

11/8/2008 10:23 AM PST

Have to read this one to my kids
you really keep the reader
there
Great Job

brittany01

11/8/2008 8:39 AM PST

this is just too cute, i loved it, keep writing

penismightier

11/8/2008 8:30 AM PST

This could be made into one of those soft fabric books. You know, the ones that are a few pages long and babies love them? Yeah this could be that.

FantasyWitch

11/8/2008 7:02 AM PST

Awfully cute!

Ruchira

11/8/2008 2:52 AM PST

I like it. Do make it longer. Also I think that it's perfectly immaterial as to what a child learns from this. It should inspire her imagination, and that, it will.

Les_Steve

11/8/2008 1:20 AM PST

I like it :)

SamanthaSpastic

11/8/2008 12:53 AM PST

very cute.
i loved it.
one question, whats a sturtle?
x

Blake_Madison

11/7/2008 4:22 PM PST

Okay Everyone listen up. I have posted a seperate project with the revised story of The Sturtles, however it is not up for vote. The pictures will be the same. I have just take everyones advice and added some length and a lesson to the story. Thank you all for your feedback and for your continued support. Please keep voting for The Sturtles so that it has a chance to get published. Once again I thank you all for your support.

Blake

Rott_i_kins

11/7/2008 2:56 PM PST

Very cute! I can't make anything ryme, but like other people have said it needs to be a bit longer, and prehaps have a message behind it.

Very cute drawings as well!

JustAni

11/7/2008 11:54 AM PST

this is good but it doesnt really send out a message! maybe carry it on and develop the story! love the drawings!!

Blake_Madison

11/7/2008 10:30 AM PST

Not sure yet. I got the idea from a dog toy lol.

TsungChi

11/7/2008 9:45 AM PST

what's a strurtle?

A_Muller

11/7/2008 9:13 AM PST

LOL For very Young ones!
OK

Blake_Madison

11/7/2008 7:53 AM PST

Thanks everyone!

KrisaBeth_Ahcor

11/7/2008 7:32 AM PST

ah I don't even know what they are but they are cute
love it, suitable for little kids but yet nothing they are getting from it...
what does a child learn from this story?

Jazspeak

11/7/2008 2:00 AM PST

This is a great idea for a short children's book. I enjoyed the illustrations, which are eminently suitable for the very young.

steveo

11/6/2008 11:58 PM PST

Chris said I would like this, he was right

lightbrite

11/6/2008 9:19 PM PST

yay turtles!

Undescribeable

11/6/2008 6:39 PM PST

That was so cute!!

Gothic_Viceroy

11/6/2008 6:25 PM PST

I just wish it was longer, it's like you started it, but there's no finish. As a preschooler, I guess I was just deeper than average.

SheilaRuthSiler

11/6/2008 5:36 PM PST

Fun story, cute illustrations.

Tamara0449

11/6/2008 5:31 PM PST

I enjoyed reading the story about the Sturtles. It left me wanting to read more. The illustrations were really cute. I know that children would enjoy having this story read to them. Good luck.

Blake_Madison

11/6/2008 5:28 PM PST

Thanks!

LadyShadowcross

11/6/2008 5:12 PM PST

This is great. Its meant for preschoolers since they are just starting to comprehend words and associating them with the corresponding pictures. The Sturtles have won my vote. I would encourage a Sturtles series.

Lily_Faye

11/6/2008 5:07 PM PST

its very cute!

Dragonasam

11/6/2008 4:25 PM PST

Awwww!!!!!!!!!!! That is sooooo cute!!!!!!

Vampire_lover

11/6/2008 3:43 PM PST

awww thats adorable <3

LordTowefin

11/6/2008 3:29 PM PST

It was very cute and colorful, but it was too short for me. I felt like this was only the introduction to a larger whole. We found out who the Sturtles are and we found out what they do, but there lacks a story. There's a beginning, but no middle or end. I absolutely love the illustrations. They're the kind that is colorful and bright enough to hold a small child's attention and interest.

You have my vote on one condition: that you write and illustrate MOAR!!!

Blake_Madison

11/6/2008 2:42 PM PST

I plan on creating a series of The Sturtles like, The Sturtles' Day at the park, The Sturtles day at the beach, ect. I love all of your ideas. Thank you for your continued support of The Sturtles.

SydneyGreywolfe

11/6/2008 2:38 PM PST

I liked it. I have two small children and sometimes short and colorful is the way to go. Of course, they may want you to read it ten times, but it's an easy, cute story that would be quick to read at bedtime. Often I find myself memorizing short children's stories to recite to my kids at night after a bad dream or when they're upset, so good job.

Blake_Madison

11/6/2008 2:37 PM PST

Thanks a bunch.

Mas_Sparrow

11/6/2008 2:29 PM PST

It's tough to criticize children's books. All you can really do is give suggestions. After all, who truly knows the minds of little children? But since you asked..
The brightness and the color will, I'm sure, attract their attention and make them smile. The words are simple and easy to understand. You've done well zeroing in on your target audience!
I hope to read the story again when you've got more- I would as much as double the length of the story, like having two stanzas to a poem. Though I might make this the second stanza :) Though I can't say I'm exactly an expert on children's books, I'd think that they would certainly enjoy this sort of writing you've got going.

groundhog

11/6/2008 2:13 PM PST

awwwwww....sooo cute! definitely voiting for it!

LissyJane

11/6/2008 2:03 PM PST

Very cute. You have my vote

Accela

11/6/2008 12:50 PM PST

Definitely one of the cutest things I've seen on here! Nice job; I hope it gets published!

Casio_Blythe

11/6/2008 12:33 PM PST

awww loved the illustrations! if it gets published i'd read it to the kids I babysit they love stories about animals and stuff. good job!

Crystal_Linn

11/6/2008 10:55 AM PST

Very cute, perfect for preschool children. I loved how it rhymed, too. :) Lovely work!

Blake_Madison

11/6/2008 6:48 AM PST

Thanks everyone. I am looking at Preschool. I have been talking to some publishers and the min requirement for a preschool book is 5 pages, although I may end up making it a little longer. Thanks for all of your support and votes!

Blake

KarenGibson

11/6/2008 3:59 AM PST

A little short, but not sure which age group you are writing for. Love the illustrations. Got my vote. Best of luck!

Angelic_Dreams

11/6/2008 2:37 AM PST

That is a wonderful little book for children
Depending on the age group your aiming for, it could be a bit longer.
But the illustrations are beautiful and I just love the little idea of it.

peoples_voices

11/6/2008 1:37 AM PST

thats really good and different

K_B_Watts

11/5/2008 8:14 PM PST

Sweet characters!!!

seabreeze

11/5/2008 7:41 PM PST

The characters are lovable. But the story might have to be a bit longer, just one or two little adventures.

girlygirl5960

11/5/2008 6:39 PM PST

my daughter would like it...but like someone said it should be a lil longer unless ur looking to sale to very young babies that don't have long attention spans.

my daughter is 2 so it'd need to be longer for her to want me to read it to her.

it's very cute thought

jRphillips

11/5/2008 6:31 PM PST

cute : )

MsEatsaLot

11/5/2008 6:09 PM PST

Great! I think it should be a bit longer though, other than that, awesome!

Shellie025

11/5/2008 6:08 PM PST

you have my vote!

PENsive

11/5/2008 1:23 PM PST

I think this would make a fun childrens story. A little bit more length would be great. Good job!

Alice_Esther

11/5/2008 1:04 PM PST

Maybe for a toddler. It would be nice! You could probably get some children's publshers to go for it, though I would like an explaination as to what Sturtles are. I will give this a maybe.

Joe_Mather

11/5/2008 11:35 AM PST

this is a really creative ideas for 2-3 year olds i like it a lot :)...a lot of parents like childrens book with a rhyming flow...nothing rhymed with pool...whereas hand and sand rhymed...this may or may not be constructive but i hope it helped a little bit