Already that sounds awesome!

Wow O___O sounds intersting O.o

Comments on the blurb: I like the little catch-line quote- its easily remembered, makes me want to look into at least the blurb of the whole thing.

The blurb itself is awkwardly worded- there are a lot of little choppy sentences that could be combined to sound much more fluid than they do currently but it does at least give the reader a setting and a reason to read the book, so it's not a bad blurb persay it just needs a good polish.

This sounds amazing.

just wondering how is it based on a true story?

GUD STORY ,AMERICAN!

Thanks for the reminder, Evi7.   Just checked and I have only read to Chapter 13.   You've been very busy.  Haven't the energy at the moment to pick it up.   I'm kinda involved in the delemma of trying to figure out where Portals is going to go from here.   A little self-absorbed, at the moment.   But you know I admire your work, and all of my congratulations in what I expect to be the news that you have finished the novel.   ???    Nest stop.  Publication.   All the best, Loreen.

I've been wanting to read this book for a long time lol actually, I heard about it pretty much 3 years ago when I first joined webook , because so many people talked about how great it was xD Thanks for inviting me, definitely gunna read this!!!! The summary is very captivating. I have a feeling it wont take long to get hooked ;)

Sounds absolutely riveting. I must read.

... Just reading the introduction catalyzes an entire interpretation of your story, one which I will not delve into just now, but it certainly sounds intriguing! If I can find the time, I will make sure to read your project! Thanks for the invite (;

Plot:
Good story, makes an interesting read :)

Interesting concept. very much akin to the Talisman, But the hero of that story is a young boy, trying to save his dying mother., on his journey from coast to coast across America, Travelling between the real world and another fantasy world, To find the all important Talisman.

In the first sentence you wrote 'completely loose his memory', i think u mean 'lose'.
Wow, a true story? Sounds interesting!

Sounds great!

sounds intriguing:-)

This sounds awesome. I can't wait to start reading!

:( I'm getting a little sad jut reading the small info about the story I hope I don't have to cry :'(.

it sounds realy cool i
love it=}}

i like this. its sounds really unique and i want to see how it would be a real story

Hmm, a rather interesting plot! At least it's unique. And it sounds promising, if done well. Points for creativity, too!

If I find the time, I will be reading some of this.

Just to let you know that I'm going to be reading this.  I didn't know you taught writing.   Hope my comments on that issue were not offensive.   Thanks for contacting me, and reminding me to get to work with feedback, which will be a big help to me in learning to write.  P.S.   Was an acting student once in the 60's.  A real Shakespeare 'buff?'

Sounds intriguing, poignant and tragic. This sounds like a real tearjerker as the memory of this character is torn away from him, leaving him with just a map. Like a treasure hunt before death...I hope to look into this soon.

It seems interesting in its plot, but honestly, it's not the type of genre I normally read. But I'll give it a shot when I have more time becuase right now I have to go to bed since I have school in the morning. be back soon. =]

Ah..  The map, the quest.   Another pilgrim of the soul.   A good theme, and it should be very productive.   I like it better than Bunyan's progress,for instance,  because he doesn't fool himself into thinking that the knows what the 'destination' is.

Oh my. The synopsis ((and it's very, very depressing sounding, but hey, I love depressing stories!)) is really breath-taking which is a good thing due to the fact that it has that, "Oh my goodness, how is this author going to orchestrate this ingenious plot?"

I hope I will not be disappointed 8D

Love the title and the teaser was perfect. Look forward to reading :)

this sounds really moving. i really like the plot :)

I like how you attracted me into reading this book.
I think the title, picture and small teaser give you enough with out giving a lot away.
I will look forward to giving this a read

This is a very unusual plot, but this sounds quite interesting. I would like to see where this heads off to. This isn't my usual genre but the blurb sounds interesting enough that I am willing to draw away from my usual comfort zone and check it out.

Sorry, but this ain't my type of book

This is a very intriguing plot. I will def read more into it.

who is a real critiqe.(sorry, accidently pressed the submit all button)
If you want me to be that way, tell me

This lookes real good. Your summary is really cool.

A vegetable? I don't get that line. Wow, suicide.
Looks good, but I'm a girl

this sounds superrrrr goood!!!!!!:D

Very intriguing plot line!

Just a side note for your logline (the bold snippet under the title) Perhaps adding in something about the protag's personal issues ie possible vegi state... disease...amnesia
example:

A young man must reach an unknown destination before a terminal illness turns him into an amnesiac vegetable.

Something like that so it puts some urgency and gets the readers emotions involved in the story before they even know about this person... sympathy and the desire for him to find a cure is your hooker to your audience use it from beginning to end... It also makes us jump on his side right away because he's fighting for the life he's got... Is it a terminal disease? I just threw that in there... build that intensity...

I think all the main points are in your blurb it just needs some finessing and rewording to make it a gripping bit of written word...

Overall, I think I could see myself getting into this story,

Keep perfecting your craft,

~t.

I love the fact that the story concentrates on the bleakness of the diesease.Thus createing  magic that allows the story to concentrate on his determination, and symbolizes his need for seperation from his brother.So far i have only read up to Chapter 3 however the  horrid fact of him never regaining his health back is compelling and unique in its own way.Kudos for orginality.

Character Development:
By the way, i thought the character development was great, cas you developed them well enough on the inside, to understand who they really are.

You have an extremely good way of making the reader want more. In reading, i could never find a good place to stop without it frusterating me with curiosity to find out comes next. I loved this. Write more, now.

Okay, you've defiantly captured my attention. Sounds completely original and amazing. I'm starting tonight.

sounds very original and interesting... a good way to draw peopl in with that last line as well... cant wait to start reading it :P

Original. Sounds really intense!

sounds good :)

well saddly the synopsis is supposed to grab your attention and the questions you have are the questions the first chapter answers and you're not even close to what the story is about... I make it vague to get the people to read it, That is what a synopsis is supposed to do... the grab in the story as well as the first chapter... too much information in the synopsis, then people don't need to read your story because they already know the just of it.... I am a published author and I have met with publishers... they like the synopsis

One thing: How old is Justin when he loses his memory? I think that would play a major role in the story. Is he 5, where he doesn't know much about life? Is is 14, in high school, and dealing with the torments of peers? Is he 20, in college, and having to go through these trials while maintaining his grades? Is he married, has children, a job? It's the little things about characters agents/publishers like to hear.

Overall, the synopsis is a little vague and I'd like to hear more concrete details.

The last line, though, really grabbed me and I think that it would be the line that makes me want to read the first few chapters.

Huh, awesome. :P

Wow, sounds cool. :D

WOW sounds AMAZING! Poor guy. That would suck to lose your memory.

That sounds awesome...intense...readable....^_^....okay...a better way to describe it .. interesting... okay im gonna read now...