My first comment was to "Lying In Bed #1", this is for "Haiku for the Lonely Forest Dweller", I am not a fan of Haiku, but you do a wonderful job on the imagery; you share so much of yourself in your poetry, I especially enjoy the meandering of the margins, like I am walking the trail, twisting around the trees...I do live in a pine forest and quite enjoy spending my time among nature; isn't that what a laptop is for, LOL...

This gave me chills...very creative and the imagery is outstanding...a little rough in presentation, although this is what I believe you are going for, kind of a rambling and meshing of thought like the sticky rice in your mind, inedible...it is easy to get lost in the thoughts provoked by the imagery, which I also believe was intentional...I understand it, as I too am in that room, you have potential...I voted publish, kudos on the Morrison tribute at the end.

Good poems. Voted.

Feel free to check out mine...

http://www.webook.com/project/Animal-Cruelty

Offer your change to strangers, live alone in a mountain range, don't eat meat, or rob a bank
Steal from your mothers purse

Would you want to add an 'or' before 'Steal?'
obeservant [sp.]

This reminds me of the fellow who went out into the wilderness and ate something that paralyzed his digestive tract and dyed of starvation because he couldn't cross a river to get home. I like your thought that the spirit can outgrow the body and requires release by God.

Nice poem but can you write something less gloomy?

Brian, I like your writing but I had trouble figuring out who the subject of Naked was. Was he you, your father, a fellow homeless man, an old friend, or everyman? Perhaps an ending line wherein you identify your subject would be appreciated by the clueless.

I only saw a few grammatical errors (typos) that need correction.

Very Good, Publish!

http://www.webook.com/project/Top-3-Poems-of-Assorted-Interest

Powerful and imaginative-Love the imagery in this and the journey it takes you on!

Yes very Powerful!!! Excellant job. Got my vote

Always believe Brian, Powerful writing, marvellous work.  Thumbs Up!!! love Wennie xxxhugs

Feel free to check out mine, if you'd like.

http://www.webook.com/project/Neopolitan-Poetry

Pretty epic stuff.  I wonder if you could pare some of this down and intensify some of your great imagery.  The last poem was really three poems in and of itself.  You surely have skill with words, and there's nothing innately wrong with long poetry, of course.  It just feels like it's getting a little diluted.  Maybe it's the length of the lines, or the reiteration of ideas in different settings.  I think your allusions are strong enough that they carry your message the first time through. 

In any case, lovely writing.  Keep at it!

You will always have my support, Brian.  You're one of the most talented poets I've read, WEbook or elsewhere.

I did like your work ... nice imagery. It's sometimes a little long and you can get lost in it but overall, good job. If you get a chance to take a look at my submission, "Destini's Trifecta", I'd appreciate it. Good luck!

'Naked' mostly II) Burning Moths was really fascinating. I really like your work. You have my vote.

http://www.webook.com/project/In-Times-Of-Love-There-Were

these are very good, well done



http://www.webook.com/project/My-Poetic-Thoughts-and-Rambles

you have some good writes here.

I vote publish.

whoops!  I meant to say "your writing is captivating..." :) needed a spell check!

Wow!  I love your vivid imagery!  I felt like I was in the forest, walking alongside you and experiencing everything you've described in your haikus.  I love how you combine descriptions of nature with descriptions of your spirituality.  You're writing is captivating and truly engrosses the reader, bringing us into that specific moment and enabling us to smell, see, taste, etc. everything you're describing.  Beautiful details and great flow!  Well done!

Publish!

Three very good poems - a yes vote.
Best wishes,
Mike.

http://www.webook.com/project/Verse-Macabre