Three Poems From My Freshman Year In High School

8/31/2009 5:05 PM PDT

Thank you so much to everyone who took the time to look at my poetry and vote. I really appreciate your support. I made sure to look at and vote for everyone who left me a link for their poetry projects.

Thanks again!

LIMEGREENRUNNER :-)

wenniepoo

8/31/2009 5:12 AM PDT

Enjoyed the whole three, definitely publish, love Wennie xxxhugs

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Jenny_Moxham

8/29/2009 10:06 AM PDT

A good effort. Voted.

If you have the time...

http://www.webook.com/project/Animal-Cruelty

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Seshat

8/29/2009 4:56 AM PDT

Beautiful imagery evoking the simple everday pleasures of nature. I enjoyed these very much. Good luck!

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Vada

8/28/2009 10:04 AM PDT

Thank you for coming across my work to enable me to find yours. The three pieces you give here are nicely constructed. The second piece was my favorite- though it was a very hard choice.

Best of luck, keep up the good work, and you def have my support and vote.

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TraciB

8/27/2009 6:23 AM PDT

I like your three random poems. I can see the pictures you paint with them. Excellent!

Traci
http://www.webook.com/project/Communion

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bjkawa

8/26/2009 3:06 PM PDT

The imagery is nice but scattered, almost like you were in a hurry. I love the content you present in all three poems.

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santackas

8/26/2009 9:24 AM PDT

You write with beautiful imagery and thought......

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ScottD15

8/25/2009 6:55 PM PDT

I love the nature imagery throughout your work, you have my vote.

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vampirelover

8/25/2009 6:25 AM PDT

loved this

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Petrin

8/24/2009 7:31 AM PDT

http://www.webook.com/project/My-3-Emotive-Entries

Petrin

8/24/2009 7:00 AM PDT

Wonderfull use of language, tight disciplined metre, and the content and subject matter are well chosen and well delivered.

Very accomplished works, I will look forward to reding more of your works in the future.

The best of luck with the vote.

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LacyWrites

8/23/2009 10:28 PM PDT

You paint a picture with your words! Beautiful. I really hope you get published!

http://www.webook.com/project/A-Glimpse-Inside-The-Shell

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Typical_Bastard

8/23/2009 10:32 AM PDT

OMG WOW, if you like dis, look at my projekt. it's about vampyres!

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Josafat

8/22/2009 11:04 PM PDT

All three poems are in a way beautiful contemplations of nature, filled with color and imbued with the elements that you so sweetly describe. There is a child-like feel to the poems, as if seen through very young eyes, when the world is a playful and magical place. Unlike the other two, "A Late Summer Sunset" moves from the explosion of color to the memories that are left, connecting the awe-inspiring sight with an explicit emotion. "Dandelion Seeds" is cute, creative, whimsical, and takes the reader through the air with the "parachutes" while at the same time exhalting the power of nature to continuously renew itself. Finally, "Great Ball of Fire" again plays with color, and appeals to the senses by using metaphors of tasty fruit, cool popsicles. There is an alchemy here, observing how the elements of fire and water seem to mix, affecting one another in an explosion of visual magnificence. All three great pieces, worth voting for. Good luck!!!
http://www.webook.com/project/josafatPoetryVote209

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sanctuaryrose

8/22/2009 12:49 AM PDT

General:
Your poetry has a vibrant and lively feel to it. I like that, you have my vote!

Form:
The forms you used in all of your poems flowed extremely well and never lost the rythm and tide of each one. Welldone.

Content:
The content was rich with images and brought the simplist of things like dandelion seeds to life in a way that could stretch across canvas. welldone

Imagery:
The imagery was right on with its painters palette of words. You writing screams, PUBLISH ME, I"M GOOD!!

Tone:
The tone you set in your writing was very good, easy gowing and flowing like a steady stream of soft and rythmic voice, welldone.

Musicality:
Music, music like life being conjured up into a vision of pure delight, welldone.

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naiveandwitty

8/21/2009 4:52 PM PDT

you have my vote.... Great work!

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Amir_Dez

8/21/2009 12:33 PM PDT

"And seep out.
The blackness of night"

Very nice, Voted.

If you would take a look at my poetry:

http://www.webook.com/project/Oppression-Hope-Freedom

Appreciated, Thanks

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j_w_d

8/20/2009 7:19 PM PDT

I really enjoyed these three. Wonderful imagry of ordinary events. You have taken everyday happenings and made the importance in them known. You have uncovered the beauty that has always been there. THAT is good poetry. Not to make people see things they will never come across but to share with othes things they already know about in a way that makes them understand it even better. Stories teach, prose discovers, but well written poetry enlightens the world around us. Good job. /clap

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michael7

8/19/2009 9:57 PM PDT

"The sky is water on fire."

Your best line! Your work is very vivid and imaginatively written.
Great Job!

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dantesfire

8/19/2009 2:41 PM PDT

You have a very poetic eye, what you see you describe clearly in so many different ways, no cliche or dated terms, I like that, it's refreshing to read such originality, best of luck, you deserve a shot at being published, Dante

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arceyed

8/18/2009 2:27 AM PDT

publish;

please;

http://www.webook.com/project/Born-of-The-Sun

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xnightsxxbloodx

8/14/2009 6:30 AM PDT

Voted. Beautifully written poems. Very visual, you describe the scenes so realistically. My favourite is Great Ball of Fire.

http://www.webook.com/project/Glimpse-of-Reality

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karlyJoyce

8/13/2009 7:58 AM PDT

wow, I love these poems, they are so beautiful and capture how wonderful God's creation is... you definently have my vote, and thanks for voting for mine :)

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symbionticlover

8/11/2009 11:10 AM PDT

you definitely have my vote

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BurningIvy

8/9/2009 7:33 PM PDT

I really loved these! You have my vote!

http://www.webook.com/project/In-Times-Of-Love-There-Were

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stella_r

8/9/2009 5:40 PM PDT

Very imaginative.
Loved them.
Thank you for voting for my poems also.
Good luck...
xx

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shahw

8/9/2009 11:25 AM PDT

Voted...best of luck. ;-) Favorite... 1st. Shah. X

http://www.webook.com/project/My-Best-Three-Poems-WEBook-2009

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Blakkthought

8/8/2009 5:47 PM PDT

You have my vote. Thx for urs.

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Kirby_Jane_Ross

8/7/2009 3:45 PM PDT

Yes

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Chelsea214

8/7/2009 3:31 PM PDT

Your poems are great. I love your imagery.
You have my vote.

Good luck,
Chelsea

http://www.webook.com/project/Chelseas-Poems

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ellenc

8/7/2009 3:17 PM PDT

Lovely!

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moxhp

8/7/2009 10:29 AM PDT

Interesting….a yes vote from me!

http://www.webook.com/project/Top-3-Poems-of-Assorted-Interest

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Kate_Avino

8/7/2009 10:16 AM PDT

Awesome! I would love to see your poems published!

If it wasn't obvious, you got my vote!

~Kate

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sev70

8/7/2009 9:07 AM PDT

great descriptions!

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livingdeadgirl

8/7/2009 7:02 AM PDT

Your poems are amazing i really hope you get them published.
Your poems seem like there taking from the heart and tooken alot of time to write.

Best wishes
Nessa x

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anmar1027

8/6/2009 7:18 PM PDT

Your poems are great.
Wish you the best.

Love,
Ana

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dnaleristap

8/6/2009 10:39 AM PDT

You have a wonderful eye for detail. I feel when you have something you feel strongly about I hope you have the courage to see it and write it as you have thesimple thoughts here. Nicely done

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michele15

8/6/2009 10:37 AM PDT

I love Dandelion Seeds. Three good poems. Publish!

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nrhatch

8/6/2009 9:30 AM PDT

General:
Enjoyable reads.

Form:
Free verse that meanders nicely

Imagery:
Pleasant, but not thought provoking

Tone:
Easy going

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tuesday_rayne

8/5/2009 9:21 PM PDT

I say YES!!!

If you want to find mine:

http://www.webook.com/project/Voodoo-Hearts-My-3-Poems-for-entry-Webook-2009poetryVOTE

thank you.

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SPMount

8/5/2009 9:08 PM PDT

These were absolutely stunning; wonderful use of nature in a very refreshing way. I can almost see like ... cool drinks all over the place! Very well done and thank you for inviting me to see them I thoroughly enjoyed them all with Dandelion seeds being my absolute favourite. Your form is great and the musicality sings sweetly.

http://www.webook.com/project/Quirked ; for poems

http://www.webook.com/project/Prickly-Scots-Vol-one ; - for a good old laugh (oh and read!)

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Ryan_Morrow

8/5/2009 9:08 PM PDT

Imagery is spot on, but your flow gets interrupted at times. Sometimes, as writers, we focus all our efforts into description and forget the movement of the poem. At some points it was perfect; at others it was shaky. You have wonderful potential though! Good luck in the vote!

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Tamara0449

8/5/2009 8:01 PM PDT

Imagery:
You could make anyone see what you have written as if it were right in front of them. You bring your poetry to life. I vote for yours to be published. Thank you for writing them so beautifully.
Sincerely,
Tamara0449

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LaGoya

8/5/2009 7:52 PM PDT

Imagery:
A beautiful grasp of detail and colour that takes you to the awesome moment. Thanks for sharing.

The seeing eye sees all. Your image is spot on.

My vote for you!

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