Totentanz

Short Stories

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RiSkyBiZ13

7/18/2008 9:40 PM PDT

There are major, major spelling and gramatical errors that are significant enough to throw off the entire flow of this peice. It's an easy fix, but an essential one.

This style extremely unique, although horribly chaotic. I'll admit I like it, but this story needs a whole lot of polish.

I can tell you have a message to send, but this piece needs to be cleaned up and revised before you can bring it to light. Keep writing.

- Eric

SM_Young

7/18/2008 5:53 PM PDT

Although this piece is long and not really my style of writing I did enjoy it and applaud your efforts. Very Nice!

cathrine88

7/18/2008 5:28 AM PDT

Nicely written. Totentanz is a bit long and I think Orhan Pamuk must have such a big influence on you.

Very special writing technique and you are rather risky in choosing topic to write. But once again, I like your writing. Bravo!