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Touch My Heart
To touch your heart.
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8/30/2009 7:51 AM PDT
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8/29/2009 7:57 PM PDT
A yes from me as well. These are really good. So sweet(the first two) and sad( the last) I'm so glad I happened by here today to see these. Best of luck with the contest.
:)
:)
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8/29/2009 4:08 PM PDT
Enjoyed your poems. A yes vote from me.
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8/29/2009 1:24 PM PDT
Tone:
the love of life words come alive in your poems great affection you have great capacity for Love
Good luck god bless mike
the love of life words come alive in your poems great affection you have great capacity for Love
Good luck god bless mike
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8/27/2009 11:17 PM PDT
Honestly, while I feel these poems form a cohesive theme in your collection, they offer little for originality.
I would recommend adding some unique images of the lover. What stands out? What would they do together.
You almost hit this with the forest, but I wish you would delve deeper and draw on specifics details and moments to pull emotion through.
Good luck!
http://www.webook.com/project/The-Romantic-the-Sucidial-and-the-Tortured-Soul
I would recommend adding some unique images of the lover. What stands out? What would they do together.
You almost hit this with the forest, but I wish you would delve deeper and draw on specifics details and moments to pull emotion through.
Good luck!
http://www.webook.com/project/The-Romantic-the-Sucidial-and-the-Tortured-Soul
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8/26/2009 6:11 PM PDT
I wanted to thank all of you who have voted and gave feedback to my poems. As the end of this voting period is approaching it's end I have enjoyed reading all of your comments, good or bad the same. I have found things in which I could improve on and have been delighted with praises. Thank you so much everyone and even if I do not end up getting published I truly have loved this time. Thanks to all who have supported my poetry and I hope the best for everyone who has poems submitted. Again, I sincerely appreciate everything.
8/23/2009 7:43 PM PDT
There is a lovely flow to your words; a lyrical quality that is very pleasant to read. I think you can do even more. I think there is more substance and more powerful imagery behind what you've written here, and I hope to read more of your work soon. I think you've made good start here, and encourage you to keep on writing! Love is a wonderful thing to write about -- pick one part of one of these, and really dive in and explore. Best of luck to you!!!
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8/23/2009 5:36 PM PDT
Nice Work!
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8/23/2009 5:21 PM PDT
Voted...keep writing and developing your style. You have a lot of potential. Good luck with this project.
http://www.webook.com/project/penbuddys-best-3-poems
http://www.webook.com/project/penbuddys-best-3-poems
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8/23/2009 5:20 PM PDT
Sorry to be a wet blanket but far too many over-used cliches in these. Also in general the standard of originality of thought is poor.
I feel you need much revision before these will be of a standard where you can expect to be published but you have talent and as long as you enjoy writing who cares. As they say It isn't the winning it is the taking part that counts.
Good luck for the future.
Kind Regards John
I feel you need much revision before these will be of a standard where you can expect to be published but you have talent and as long as you enjoy writing who cares. As they say It isn't the winning it is the taking part that counts.
Good luck for the future.
Kind Regards John
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8/23/2009 10:30 AM PDT
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8/22/2009 3:45 PM PDT
While these three poems follow the same theme, they reflect a different aspect of the relationship in a mystical manner
'Touch my Heart ' is the most eleoquent with it's time worn cry of the lover to be saved by someone else.
Your choice of words creates an almost fairy tale atmosphere.
Very good work.
'Touch my Heart ' is the most eleoquent with it's time worn cry of the lover to be saved by someone else.
Your choice of words creates an almost fairy tale atmosphere.
Very good work.
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8/19/2009 6:08 PM PDT
Very well done, I absolutely love writing about these things that you've written about and I can relate almost too closely to all three of them.
I really enjoyed all three, but my favourite is probably "Lost Together", because it reminded me of some random thoughts I had back in the day =).
I think "Touch My Heart" is probably the most passionate of the three, but overall great emotion and great poetry.
Publish! =p
I really enjoyed all three, but my favourite is probably "Lost Together", because it reminded me of some random thoughts I had back in the day =).
I think "Touch My Heart" is probably the most passionate of the three, but overall great emotion and great poetry.
Publish! =p
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8/19/2009 12:36 PM PDT
lovely poetry! i hope your work gets published!!!!
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-Poems-From-My-Freshman-Year-In-High-School
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-Poems-From-My-Freshman-Year-In-High-School
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8/19/2009 9:48 AM PDT
this was good, i loved the romance, (even though I'm not much of a romance person) And you've got my vote.
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8/18/2009 11:19 AM PDT
These are all easy reads you def have my vote. Good luck
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8/18/2009 8:34 AM PDT
There is so much love, I really enjoyed the poems.
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8/16/2009 10:08 AM PDT
Such longing and such woefullness
It makes one pause and think
Is there love that lasts, is pure,
And flushes pale skin pink?
It makes one pause and think
Is there love that lasts, is pure,
And flushes pale skin pink?
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8/15/2009 4:34 PM PDT
A very romantic set of love poems. Thanks for sharing them...
Traci
http://www.webook.com/project/Communion
Traci
http://www.webook.com/project/Communion
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8/15/2009 4:07 PM PDT
You have my vote!
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8/13/2009 1:27 PM PDT
I did read all your poems by the way Good luck in the contest. Romantic and full of heart they all were too.
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8/13/2009 1:23 PM PDT
Magical read. Well done. Love Potion, 3rd verse saw what may be a glitch,2nd line seemed off. Well done free verse poem. I have voted.
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8/13/2009 8:26 AM PDT
Touch My Heart is so beautiful. You have my vote!
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8/12/2009 8:51 PM PDT
Three quite lovely poems you got my vote. good luck.
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8/12/2009 7:21 AM PDT
Great stuff you have my vote!
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8/11/2009 1:10 PM PDT
General:
WOW!!! Definatly got my vote...Amazing & beautiful poems.
Content:
I loved the content....Very....descriptive. And very, very enjoyable reads.
Imagery:
Great imagery throughout...Very good makes them so good and 'magical' just makes yours seem so unique.
Musicality:
Bits of each poem flowed beautifully but others not so much....still very enjoyable!
WOW!!! Definatly got my vote...Amazing & beautiful poems.
Content:
I loved the content....Very....descriptive. And very, very enjoyable reads.
Imagery:
Great imagery throughout...Very good makes them so good and 'magical' just makes yours seem so unique.
Musicality:
Bits of each poem flowed beautifully but others not so much....still very enjoyable!
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8/11/2009 7:22 AM PDT
These were really good. My fave was Touch my Heart. Beautiful...
~A.J
p.s a yes!
~A.J
p.s a yes!
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8/10/2009 1:21 PM PDT
Very nice!
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8/10/2009 9:43 AM PDT
Very magical
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8/9/2009 9:56 PM PDT
I say publish because of your last poem, it reminded me of someone I lost long ago whom I loved very much. Thank you for the gentle reminder, just lovely. smiles
http://www.webook.com/project/Memory-Milk-in-3-Glasses
http://www.webook.com/project/Memory-Milk-in-3-Glasses
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8/9/2009 6:10 PM PDT
Well written and with lots of emotion. I liked them. Great job.
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8/9/2009 4:37 PM PDT
Publish!
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8/9/2009 2:34 PM PDT
Love Potion swirled and twirled with enchantment.
Well done.
Well done.
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8/9/2009 2:24 PM PDT
All three were really good, but "Lost Together" was my favorite.
Publish!
Publish!
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8/9/2009 1:29 PM PDT
You have my vote. Great poems!
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8/9/2009 12:24 PM PDT
Definitely an enchanting trio, charming and magical reading, loved them very much, may you have success in the vote, hugs Dante
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8/8/2009 7:44 PM PDT
'Love Potion' is very well written but my favorite of the three is 'Lost Together'; they are all great. You have my vote.
http://www.webook.com/project/In-Times-Of-Love-There-Were
http://www.webook.com/project/In-Times-Of-Love-There-Were
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8/6/2009 5:41 AM PDT
cool! you have my vote!
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8/5/2009 8:33 AM PDT
This is really great poetry, you have my vote!
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8/5/2009 7:13 AM PDT
publish!!!!!!
http://www.webook.com/project/Voodoo-Hearts-My-3-Poems-for-entry-Webook-2009poetryVOTE
thank you.
http://www.webook.com/project/Voodoo-Hearts-My-3-Poems-for-entry-Webook-2009poetryVOTE
thank you.
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8/4/2009 1:34 PM PDT
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8/3/2009 5:48 PM PDT
ENCHANTING!!
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8/3/2009 3:26 PM PDT
You are a very good writer and I love the way you poems flow its almost like the reader gets lost in the world your words create. You have my vote
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8/3/2009 12:52 PM PDT
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8/3/2009 9:27 AM PDT
Yes, excellent!!
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8/3/2009 8:32 AM PDT
Tone:
i love your voice. the flow is awesome.
great work.
publish!
i love your voice. the flow is awesome.
great work.
publish!
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8/2/2009 4:10 PM PDT
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8/2/2009 12:41 PM PDT
definetly a yes on my behalf.
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8/2/2009 11:40 AM PDT
These are nicely done, are they all for the same person, I don't write freeform, but you do and do it so well, thank you for checking out mine, I voted yes.
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8/2/2009 2:56 AM PDT
A yes vote.
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8/2/2009 12:29 AM PDT
Wowsers!
I found someone who writes free verse from the heart, like I do! You have my vote, even better still; it is a vote TO PUBLISH. My hat is off to you, you may even write better than I do. Your last piece"Touch my Heart" was the one I liked best, and you NAILED the ending....PERFECT! You have a good chance to get published, according to your work you should be considered seriously anyway.
BTW my free verse poems are here:
http://www.webook.com/project/Praise-and-Honor-to-the-King
It's called " free verse poetry and words from the heart" You might really like it.
I found someone who writes free verse from the heart, like I do! You have my vote, even better still; it is a vote TO PUBLISH. My hat is off to you, you may even write better than I do. Your last piece"Touch my Heart" was the one I liked best, and you NAILED the ending....PERFECT! You have a good chance to get published, according to your work you should be considered seriously anyway.
BTW my free verse poems are here:
http://www.webook.com/project/Praise-and-Honor-to-the-King
It's called " free verse poetry and words from the heart" You might really like it.
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8/1/2009 9:36 PM PDT
very nice job. you have my vote.
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8/1/2009 6:01 PM PDT
This is really really really good, Andie :) I absolutely love it! I'm sorry it took me sooo long to give feedback, I was seriously busy but now I am giving you a big thumbs up to publish because you really deserve it xD
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8/1/2009 4:06 PM PDT
Ihave already reviewed oin detail these poems and I vote to publish by all means. I tried all night after midnight, but it would not allow any voting
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8/1/2009 12:30 AM PDT
General:
Elegant and moving piece.
~t.
Form:
Free Verse Sectioned off into little pieces. I'm not entirely convinced thay flow well together though apart they are compelling.
Content:
Very deep and well thought out. Highly descriptive and moving.
Imagery:
Vivid images that brought me into a moment: a cool night with a bright full moon drenching a highly imaginative garden with it's pale blue steady. It's misty and there is a fountain splashing in the background. All manner of night life create a mystical symphony of musical all around... Sorry I was in the moment. Good work with imagery.
Tone:
Very heavy feel, yet moments of light, however, it still held a deep vibe at its core. A very whimsical, fantastical feel. The title was befitting. I almost expected a nymph to run through the garden.
Musicality:
I little choppy when it came to connecting the pieces together, but each individual part was moving and lyrical.
Over all I did like it. Well Written.
~t.
Elegant and moving piece.
~t.
Form:
Free Verse Sectioned off into little pieces. I'm not entirely convinced thay flow well together though apart they are compelling.
Content:
Very deep and well thought out. Highly descriptive and moving.
Imagery:
Vivid images that brought me into a moment: a cool night with a bright full moon drenching a highly imaginative garden with it's pale blue steady. It's misty and there is a fountain splashing in the background. All manner of night life create a mystical symphony of musical all around... Sorry I was in the moment. Good work with imagery.
Tone:
Very heavy feel, yet moments of light, however, it still held a deep vibe at its core. A very whimsical, fantastical feel. The title was befitting. I almost expected a nymph to run through the garden.
Musicality:
I little choppy when it came to connecting the pieces together, but each individual part was moving and lyrical.
Over all I did like it. Well Written.
~t.
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