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Verse Macabre
Verse Macabre is a collection of three poems exploring the theme of death and the supernatural. The first, entitled 'Celtic Mist', concerns a legend about a Lady who haunts a mountain lake near to where I live.
The second, 'The Seance', explores the physical phenomena that are alleged to occur at a seance.
The third, 'The Suicide', tells of a man taking his own life by the gruesome method of cutting his own throat.
The second, 'The Seance', explores the physical phenomena that are alleged to occur at a seance.
The third, 'The Suicide', tells of a man taking his own life by the gruesome method of cutting his own throat.
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8/30/2009 4:49 PM PDT
Publish! I like the last one best coz i'm a bit emo like that lol xox
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8/30/2009 12:24 PM PDT
Publish. No doubt about it.
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8/26/2009 5:21 AM PDT
You've won my vote, very smart pick of your poems. You have a beautiful vocabulary and style, i really enjoy your imagery in all the pieces.
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8/25/2009 7:43 PM PDT
Nice, combines appealing simplicity with a certain haunting quality and imagery. I like the first one best.
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8/24/2009 1:25 PM PDT
Great selection I like your style, voted yes :)
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8/24/2009 7:30 AM PDT
8/24/2009 6:53 AM PDT
An excellent selection of subject and style, can not pick between them.
Great works and the very best of luck with the vote.
Great works and the very best of luck with the vote.
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8/21/2009 3:44 PM PDT
Great stuff , Celtic Mist is my fave !
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8/20/2009 7:45 AM PDT
Celtic Mist definitely and since it is a package the other two ride along...both Seance and Suicide are unique views of uncomfortable subjects for some.
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8/19/2009 3:12 PM PDT
Celtic Mist was absolutely beautiful, I could see the landscape clearly and feel the longing. It is a beautiful poem. I also really liked the Seance, funny, yet all too tru and profound at the same time. The Poem, The Suicide, was unbearably sad. All these poems get my vote and you are truly gifted!
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8/18/2009 12:58 PM PDT
I find your work to be haunting and etherial. The images you evoke drift through the mind and linger long after the verse is read. Nicely done.
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8/17/2009 12:27 AM PDT
i loved them all but this is my favourite. good luck
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8/16/2009 5:30 PM PDT
General:
You write really great poems.
Form:
Sometimes people write poems to rhyme, and they make no sense, but The Seance was written very well with the rhyming
Imagery:
Your poems put strong images in my mind, especially Celtic Mist. It was great.
You write really great poems.
Form:
Sometimes people write poems to rhyme, and they make no sense, but The Seance was written very well with the rhyming
Imagery:
Your poems put strong images in my mind, especially Celtic Mist. It was great.
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8/15/2009 12:55 AM PDT
First of all Thanks for voting for me, really, really apreciated
next, your poems are so uniqe, different and well written thankyou for the link. you've got my vote
next, your poems are so uniqe, different and well written thankyou for the link. you've got my vote
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8/14/2009 8:42 PM PDT
General:
Overall this project is very strong. I greatly enjoy the theme.
Form:
Nicely done. I like the last stanza of the last poem is nice, but the rest could be expanded upon.
Content:
like i said, i really like the overall theme.
Imagery:
Lovely. especially in the first one.
Tone:
Excellent
Musicality:
Normally I think people go over-board with rhyming and use it in poems that don't match the tone or song-like quality it lends. However it was very aptly used for these poems. Well done.
Overall this project is very strong. I greatly enjoy the theme.
Form:
Nicely done. I like the last stanza of the last poem is nice, but the rest could be expanded upon.
Content:
like i said, i really like the overall theme.
Imagery:
Lovely. especially in the first one.
Tone:
Excellent
Musicality:
Normally I think people go over-board with rhyming and use it in poems that don't match the tone or song-like quality it lends. However it was very aptly used for these poems. Well done.
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8/14/2009 4:15 PM PDT
I liked all three but my favourite was Celtic Mist - tell me, are you in Wales somewhere?
Yes Vote from me!
Yes Vote from me!
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8/14/2009 2:20 AM PDT
PUBLISH!!!
These are outstanding. I'm such a stickler for dark, mysterious things, filled with horror, haunted places and death. Excellent writing! *#*
These are outstanding. I'm such a stickler for dark, mysterious things, filled with horror, haunted places and death. Excellent writing! *#*
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8/13/2009 8:30 AM PDT
My Vote is in. Nice work!
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8/12/2009 3:33 PM PDT
imagination running wild spot on :-)
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8/12/2009 11:58 AM PDT
nice ne..i smile at your flavourful words...
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8/11/2009 11:18 AM PDT
you have definitely pulled a yes vote from me, i have chills. very well put, nice flow, and great imagery. good luck!
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8/11/2009 10:20 AM PDT
some of the most brilliant poems I have read. Please put ths through webook!
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8/10/2009 4:31 PM PDT
Celtic was my favorite, but the Seance was very good as well. And all are getting my vote.
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8/10/2009 2:57 PM PDT
good vote
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8/9/2009 12:02 PM PDT
I absolutely loved these poems! Very nice word choice, the imagery created fresh pictures in my mind, and you did not sacrifice the rhythm for the rhyme. I felt as though I were standing there, witnessing all of these events through my own eyes, seeing them as you saw them, as you described them. Very interesting, each subject, and very in depth explanations in such a short amount of space. The Suicide was perhaps my favorite, macabre without being down right nasty, powerful nevertheless. You manage to wind a lot of emotion and feeling into each short line, and you manage to draw your reader in without a snare. I was intrigued by each of them and slightly chilled by Celtic Mist, which combined old ghost story with new words and feeling. Very hard to do in this day and age. The Seance was whimsical and beautiful, very pleasant to read, if not slightly frightening. All in all, they are wonderful pieces.
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8/9/2009 7:05 AM PDT
Definitely a yes vote. Celtic Lady was absolutely beautiful - I'd love to see a longer version or perhaps some prose regarding the background story?
The Seance and The Suicide were both very powerful, although I couldn't help but be relieved that the latter was short - it could have been a bit too powerful otherwise!!
You have a lovely way with words and I hope you'll submit more.
Thanks for the great read.
The Seance and The Suicide were both very powerful, although I couldn't help but be relieved that the latter was short - it could have been a bit too powerful otherwise!!
You have a lovely way with words and I hope you'll submit more.
Thanks for the great read.
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8/9/2009 4:50 AM PDT
'Celtc mist' I was referring to :D
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8/9/2009 4:48 AM PDT
I like the images you havae created,
I think i t could have had a stronger, sharper ending.
But still i really enjoy this.
Jason.
I think i t could have had a stronger, sharper ending.
But still i really enjoy this.
Jason.
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8/8/2009 2:39 PM PDT
Eerily beautiful.
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8/8/2009 1:07 PM PDT
Your poetry is brilliant! 'Celtic Lady' was definetly my absolute favorite. If you hadn't already guessed--I voted yes.
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8/8/2009 12:30 PM PDT
Like a Celtic Renaissance, Truly beautiful.
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8/8/2009 12:29 PM PDT
I have to refute previous comment.
You have my vote and an aknowledgement
of quality along with it.
The bards of the Cymru and Erin live on.
Oh Aye and strategems of Owain Glydwyr himelf.
A vote is cast for skill.Publish!
You have my vote and an aknowledgement
of quality along with it.
The bards of the Cymru and Erin live on.
Oh Aye and strategems of Owain Glydwyr himelf.
A vote is cast for skill.Publish!
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8/8/2009 9:46 AM PDT
As I have commented in my earlier reading, I didn't comment.
I wish you good luck and hope you get published, Mike...
I wish you good luck and hope you get published, Mike...
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8/8/2009 12:34 AM PDT
Oh damn! I guess that's a no vote then...
8/7/2009 9:53 PM PDT
I would just like to say that voting for *everyone* elses' poems and leaving a link to your own just so you can get votes is despicable. Also, I find your poetry to be boring and cliched.
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8/7/2009 12:54 PM PDT
I'm a sucker for the darker stuff so this is more up my alley than some, I like the economy of The Suicide particularly. You have y vote, good luck.
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8/7/2009 8:01 AM PDT
I love the way this is written,so much meaning ,,a def vote yes,,,goodluck
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8/6/2009 2:12 PM PDT
I've always been interested in this type of subject matter. GOod work!
http://www.webook.com/project/DCs-Poetry-Collection
http://www.webook.com/project/DCs-Poetry-Collection
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8/6/2009 2:08 PM PDT
Awsome poems :)
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8/6/2009 1:06 PM PDT
Love Celtic Mist
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8/6/2009 12:34 PM PDT
Celtic Mist is definitly my favourite, because of the longer and more developed narrative and the adjective and silibance that you use.
A yes vote for you.
http://www.webook.com/project/Jens-three-best-poems-on-mystical-freedom
A yes vote for you.
http://www.webook.com/project/Jens-three-best-poems-on-mystical-freedom
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8/6/2009 6:31 AM PDT
very nice set, but celtic mist was my favorite. you've got my vote!
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8/5/2009 8:34 PM PDT
good work man i like this. kind of goes along well.
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8/5/2009 5:19 PM PDT
Liked 'Celtic Mist', Ithought 'The Suicide' was clever, wasn't sure about 'The Seance' though it weakened the group. But I have voted you on the other two. Publish
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8/5/2009 4:25 PM PDT
love it
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8/5/2009 3:36 PM PDT
clever writing. I cast my vote!
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8/5/2009 12:35 PM PDT
Each of them are wonderful, but my favorite line of all is:
"The dead have come to call."
It sends chills down my spine.
http://www.webook.com/project/3-Little-Bits
"The dead have come to call."
It sends chills down my spine.
http://www.webook.com/project/3-Little-Bits
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8/5/2009 12:03 PM PDT
I Voted <3
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8/5/2009 9:36 AM PDT
Still love it, like I said before. Good luck!
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8/5/2009 1:43 AM PDT
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8/4/2009 9:52 PM PDT
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8/4/2009 5:29 PM PDT
Definitely publish! I love them!
Hazel x
Hazel x
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8/4/2009 4:01 PM PDT
Tone:
Good stuff!! You certainly have talent. I love the flow of your writing it rolls along so gracefully. Keep it up. Got my vote
Good stuff!! You certainly have talent. I love the flow of your writing it rolls along so gracefully. Keep it up. Got my vote
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8/4/2009 2:07 PM PDT
Excellent! Hey there's a kid on here, his name is DODY. He's twenty-five and just got home from Iraq, but is going back in a few months. You would be amazed at this young man's delicate poetry
Toodles.
Susan
Toodles.
Susan
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8/4/2009 1:30 PM PDT
Celtic Mist is my favorite. Very beautiful. Publish!
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8/4/2009 11:24 AM PDT
I am always at a loss for words with every poem I read. These three are some of the best. I hope you get it. Especially The Seance, that is classic! :)
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8/4/2009 11:09 AM PDT
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8/4/2009 10:51 AM PDT
You have absolutely won me over with this.I'll be sure to go poking and prodding through your writing now.
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Top-Three
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Top-Three
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8/4/2009 10:03 AM PDT
you got my vote
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8/4/2009 7:58 AM PDT
Intense is the only word I can use to describe. Well done.
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8/4/2009 7:23 AM PDT
Oops, I just realized I wasn't commenting on individual poems. I think it's obvious which comment goes to which poem. The Suicide is depressing but it's simplicity and raw emotion are so true about suicide. This gets a yes vote from me.
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8/4/2009 7:19 AM PDT
This poem is awesome. It truly captures the mystery of seances (not that I have been to one). Great job!
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8/4/2009 7:17 AM PDT
Ooh, I like this. I love Ireland and Celtic folklore. This makes me happy :D
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8/4/2009 6:14 AM PDT
Many thanks for your vote. You have mine in return... because i loved all three.
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Best-Three-Poems-WEBook-2009
Shah. X
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Best-Three-Poems-WEBook-2009
Shah. X
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8/3/2009 10:13 PM PDT
Deserves to be published, no doubt about it
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8/3/2009 7:33 PM PDT
Celtic Mist is excellent; great imagery. Good luck.
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8/3/2009 6:05 PM PDT
Mike, thanks for checking out my 3 poems. Good luck to you as well.
Loved the musicality and rhyming of the "The Seance". I find often times that when a rhyming scheme is used in a poem like that, much of it seems forced, but I didn't get that feeling while reading, everything flowed and described the imagery perfectly. I often rate poems on how fun they are to read, and that one was awesome.
The other two are also well done, the images and vocabulary are very well portrayed. I also vote yes!
Steve
Loved the musicality and rhyming of the "The Seance". I find often times that when a rhyming scheme is used in a poem like that, much of it seems forced, but I didn't get that feeling while reading, everything flowed and described the imagery perfectly. I often rate poems on how fun they are to read, and that one was awesome.
The other two are also well done, the images and vocabulary are very well portrayed. I also vote yes!
Steve
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8/3/2009 4:36 PM PDT
Imagery:
You are a very good poet, as I read your poetry I could see it happening. Very well written.
Sincerely,
Tamara0449
You are a very good poet, as I read your poetry I could see it happening. Very well written.
Sincerely,
Tamara0449
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8/3/2009 1:46 PM PDT
very interesting selections, i'v given you my vote.GOODLUCK !!!!
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8/3/2009 12:54 PM PDT
kool poem. great images. seems like you could write a great horror book.
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8/3/2009 12:44 PM PDT
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8/3/2009 11:19 AM PDT
Lovely...dark and deep. I appreciate the searching feeling of the Lady, and can identify with her ethereal quest., and the alliteration.
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8/3/2009 11:00 AM PDT
Awesome work....I'm voting the collection in....you write so deeply the reader feels your words.
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8/3/2009 10:49 AM PDT
with subtle depth, exquisite care,
you made a world that wasn't there.
a place for us to grow and dare
so publish these (it's only fair).
you made a world that wasn't there.
a place for us to grow and dare
so publish these (it's only fair).
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8/3/2009 10:10 AM PDT
Great flair! Has my vote!
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8/3/2009 9:50 AM PDT
So simple with such a great use ofthe laguage. you have my vots
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8/3/2009 9:34 AM PDT
Good work, good luck to you!!
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8/3/2009 9:15 AM PDT
Publish. Good Luck Mike.
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8/3/2009 8:59 AM PDT
Great theme, well-versed, and intense flow! Well done, sir!
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8/3/2009 8:15 AM PDT
It sounds pretty good. Quick question what motivated you to write this.
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8/3/2009 8:06 AM PDT
I vote publish.
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8/3/2009 7:41 AM PDT
Some great poems here - got my vote.
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8/3/2009 6:18 AM PDT
General:
I love all the poems but the first 2 were the best. They are filled with magic and the use of words is wonderful. Thank you for sharing your poetry here. Good luck in the contest.
Form:
The form is a ballad and very weel done.
I love all the poems but the first 2 were the best. They are filled with magic and the use of words is wonderful. Thank you for sharing your poetry here. Good luck in the contest.
Form:
The form is a ballad and very weel done.
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8/3/2009 6:17 AM PDT
General:
Three interesting poems demonstrating true talent for poetry.
Form:
Enjoyed the variation of formats used in each of the three poems. Suicide, in its brevity, seemed particularly powerful.
Content:
Although tied together with a macabre thread, you chose three distinct subject matters for your poems -- ghostly Celtic mists on the prowl, restless spirits whispering (and knocking) in the dark, and the loss of hope in man.
Imagery:
The Seance made me smile, creating imagery that was more light-hearted than spooky. Celtic Mists created ethereal visions over ghostly moors and lochs. I tried NOT to envision the events in The Suicide, but still I heard and saw the dripping blood.
Well done!
Three interesting poems demonstrating true talent for poetry.
Form:
Enjoyed the variation of formats used in each of the three poems. Suicide, in its brevity, seemed particularly powerful.
Content:
Although tied together with a macabre thread, you chose three distinct subject matters for your poems -- ghostly Celtic mists on the prowl, restless spirits whispering (and knocking) in the dark, and the loss of hope in man.
Imagery:
The Seance made me smile, creating imagery that was more light-hearted than spooky. Celtic Mists created ethereal visions over ghostly moors and lochs. I tried NOT to envision the events in The Suicide, but still I heard and saw the dripping blood.
Well done!
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8/3/2009 5:50 AM PDT
well done
publish!
publish!
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8/3/2009 5:43 AM PDT
greenlight> My vote is in. Best of luck to you.
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8/3/2009 5:30 AM PDT
I just love old Irish legends! Nicely done. Voted.
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8/3/2009 4:47 AM PDT
vote submitted...
best of luck...
best of luck...
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8/3/2009 2:43 AM PDT
nice works all very nice. voted :)
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8/3/2009 2:04 AM PDT
This is a well desserved vote!
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8/3/2009 1:58 AM PDT
I like your poems, especially the "Celtic Mist" and "The Suicide",
a yes vote.
a yes vote.
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8/2/2009 11:50 PM PDT
"Three very good poems - a yes vote.
Best wishes,
Mike."
--- You're a tricky one man...sorry I haven't slept in days =p
Best wishes,
Mike."
--- You're a tricky one man...sorry I haven't slept in days =p
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8/2/2009 11:04 PM PDT
Thumbs up, all the way Mike, your thoughts are deep, your styles great, and your magic shows...All three are winners.
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8/2/2009 9:59 PM PDT
Just amazing. I found no mistakes (so I won't correct anything :P) but all I can say is that this is a gem of a collection. The writing is just creepy enough without being over-bearing, and there is a subtle lightness to it that makes the poems reminiscent of stories told around the campfire late at night, or rhymes kids would tell each other at sleep-overs (but with more of an adult tone).
I'm gonna be frank: I love these poems. I really hope they get published, because they're a great read and of a great quality.
I'm gonna be frank: I love these poems. I really hope they get published, because they're a great read and of a great quality.
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8/2/2009 9:37 PM PDT
General:
you got my vote my friend.
~A.J
Form:
I like the style of your writing.
you got my vote my friend.
~A.J
Form:
I like the style of your writing.
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8/2/2009 8:11 PM PDT
Publish!
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8/2/2009 7:25 PM PDT
Excellent. Only one suggestion:
I would recommend slight alteration in the first couple of words, simply to maintain the meter of the line.
i.e. "He who wears the dead man's wreath."
I would recommend slight alteration in the first couple of words, simply to maintain the meter of the line.
i.e. "He who wears the dead man's wreath."
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8/2/2009 7:15 PM PDT
Beautfiully written poems! Publish it now! (please)
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8/2/2009 6:25 PM PDT
Interesting content but feel you could have made much more of this powerful content.
The tone and style especially in 'Suicide' I felt for such a serious subject was a little on the flippant side.
But there is no denying you have talent and appear to think deeply about life.
On the whole you have a nice feel for rhythm and meter in your poetry.
Regards John
The tone and style especially in 'Suicide' I felt for such a serious subject was a little on the flippant side.
But there is no denying you have talent and appear to think deeply about life.
On the whole you have a nice feel for rhythm and meter in your poetry.
Regards John
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8/2/2009 5:51 PM PDT
Content:
for a ghostly hunter of the minds eye wandering , my I suggest .
the atlantic ocean was caused but a sheild around a time machine failing ... the same happened in the middle of the pacific ocean .
ghosts are an artifact of time travelers .
quite often the ghost does not even know this .
the 5 clear centers of time machines ...1) celtic 2) san fransisco/ japan 3) italy 4) cuban 5) india ...
just a thought
for a ghostly hunter of the minds eye wandering , my I suggest .
the atlantic ocean was caused but a sheild around a time machine failing ... the same happened in the middle of the pacific ocean .
ghosts are an artifact of time travelers .
quite often the ghost does not even know this .
the 5 clear centers of time machines ...1) celtic 2) san fransisco/ japan 3) italy 4) cuban 5) india ...
just a thought
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8/2/2009 5:31 PM PDT
great stuff. Loved it.
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8/2/2009 5:11 PM PDT
Brilliant!
''Perhaps her man lies sleeping
Slurping, gurgling, drowned
Consumed by the water’s grief''
Good use of description / imagery.
You have my votes:)
''Perhaps her man lies sleeping
Slurping, gurgling, drowned
Consumed by the water’s grief''
Good use of description / imagery.
You have my votes:)
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8/2/2009 4:58 PM PDT
Tone:
'Suicide' So much can be said here. Imagery, Tone, Form etc. I can actually see the slit wrists or slashed throat whichever way a person views it in their mind. You touch on it fast and furious not languidly drawing out the end. Congrats on a well patnted picture.
Niyah
'Suicide' So much can be said here. Imagery, Tone, Form etc. I can actually see the slit wrists or slashed throat whichever way a person views it in their mind. You touch on it fast and furious not languidly drawing out the end. Congrats on a well patnted picture.
Niyah
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8/2/2009 4:56 PM PDT
Content:
loving Celtic Mist
loving Celtic Mist
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8/2/2009 4:55 PM PDT
Another Yes From Kirby-Jane
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8/2/2009 4:54 PM PDT
This peom did not grasp my emotions as did the Celtic Mist. Your language here reminds me of Shakespeare. The poem is good it just seemed to end to soon. Like something is missing. Did you erase something by chance?
Smiles
Niyah
Smiles
Niyah
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8/2/2009 4:50 PM PDT
Imagery:
Mike,
Your poem Celtic Mist shows great imagery. One can see the woman/mist as she hunts. One can almost feel the darkness and of course the light as the day breaks. My interpretation views this as somewhat lonesome. The mist comes looking yet never quite finds. Perhaps I am wrong but is how I see and feel this poem. My vote is yes. Great work.
Niyah
Mike,
Your poem Celtic Mist shows great imagery. One can see the woman/mist as she hunts. One can almost feel the darkness and of course the light as the day breaks. My interpretation views this as somewhat lonesome. The mist comes looking yet never quite finds. Perhaps I am wrong but is how I see and feel this poem. My vote is yes. Great work.
Niyah
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8/2/2009 4:38 PM PDT
I am now commenting on "The Suicide." Short, yet speak volumes on its own. Excellent writing here. Well done. Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
*S* Cynthia
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8/2/2009 4:37 PM PDT
I am commenting on "The Seance," now. I am intrigued by this write (considering I watch a lot of Ghost shows). Excellent work here. Well done. Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
*S* Cynthia
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8/2/2009 4:35 PM PDT
What a fantastic piece of poetry. I have the feeling, that you got this idea from Sir Walter Scott (I presume)? Just let me know if I am right. He is my ancestor. :o) Well done. :o) Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
P.S.
Oh, thank you so very much for the vote. I truly appreciate it. :o)
*S* Cynthia
P.S.
Oh, thank you so very much for the vote. I truly appreciate it. :o)
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8/2/2009 4:10 PM PDT
Celtic Mist is definitely my favorite. I really liked it. You get my vote and thanks for yours!
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8/2/2009 3:49 PM PDT
Beautiful stuff. I can't decide which is my favorite.
You get my vote! And thank you for yours. Much appreciated.
x
You get my vote! And thank you for yours. Much appreciated.
x
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8/2/2009 3:30 PM PDT
My favourite is 'Celtic Mist' - one can feel the chill and hear the slurping of the water! Good luck!
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8/2/2009 3:19 PM PDT
Its a yes for me too, I enjoyed all three very much, they are what 'I'm coming to call ethereal - although I will add haunting to yours ... the more poems in this vein that I read. Well done and good luck.
http://www.webook.com/project/Quirked
http://www.webook.com/project/Quirked
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8/2/2009 2:59 PM PDT
fantatic, so clear and concise, definitly a yes, and thank you for your vote
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8/2/2009 2:42 PM PDT
yes publish
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8/2/2009 2:41 PM PDT
Your poetry is beautiful you have my vote! Oh, and by the way thank you, for your kind words, and for voting for me.
Amber
Amber
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8/2/2009 2:15 PM PDT
excellent. Voted.
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8/2/2009 1:59 PM PDT
YOU HAVE MY VOTE
http://www.webook.com/project/STAVONTAE-STUBBS-MY-BEST-3
http://www.webook.com/project/STAVONTAE-STUBBS-MY-BEST-3
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8/2/2009 1:18 PM PDT
Great use of rhythm and some lyric in The Seance.
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8/2/2009 1:17 PM PDT
A yes from me. I loved all your use of metaphors and imagery.
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8/2/2009 12:46 PM PDT
I'm liking it :)
Good work :)
Amber :)
Good work :)
Amber :)
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8/2/2009 12:41 PM PDT
Publish.
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8/2/2009 12:16 PM PDT
You have my vote, dear! :]
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8/2/2009 11:52 AM PDT
General:
An absolute yes to publish!
Of the three, the "Celtic Mist" is the most complete in terms of metaphor and imagery and overall poetic power. "The Seance" is whimsical, fun. "The Suicide" is quick and to the point, like taking one's life without hesitation.
Imagery:
The mist in "The Celtic Mist" is a clever symbol for the woman who seeks her lover. Like the mist, the woman is "ghostly-white" and like the woman the mist is "heedless, needless, lonely." Other images like the "still black mirror" of water where the lover lies "drowned / Consumed by the water's grief." Finally the "Solar sword" that pierces the "veil," the mist, the woman. All the elements are magically connected, giving this piece the infinite power that it has. My favorite.
An absolute yes to publish!
Of the three, the "Celtic Mist" is the most complete in terms of metaphor and imagery and overall poetic power. "The Seance" is whimsical, fun. "The Suicide" is quick and to the point, like taking one's life without hesitation.
Imagery:
The mist in "The Celtic Mist" is a clever symbol for the woman who seeks her lover. Like the mist, the woman is "ghostly-white" and like the woman the mist is "heedless, needless, lonely." Other images like the "still black mirror" of water where the lover lies "drowned / Consumed by the water's grief." Finally the "Solar sword" that pierces the "veil," the mist, the woman. All the elements are magically connected, giving this piece the infinite power that it has. My favorite.
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8/2/2009 11:14 AM PDT
Did he though? Did he read them ... most of these appeared in a very short time ...I haven't seen any reviews - all are the same generic message.
Just remember people tactics like this, probably mean you are being voted down to - despite the generic ,message, in my opionion some people will do and say anything to try and win ... of course a futile exercise anyway, popularity will not get you published.
Thanks for all the personal comments I'm getting about this ... all but one agree ... but I am closed to talking about it anymore ... just be aware not everyone who says they have voted you have done so ...I'm not saying its the case here, but they just might have voted you down in order to raise themselves,
Just remember people tactics like this, probably mean you are being voted down to - despite the generic ,message, in my opionion some people will do and say anything to try and win ... of course a futile exercise anyway, popularity will not get you published.
Thanks for all the personal comments I'm getting about this ... all but one agree ... but I am closed to talking about it anymore ... just be aware not everyone who says they have voted you have done so ...I'm not saying its the case here, but they just might have voted you down in order to raise themselves,
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8/2/2009 11:09 AM PDT
I really liked your work, you have a different take from the others I have read, thanks for reading mine, and for your message you left, I don't know about generic messages but at least you took the time out to read them, I voted yes
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8/2/2009 10:54 AM PDT
Nice one, Mike.
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8/2/2009 10:47 AM PDT
That generic message IS kind of annoying, man. You seem to have left the same note - word for word - with the link to your own verses. Seems more like an advert than an honest review, you know?
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8/2/2009 10:24 AM PDT
Been here and voted. Good luck, my friend.
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8/2/2009 10:12 AM PDT
I hate the fact that I see you have gone through everyones submissions and left the same generic message everywhere - obviously to get their votes ... these kind of tactics are completely annoying to me and so I feel you should be exposed ... I don't have a submission personally, I am merely a lover of poetry and you pop up everywhere.
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8/2/2009 9:59 AM PDT
very nice poems. you have my vote
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8/2/2009 9:55 AM PDT
This is great work; you have a flair for description. Your themes and ideas are original. I thoroughly enjoyed this project.
http://www.webook.com/project/what-I-have-to-say
http://www.webook.com/project/what-I-have-to-say
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8/2/2009 9:50 AM PDT
Are you missing an apostrophe in "lions" ?
The soulful, moodiness of these poems speaks to loss and longing. I was particularly fond of "Celtic Mist."
The soulful, moodiness of these poems speaks to loss and longing. I was particularly fond of "Celtic Mist."
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8/2/2009 9:43 AM PDT
I don't recognise the mode I like it..a Yes
good work
Andrew
good work
Andrew
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8/2/2009 9:35 AM PDT
A yes from me
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8/2/2009 9:10 AM PDT
Its a yes for me too, I enjoyed all three very much, they are what 'I'm coming to call ethereal - although I will add haunting to yours ... the more poems in this vein that I read. Well done and good luck.
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8/2/2009 8:51 AM PDT
a definite yes! great work!!!
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8/2/2009 8:38 AM PDT
you are very good with imagery, well done. You have my yes vote:D
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8/2/2009 8:21 AM PDT
The 'celtic mist' was a great read. I voted yes.
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8/2/2009 8:03 AM PDT
very good imagery, I vote yes
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8/2/2009 7:55 AM PDT
thanks for checking out my poems! btw u have some amazing poems urself! I VOTED FOR YA!
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8/2/2009 7:22 AM PDT
You got my vote.
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8/2/2009 3:20 AM PDT
A definate vote from me
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8/2/2009 1:57 AM PDT
A yes vote
8/1/2009 5:11 PM PDT
Celtic Mist for sure!
great poems all three. best of luck.
great poems all three. best of luck.
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8/1/2009 3:35 PM PDT
YOu are truly amazing! But of course you are! You're WELSH! Shakespeare had better look out! voted but think it was hardly necessary! you're a shoo- in!
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8/1/2009 12:31 PM PDT
Wish you luck.
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8/1/2009 3:28 AM PDT
To be honest your poem, gave me goosebumps! Nice poems. Hope you the best!
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8/1/2009 2:38 AM PDT
Your work invokes a very unique set of feelings when read—a very good thing. I enjoyed reading them, and so forth you have my vote. Good luck, fellow writer.
Keep up the awesomeness, indeed.
Keep up the awesomeness, indeed.
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8/1/2009 1:56 AM PDT
I wish you the best of luck! I'll have my fingers crossed.
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7/2/2009 4:06 PM PDT
Is your project title in homage to The Faint?
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6/18/2009 8:28 AM PDT
Sounds dark, mysterious, scary. I'm sure that's what you're going for. Not what I usually read in poetry but I'm going to give it a shot! From the description it doesn't sound that bad!
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