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'Voodoo Hearts' My 3 Poems for entry 'Webook 2009poetryVOTE'
Simple right? Just pick 3 of my best poems to represent myself for possible publication... easy as pie, right? Then why have I stared at the ceiling for 5 whole days until my eyeballs had gone dry...oh, but not before having to reassure my young son that I hadn't slipped into coma, not just yet anyway.
You see, to ask this of me,(choosing just 3), I quickly envisioned a large turkey at Thanksgiving and everyone yelling out their favorite parts... "I'll take a breast, white meat." "I'll take th ... more »
You see, to ask this of me,(choosing just 3), I quickly envisioned a large turkey at Thanksgiving and everyone yelling out their favorite parts... "I'll take a breast, white meat." "I'll take th ... more »
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congrats to you, too! :) i didn't even know i made it until yesterday. i was shocked.
- crystal
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I love the way you write! i shall be following your work! publish! =)
thank you so much for voting for me btw! =D xox
thank you so much for voting for me btw! =D xox
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I read these before. You know I love your work, I voted yes.
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A lot of hurt in your words (I believe for good reason), which makes me relate to your 3 poems so easily, especially "Ugly Ways." I give you a YES vote & hope maybe you'll take a minute to read mine. Thanx for sharing them with me & adding me as a friend. ~Steve
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I think you already know my thoughts on your works. I have nothing more to add that I have not said before.
You are a truly gifted poet and I would wish you the very very best of luck with the vote.
You are a truly gifted poet and I would wish you the very very best of luck with the vote.
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Thanks for the vote! Hope this vote helps too! Good luck!
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Wow, this is truly great work. I'm eager to read more of your writing. You def. have my vote for this project! "Ugly Ways" was really inspiring...
if you've got the time:
http://www.webook.com/project/Troubled-Waters-Poetry
if you've got the time:
http://www.webook.com/project/Troubled-Waters-Poetry
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all three are very well written, but I must say I favor Beatrice, the sentimental sort that I am it brought tears to my eyes. Thank you for sharing, you have my vote!
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"cheap" really comes together at the end and evokes an important reminder for everyone to be themselves.
thanks for the vote and good luck!
thanks for the vote and good luck!
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These are beautiful! you are very good with words!
please look at my project:
http://www.webook.com/projects/Poetree's-Best
Thanks in advance,
Bia-la
please look at my project:
http://www.webook.com/projects/Poetree's-Best
Thanks in advance,
Bia-la
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Wow...........just wow. Truly powerful stuff, gave me goosebumps. You have a very astonishing way with words, an eye for detail, and a way of conveying emotion that's not the least bit sloppy. Now THIS is poetry!!!
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You have a way of writing that I can relate to. I love this
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I liked most Beatrice, which I found not only very moving, but also displaying a wealth of images and the beautiful subtlety of the change from two to three. Publish.
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Cheap Dream Pimp Whore is definitely getting my vote.
Check out these if you got time;
http://www.webook.com/project/Born-of-The-Sun
Check out these if you got time;
http://www.webook.com/project/Born-of-The-Sun
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some good poems. there is a lot of self inspection going on and dealing with life, all be it perhaps begrudgingly. There is truth and torment in these but I personally can certainly see the mind and heart trying to make sense of the world.
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This was so sad. I liked the rhythm and rhyming scheme you used, but its hard to create - at least for me - a visual image in my head because the words being written seem so much older than a five year old unless it is the person looking back on their life when they are older.
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It seems there is an inner conflict that you address in this piece. That being the pastime of 'filling our hearts with dreams of hope be they real or just folly'. I would say, 'Don't judge yourself harshly on these because they are far better than allowing your self to drown in a sea of despair. You have a lot of 'soul' in your writing. I strongly give a 'thumbs up' for publshing your entries. Best regards!
Omanh
Omanh
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A wonderful contrast of HOPE in this work after reading "Ugly Ways" You are really a talented writer IMO.
Omanh
Omanh
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Deeply moving and honest. As children it is so hard to see a parent at a time when they are weakened by circumstances too strong for them to find the courage to fight. Yet, is it not something that happens to all of us at some time? But, the courage you show in the telling of it that is remarkable! And, I will just say, you are not as alone in these memories as you may feel you are....
Your pain though, I respect, and give you your personal space to feel this and I know not of the depth to which it has penetrated your soul. Only you can know that....
Thanks for sharing this piece!
Omanh
Your pain though, I respect, and give you your personal space to feel this and I know not of the depth to which it has penetrated your soul. Only you can know that....
Thanks for sharing this piece!
Omanh
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The poetry of a life that is actually lived...it is a very rare thing to find. Frankly, Catherine, I think you were being too hard on yourself. These are excellent poems, one and all, though I confess to having a soft spot for "Beatrice", which speaks of the sort of continuity within a family that my own ultimately failed to provide. I feel the shadows of that failure haunt me in "Ugly Ways", which reminded of a very ugly incident I went through at the age of nine that changed everything. As for "Cheap Dream Pimp Whore", I see a ready-made soundtrack for the times we live in, where, to paraphrase Max Allan Collins, we all woke up screaming from the American Dream. Consider this a YES vote.
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You have the potential to be a great poet. Your thoughts are felt, the flow is smooth and I feel your imagery. Thumbs Up! LOL, BDC
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interesting work, a look at the darker side of life with a glimmer of hope showing through in Beatrice, remember things are always subject to change as in the last one, the dreamer sometimes becomes the dream, I voted yes.
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These are some very impressive pieces of poetry, but I would sugest they be a little shorter. Maybe it's just my attention span but i find myself willing for the end about 1/2 way through. Not to say I don't like them, 'Beatrice' is by far my favourite, i love how you come back to the willow tea set at the end using the exact same words. It's a reminiscence poem and i find this touching.
good job.
good job.
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All three poems were amazing. I would have to say "Ugly Ways"
was my favorite, it was very descriptive and pulled me in. Publish!
was my favorite, it was very descriptive and pulled me in. Publish!
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You have a vote from me. I found your poems very powerful, though I confess the subject matter and occasional lapses into profanity did make it difficult for me to read some sections (not wanting to sound prudish!).
In spite of those two points though, it is clear you have a talent for poetry and portraying life in all its harsh reality which definitely deserves a vote. Good luck in all your future writing!!
In spite of those two points though, it is clear you have a talent for poetry and portraying life in all its harsh reality which definitely deserves a vote. Good luck in all your future writing!!
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I have voted publish to your poems Catherine, and I don't have to tell you why. I love your poetry and these deserve to give you 'good dreams'. You read the first two and you're in the room, right there! And the third just tears at my heart.
Good luck xx Howard
Good luck xx Howard
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Ow wow!!!! These poems are fantastic. I really loved reading "Ugly Ways." It is so full of emotion. Well done. :o) Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
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YES vote.
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Thanks for the vote. :o)
*S* Cynthia
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YES vote.
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Thanks for the vote. :o)
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Yes, well done. A great trio of poems. Loveed your use of language and your way of writng. well done :)
http://www.webook.com/project/You-did-this-to-me
http://www.webook.com/project/You-did-this-to-me
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Brilliant poems! i really enjoyed reading them- a yes vote from me :)
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Wow, what emotion! I am sitting here trying to find the words to explain the emotion your words evoke within me! I could relate to so much...and all I can say at this point is-wonderful. :D
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I enjoyed reading. love the narrative style. I find you are a very intellectual yet still emotional writer. good job. a yes vote. :)
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These poems are great. You are very artfully skilled. I specially likes "Ugly Ways" Its tone was just great. Like it.
It's a yes from me
Love,
Ana
It's a yes from me
Love,
Ana
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YES!!! you have my vote...
please tell me this is NOT a true story of your life... it's so sad... :'(
please tell me this is NOT a true story of your life... it's so sad... :'(
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You have my honest Yes vote...
I've noticed a few webookers who seem to have voted, Yes, for everyone, including themselves, hmm....presumably by accident?) which is a shame in a way as it fogs the pieces of work i like best, of which I count yours.
Nice work.
I've noticed a few webookers who seem to have voted, Yes, for everyone, including themselves, hmm....presumably by accident?) which is a shame in a way as it fogs the pieces of work i like best, of which I count yours.
Nice work.
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What a mixture of poetry, 3 very individual pieces, differing images and places for the mind to travel, I thoroughly loved the journey, 'Ugly Ways' is the one I was pulled back to, that really caught my attention, but the other two stand well also, I say thumbs up, I'd love see you included in the book, best of luck dear friend, you have my vote :)
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A must for the PUBLISH column...
Such powerful images andmessages from a broken heart...my deepest wish is not only for these to get approved for publishing, but that these great literary works of arts also carry incredible healing powers. Thanks for the fortitude to share and thanks for inviting me to your project...it was well worth it. Much success in the remaining days of this voting process. Jimbo
Such powerful images andmessages from a broken heart...my deepest wish is not only for these to get approved for publishing, but that these great literary works of arts also carry incredible healing powers. Thanks for the fortitude to share and thanks for inviting me to your project...it was well worth it. Much success in the remaining days of this voting process. Jimbo
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You have my vote. My favorite is the first one. In your words I see the five stages of grief. You may not have intended that but I see it very well. Your writing is colorful, scenic, it forms definite pictures in my brain. Some may say all three are to long but I felt every word was needed and it flowed well.
Thanks for your vote please pass me along to anyone you think might enjoy what you read.
http://www.webook.com/project/Pain-of-another
Thanks for your vote please pass me along to anyone you think might enjoy what you read.
http://www.webook.com/project/Pain-of-another
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There is talent in abundance with your writing for me the one especially worthy of publishing was 'Ugly Ways'
'Beatrice' to me was beautifully written but to me was a short story laid out in verse form - either way still really enjoyable and well written.
'Cheap Dream Pimp Whore' - Sorry but this one did nothing for me at all and was by far the worst submission of the three. I believe the excessive rhyming at intervals throughout is the main reason but only my opinion of course.
I have voted for you almost entirely because of the immense latent talent you have within you to develop. Please do not make the mistake many make as we never ever stop learning and improving.
Kind Regards John and Good Luck with the vote
'Beatrice' to me was beautifully written but to me was a short story laid out in verse form - either way still really enjoyable and well written.
'Cheap Dream Pimp Whore' - Sorry but this one did nothing for me at all and was by far the worst submission of the three. I believe the excessive rhyming at intervals throughout is the main reason but only my opinion of course.
I have voted for you almost entirely because of the immense latent talent you have within you to develop. Please do not make the mistake many make as we never ever stop learning and improving.
Kind Regards John and Good Luck with the vote
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Your first and last poems echo something which is sadly, all too common. The first is a terrrible reflection of what goes on in a so-called civilized world and needs to be expressed.
A troubling but extremely thought-provoking read.
A troubling but extremely thought-provoking read.
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I really love the detail in this one, the food, the crockery. It creates an atmosphere of warmth and good humour. Your refrain of ...'one lump or two?' is a special touch.
A lovely tribute to your grandmother!
A lovely tribute to your grandmother!
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Wonderful, absolutely wonderful! keep up the amazing work. i love your images and story telling! My vote is Yes!
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I like, "Cheap Dream Pimp Whore"
Your titles are amazing. Your poetry has an urban feel to them that I like. My vote is in. Good Luck. Also, thanks for viewing my work.
Your titles are amazing. Your poetry has an urban feel to them that I like. My vote is in. Good Luck. Also, thanks for viewing my work.
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Heartbreaking yet amazingly written.
Form:
I really like the structure, all the stanzas seem unequal in length and there is no pattern, in rhythm or rhyme at least not that I can see, yet they both still sounds really good.
You have my Vote!
Heartbreaking yet amazingly written.
Form:
I really like the structure, all the stanzas seem unequal in length and there is no pattern, in rhythm or rhyme at least not that I can see, yet they both still sounds really good.
You have my Vote!
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I find your poems to be "at least to me" more akin to song lyrics. This is by no means an insult. If you are familiar with "Pinks" Missundastood CD you will see what I mean. Your work is so sad and painful I can only hope it is a work of fiction. Well done
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I must say that I was blown away. It's hard to describe all that I thought and felt as I read each passing line.
Ugly Ways was so beautifully written and over such dark material that it transcended over the rest of your submissions for me. You versed it so well, I couldn't walk away without feeling a residual pain.
However Cheap Dream Pimp Whore, caught me off guard as well as it progressed. The line
"Healing comes in many shades
And past regrets choke futures yet met " reverberates in my mind as if it were my own thought.
Wonderful work, you have my vote.
Ugly Ways was so beautifully written and over such dark material that it transcended over the rest of your submissions for me. You versed it so well, I couldn't walk away without feeling a residual pain.
However Cheap Dream Pimp Whore, caught me off guard as well as it progressed. The line
"Healing comes in many shades
And past regrets choke futures yet met " reverberates in my mind as if it were my own thought.
Wonderful work, you have my vote.
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Beautiful collection....the tales of loss and painful memories are told with such conviction and emotion....wonderful.
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Simply no choice after reading these, I have to vote to publish.
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Wow! I found we share a lot of the same writing styles. The words you chose are so descriptive, they hook you in. I loved Ugly ways, you have my vote!
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You have my vote.
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Top-Three
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Top-Three
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Voted...I like the story format of you work, but it seems you added too many random "filler" words because you felt you needed to make it rhyme. Just go with the flow and your words will let it show! All in all, a good trio...best of luck!
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I fully related to all your poems . They tell a lot that I recognise in a similar way to how the author wrote them,
I felt your heartache, beleive me. But I can see you are a very strong person that turns a negative into a positive always ... your experiences have helped you to be strong. I like them all very much, they tell a story indeed, great flow, genunie emotion. I also think it was lovely to remember Beatrice in that way for your kids and I am glad after all you have chosen you. I think the sentiment of yours and my own poems are the same. Well done indeed. And very good luck.
http://www.webook.com/project/Quirked
I felt your heartache, beleive me. But I can see you are a very strong person that turns a negative into a positive always ... your experiences have helped you to be strong. I like them all very much, they tell a story indeed, great flow, genunie emotion. I also think it was lovely to remember Beatrice in that way for your kids and I am glad after all you have chosen you. I think the sentiment of yours and my own poems are the same. Well done indeed. And very good luck.
http://www.webook.com/project/Quirked
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I love the story telling aspect of your pieces along with the picture you paint with your words....
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This is spectacular. I love, love, love it. I sure hope that they see the beauty in potential in this because if not, then they are truly battling insanity.
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Imagery:
vote for you indeed.
imagery is right up my alley.
I was deep into this and it brought up intense feeling.
vote for you indeed.
imagery is right up my alley.
I was deep into this and it brought up intense feeling.
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Great stuff. I love your edgy tone and great word usage. Thumbs up!
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Having already reviewed these, I will now cast my vote and you have it! Brilliant poems. Love them.
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Your poetry is raw and very real life and gritty. It takes a lot to be able to write about life's wrongs and hurts, even more so to do it in a way that is mindful of the people that have been hurt and yet still getting the point across. I am more than happy to vote for you. Well done and good luck.
Sarah
Sarah
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Quite good, raw and real, just the way I like things sometimes, this hit me right where it hurts but right in a good place where I have also learned to call up the ugly things with my writing in a way it makes others understand. Very good, go get published, rock on. smiles Nica
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I love Beatrice. I am moved by Ugly Ways, but it is haunting and in its own way beautiful. A tale so often true of the victim of the victim. Where others might find this distasteful, I have personal experience of a taste of that and this describes it fairly well. I guess the only thing I don't like is the fact that the daughter doesn't love the mother, but then again, she is only five.
The last poem, about the pimp whore, I don't like, but more for its content than anything else.
I have to vote publish. Either of the first two are well worth printing and perhaps even the third in the right kind of book.
Good luck!
The last poem, about the pimp whore, I don't like, but more for its content than anything else.
I have to vote publish. Either of the first two are well worth printing and perhaps even the third in the right kind of book.
Good luck!
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Personally I didn't like ugly ways or cheap dream pimp whore, I found them long and a bit rambling.
Beatrice on the other hand I really liked, its a wonderfully personal piece that flows nicely. It is a good length, not too long but in depth enough to tell your story.
I think I'll vote publish, for Beatrice.
Beatrice on the other hand I really liked, its a wonderfully personal piece that flows nicely. It is a good length, not too long but in depth enough to tell your story.
I think I'll vote publish, for Beatrice.
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I just wanted to tell you, that I love Beatrice also. Probably my favorite of yours.
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Beatrice is terrific from first to last. It reads just like a "warm hug."
Publish!
Ugly Ways doesn't appeal to me nearly as much, but that's due to the content rather than the conveyance.
Publish!
Ugly Ways doesn't appeal to me nearly as much, but that's due to the content rather than the conveyance.
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'I'm standing on corners selling wishes', I love this line in "Cheap Dream Pimp Whore." Vote yes.
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Oh my goodness. That was amazing. I felt like I was reading a song. Like I could feel it moving through me. Really just amazing and wonderfully written.
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Content:
the content of your art is compelling. i vote publish.
the content of your art is compelling. i vote publish.
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General:
I really love it all, so I definatly has my vote.
Imagery:
"Cheap Dream Pimp Whore" really showed you what was going on, I could very much picture it in my head. And it's my favorit eof the 3.
Musicality:
All of them flow wonderfully, especially "Beatrice." It all goes together, one section moving on to the next.
And in "Cheap Dream Pimp Whore", not many people (that I know anyways) could probably keep rhyming in that long of a poem. They all went so well to gether, great job.
I really love it all, so I definatly has my vote.
Imagery:
"Cheap Dream Pimp Whore" really showed you what was going on, I could very much picture it in my head. And it's my favorit eof the 3.
Musicality:
All of them flow wonderfully, especially "Beatrice." It all goes together, one section moving on to the next.
And in "Cheap Dream Pimp Whore", not many people (that I know anyways) could probably keep rhyming in that long of a poem. They all went so well to gether, great job.
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General:
Must be published! Great work.
Content:
Raw, honest, relentless, does not hold back. Excellent.
Imagery:
Your words conjure so many images that strengthen every line, and flutter the mind with a rainbow of thoughts.
Tone:
Hypnotizing voice, new and refreshing. Absolutely non-cliche.
Musicality:
Nice rhythm that keeps you reading avidly, and before you know it you're at the end of each poem wanting more, yet filling fully satisfied.
Must be published! Great work.
Content:
Raw, honest, relentless, does not hold back. Excellent.
Imagery:
Your words conjure so many images that strengthen every line, and flutter the mind with a rainbow of thoughts.
Tone:
Hypnotizing voice, new and refreshing. Absolutely non-cliche.
Musicality:
Nice rhythm that keeps you reading avidly, and before you know it you're at the end of each poem wanting more, yet filling fully satisfied.
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I thought I'd already commented on these and voted? Never mind . . it's a definate yes, with a vote!
Good luck!
Hazel x
Good luck!
Hazel x
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wow you have a real talent. I especially loved Ugly Ways. Good Luck with this! You definitely have my vote xx
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Your poems are speaking clearly of loss and disappointment and change. I found them beautiful, but painfully sad. All three are emotionally provocative.
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Great pieces, you know u got my vote.
Return the favor plz.
Great pieces, you know u got my vote.
Return the favor plz.
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Excellent! Really moving and dark in its contents. Loved it!
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I have read all 3 poems. Excellent work, and very interesting expressions and usage of words. Best of luck!
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After reading all three, I have to say that they were exceptionally well done. You have done a great job at bringing your readers into the moment. The only other thing I can really add is my sympathy's for a life that has spawned such tragedy. Good luck and keep up the good work.
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A simple 'WOW!'
Loved it all.
So succinct, so deep, so torn from the soul!
I'm left feeling for you with an impersonal sympathy and yet I find myself drawn to the unknown future that you must live with.
An unusual compassion grows within me.
All I can say is 'WOW!' again.
Let's see more!
xxxadurosxxx
Loved it all.
So succinct, so deep, so torn from the soul!
I'm left feeling for you with an impersonal sympathy and yet I find myself drawn to the unknown future that you must live with.
An unusual compassion grows within me.
All I can say is 'WOW!' again.
Let's see more!
xxxadurosxxx
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