Wolvonous (1st Draft)

Join Alf, Sah, Jenny, Julius and Melham for the ride of a life time, with their lives in the balance.

Alf is plunged into a struggle hundreds of years old with the arrival of the druids. He faces possession, an ancient cult and the war torn land of Tulfuon. He will hunt and be hunted and all for reasons he doesn't understand. But can embracing the spirit of Wolvonous save him from the clutches of these foes or is it a path to doom.

First Installment of my Planned Democus series. First Draft.
© Tureri 2008

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nanashi10

8/27/2009 4:51 AM PDT

I'm just going to try and edit as I go. Sometimes I get distracted in the story. :-)
Sentence 3: 'be hunted -and- for reasons he' I would take out the and.

Sentence 4: You should rarely if ever start a sentence with But. You can remove that one without destroying the sentence. glutches should be clutches.

or is it his path to doom. reads funny. I don't know, maybe something like 'or will it be the path to his doom.

Sounds interesting and I've only read a paragraph. I haven't read anything with druids in many years. I kind of miss those freaky robed scary men. Please take no offense at my editing, and remember, I am not always right.

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AubrieAnne

6/1/2009 9:30 PM PDT

Sounds cool. I'll have to take a look later!

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Kirby_Jane_Ross

5/1/2009 8:45 PM PDT

This is Fantastic

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WuYiXiang

4/15/2009 6:51 PM PDT

oh yeah... the website's http://waltonnovels.freeforums.org/ no "www"

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WuYiXiang

4/15/2009 6:43 PM PDT

thanks for the advertisement... cute dog by the way.

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Tureri

4/14/2009 12:25 AM PDT

If you like my book then please join Walton Novels a little writing community i am in. I will release chapters first at Walton and then here at Webook a few days later. At Walton I have the story as a downloadable PDF.
Join www.waltonnovels.freeforums.org if you are interested or at least have a look.