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You did this to me... (My Poetry Submissions)
They are mainly about one boy. But there is one random poem in there. Ive never writtern poetry before, but these fellings he made me have let me express them into words now. Im still in love with him, but i guess ne doesnt know..
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8/30/2009 9:25 AM PDT
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8/29/2009 2:29 PM PDT
Imagery:
you have beautiful soul poem heart great care in poem I love it
good luck god bless mike
you have beautiful soul poem heart great care in poem I love it
good luck god bless mike
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8/29/2009 10:03 AM PDT
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8/26/2009 7:19 AM PDT
I really like your peoms they tell a personal story for you but also to the rest of us WeBookers! You deffinatly have my vote because i understand these peoms and their meanings :D they are sort of what im going through now! Well done they are really good :D
If you have the time can you look at mine? http://www.webook.com/project/The-time-of-Night
thanks and well done again x
If you have the time can you look at mine? http://www.webook.com/project/The-time-of-Night
thanks and well done again x
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8/22/2009 10:31 AM PDT
Jess your doing AMAZING!!
you got my vote but you know that :)
you got my vote but you know that :)
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8/22/2009 8:12 AM PDT
Your poetry is very moving and beautiful.
You've got my vote!
http://www.webook.com/project/Chelseas-Poems
You've got my vote!
http://www.webook.com/project/Chelseas-Poems
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8/18/2009 11:18 AM PDT
absolutely beautiful....
I so feel you
you've got my vote
I so feel you
you've got my vote
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8/16/2009 9:56 PM PDT
very touching..........
i loved it..........
u got my vote dear......
i loved it..........
u got my vote dear......
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8/16/2009 9:42 PM PDT
completely amazing I love how you deliver it
It's really quite touching, maybe you should have put confusion in front of flying, that way it's more in order.
but either way this is very good, i hope you win or get published ^.^
It's really quite touching, maybe you should have put confusion in front of flying, that way it's more in order.
but either way this is very good, i hope you win or get published ^.^
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8/15/2009 7:12 AM PDT
Very sentimentil which I love votes yes
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8/15/2009 3:17 AM PDT
i enjoyed all 3 poems. I'm not a poet, but they seem well written to me,and really conveyed the feelings written about. good luck :)
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8/15/2009 3:15 AM PDT
flying.what a beautiful poem, was making me smile then ...bam..
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8/14/2009 11:45 AM PDT
Good Luck with the vote.
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-for-the-competition
If you have the time.
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-for-the-competition
If you have the time.
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8/14/2009 7:07 AM PDT
My favorite of the three is Flying, and my favorite verse:
You take my hand, you let me fly.
My heart is yours, for you I'd die.
My darken world is set alight,
I blaze forever with you in sight.
One quick fix:
darkened world
You take my hand, you let me fly.
My heart is yours, for you I'd die.
My darken world is set alight,
I blaze forever with you in sight.
One quick fix:
darkened world
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8/13/2009 11:18 AM PDT
this set of poems are good, they have potential.
I vote yes.
love,
Ana
I vote yes.
love,
Ana
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8/11/2009 9:51 PM PDT
This is actually some pretty good poetry. I'm not really an expert when it comes to poems, and I'm not really into poetry that much on the whole, but these really spoke to me. I hope you get them published because they're really good.
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8/11/2009 6:27 AM PDT
:) I always love a good set of poetry pub plzzz
p.s xO i have tha eye picture!!!
p.s xO i have tha eye picture!!!
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8/10/2009 9:43 PM PDT
Excellent, amazing work, thumbs up!!!
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8/10/2009 7:01 PM PDT
I loved these! Beautiful! Your choice of words were fantastic! You definitely have my "thumbs-up" vote! Good luck with the contest!
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8/10/2009 5:20 PM PDT
Good work Jessica. Thats about the age I started writing. You are definitely connected with your feelings. try not to give your power away to others whom might use it against you. Keep the spiritual element and reality balanced. There you will find strength. I would love to see what you're writing 20yrs. from now
8/10/2009 11:51 AM PDT
Wow that's deep. I can relate, it happens to the best of us. Good luck...
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8/10/2009 8:25 AM PDT
I voted for you
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8/9/2009 6:36 PM PDT
I really like Confusion :)♥
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8/9/2009 3:38 PM PDT
Confusion:
I have no skill or ability to rate poetry knowledgeably.
Yet I was invited to read these poems – Oh well, This is truthful at least.
I do not usually read poetry, it simply is not my "thang" and
I am not educated enough to understand it <sez quietly>
nor be able to offer technical advice on the format or pattern of verses.
As I was invited to read these - I can tell you how they made me feel:
Realisation of same-sex love for characters.
If that was the intention, then it was successful.
I sincerely wish you all the best of luck in your competition
I have no skill or ability to rate poetry knowledgeably.
Yet I was invited to read these poems – Oh well, This is truthful at least.
I do not usually read poetry, it simply is not my "thang" and
I am not educated enough to understand it <sez quietly>
nor be able to offer technical advice on the format or pattern of verses.
As I was invited to read these - I can tell you how they made me feel:
Realisation of same-sex love for characters.
If that was the intention, then it was successful.
I sincerely wish you all the best of luck in your competition
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8/9/2009 3:36 PM PDT
Leaving:
I have no skill or ability to rate poetry knowledgeably.
Yet I was invited to read these poems – Oh well, This is truthful at least.
I do not usually read poetry, it simply is not my "thang" and
I am not educated enough to understand it <sez quietly>
nor be able to offer technical advice on the format or pattern of verses.
As I was invited to read these - I can tell you how they made me feel:
Depressed.
If that was the intention, then it was successful.
I sincerely wish you all the best of luck in your competition.
I have no skill or ability to rate poetry knowledgeably.
Yet I was invited to read these poems – Oh well, This is truthful at least.
I do not usually read poetry, it simply is not my "thang" and
I am not educated enough to understand it <sez quietly>
nor be able to offer technical advice on the format or pattern of verses.
As I was invited to read these - I can tell you how they made me feel:
Depressed.
If that was the intention, then it was successful.
I sincerely wish you all the best of luck in your competition.
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8/9/2009 3:35 PM PDT
I have no skill or ability to rate poetry knowledgeably.
Yet I was invited to read these poems – Oh well, This is truthful at least.
I do not usually read poetry, it simply is not my "thang" and
I am not educated enough to understand it <sez quietly>
nor be able to offer technical advice on the format or pattern of verses.
As I was invited to read these - I can tell you how they made me feel or what I saw from them.
Wondered if they baloons flying up,up up into the air?
I sincerely wish you all the best of luck in your competition.
Yet I was invited to read these poems – Oh well, This is truthful at least.
I do not usually read poetry, it simply is not my "thang" and
I am not educated enough to understand it <sez quietly>
nor be able to offer technical advice on the format or pattern of verses.
As I was invited to read these - I can tell you how they made me feel or what I saw from them.
Wondered if they baloons flying up,up up into the air?
I sincerely wish you all the best of luck in your competition.
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8/9/2009 3:04 PM PDT
Well written. You have my vote.
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8/9/2009 1:57 PM PDT
Wow.
I can't begin to describe the impact this has left on me.
Truly, you have talent. I liked "Flying" most especially, although all three were equally good reads.
Overall, I vote for publication. Best of luck. :]
I can't begin to describe the impact this has left on me.
Truly, you have talent. I liked "Flying" most especially, although all three were equally good reads.
Overall, I vote for publication. Best of luck. :]
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8/9/2009 12:58 PM PDT
good luck
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8/9/2009 12:58 PM PDT
At your age you amaze me with your mature way of thinking. Your words are heartfelt well written and deserve recognition. Thumbs Up!! LOL, BDC
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8/9/2009 12:28 PM PDT
I loved the one called flying
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8/9/2009 9:52 AM PDT
Great Poem =]. Sad ending though
i feel connected to the person your writing about even though we have no info on her. Its really great
i feel connected to the person your writing about even though we have no info on her. Its really great
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8/9/2009 8:26 AM PDT
wow, i really really really enjoyed these. extremely well written in my opinion. you're got my vote.
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8/9/2009 7:09 AM PDT
i like these a lot, enjoyed reading them, good luck
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Poetic-Thoughts-and-Rambles
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Poetic-Thoughts-and-Rambles
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8/9/2009 7:06 AM PDT
Lots of sincere emotion here, and some nice bursts of form. I'd like to see you tighten a couple of these up - - balancing out the rhyme schemes, or tossing them all to the wind in favor of true free verse. Keep writing -- there's a lot out there to write about, and I think you'll do well!
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8/9/2009 2:05 AM PDT
Leaving and Flying are the most realistic and good and at the same time really bad poems. Im not saying there bad, If I wasnt so depressed and heartbroken I'd be yelling your praise to the world but yea, these are too realistic for my state of mind. I'll vote for you anyway so dont worry.
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8/9/2009 1:15 AM PDT
Your poems are honest and it shows through very well.
Keep writing.
Keep writing.
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8/9/2009 12:19 AM PDT
The emotion certainly comes across well.
They could use a final read through before you hit the 'submit' key, as there are basic spelling and punctuation errors.
On the whole though, an enjoyable read.
Thank you for bringing them to us.
silvercoat
They could use a final read through before you hit the 'submit' key, as there are basic spelling and punctuation errors.
On the whole though, an enjoyable read.
Thank you for bringing them to us.
silvercoat
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8/8/2009 10:23 PM PDT
These are certianly genuine emotions expressed and that is the pure nature of poetry. To allow the heart to be transalated into something beyond words. ty for sharing -- i've voted.
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8/8/2009 8:04 PM PDT
Beautiful! I love these three. A yes from me.
http://www.webook.com/project/In-Times-Of-Love-There-Were
http://www.webook.com/project/In-Times-Of-Love-There-Were
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8/8/2009 6:00 PM PDT
Your poems are full of emotion that I can relate to only too well at the moment. Beautifully done. A yes from me.
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8/8/2009 3:57 PM PDT
This is great work. Very enjoyable. You have my vote.
Keep up the awesomeness, indeed.
Keep up the awesomeness, indeed.
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8/8/2009 3:55 PM PDT
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8/8/2009 1:43 PM PDT
your poem is okay but the other one is a little dark. no offense are you by any chance a little dark
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8/8/2009 12:36 PM PDT
This is brillaint i 'm no poetry expret but I really liked your poems :)
Flying was my favourite :)
Amber :)
Flying was my favourite :)
Amber :)
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8/8/2009 11:17 AM PDT
My favorite was, "Flying." Publish!
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8/8/2009 11:10 AM PDT
General:
You have done som very nice work here, your free verse prose is very beautiful.
Form:
Free verse though it seems to start out as rhythm and rhyme [oetry is soon changes into pure prose and is very lovely.
The Author takes the time to shape the physical form of the piece to fit the feel and the smooth flow of the content.
Content:
is more or less about her love being the wind beneath her wings to paraphrase in metaphore, her love gives her wings and when he is finished he goes on without her leaving her to fall back to earth.
Imagery:
The imagery is very strong and colorful with a vividness one would not expect with this type of prose. But it lasts until the very last word, of the last line.
Tone:
the emotional feel is slow and slightly sad for the lost love at the end of the piece.
Musicality:
something like "Bridge over troubled waters comes to mind.
Yes it deserves to be published ....Russ♫♪♫♪♥♥♥
http://www.webook.com/project/my-entry-for-the-poetry-vote
You have done som very nice work here, your free verse prose is very beautiful.
Form:
Free verse though it seems to start out as rhythm and rhyme [oetry is soon changes into pure prose and is very lovely.
The Author takes the time to shape the physical form of the piece to fit the feel and the smooth flow of the content.
Content:
is more or less about her love being the wind beneath her wings to paraphrase in metaphore, her love gives her wings and when he is finished he goes on without her leaving her to fall back to earth.
Imagery:
The imagery is very strong and colorful with a vividness one would not expect with this type of prose. But it lasts until the very last word, of the last line.
Tone:
the emotional feel is slow and slightly sad for the lost love at the end of the piece.
Musicality:
something like "Bridge over troubled waters comes to mind.
Yes it deserves to be published ....Russ♫♪♫♪♥♥♥
http://www.webook.com/project/my-entry-for-the-poetry-vote
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8/8/2009 10:25 AM PDT
good work, voted:-)
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8/8/2009 10:15 AM PDT
I think that Leaving is my favorite, but they're all really great! I noticed some spelling and grammar errors, but despite those, you got your point across. Keep writing!
I hope you get your poetry published!!!
Best of luck!
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-Poems-From-My-Freshman-Year-In-High-School
I hope you get your poetry published!!!
Best of luck!
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-Poems-From-My-Freshman-Year-In-High-School
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8/8/2009 10:14 AM PDT
Three ver poignant poems, I like them very much. Well written. Publish!
Hazel x
Hazel x
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8/8/2009 10:08 AM PDT
Lol.. I figured that much after i finished talkin to her about it.. the last bit is so true, but no need for the weirdo comment, lol.
Good anyway.. I'm voting away..
YES, YES, YES!!
Ly xx *sorry*
Good anyway.. I'm voting away..
YES, YES, YES!!
Ly xx *sorry*
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8/8/2009 9:42 AM PDT
General:
voted
Form:
Flying: A poem that expresses sadnness, begins with love and hope and then the truth shines. The witer is alone while her lover just continues to shine leaving them behind to face the shadows, a great write
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Form:
Flying: A poem that expresses sadnness, begins with love and hope and then the truth shines. The witer is alone while her lover just continues to shine leaving them behind to face the shadows, a great write
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8/8/2009 9:11 AM PDT
and this is my third comment. i voted on the 3rd.
again, great work.
again, great work.
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8/8/2009 9:10 AM PDT
these are great entries.
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8/8/2009 8:45 AM PDT
3 wonderfully written poems. Good luck and you have the best vote possible from me.
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8/8/2009 8:43 AM PDT
its very bitersweet. I like poems like that good job!
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8/8/2009 8:33 AM PDT
Very nice. 2 Thumbs up.
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8/8/2009 8:31 AM PDT
Leaving - is a very expressive piece..
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8/8/2009 8:11 AM PDT
Nice I like them
Very real and emotive
Publish
If you have time would you look at mine please?
http://www.webook.com/project/The-Very-Best-Poetry-on-WEbook-2009-Stan-Cohen-My-Entry
Thanks
Good luck
Very real and emotive
Publish
If you have time would you look at mine please?
http://www.webook.com/project/The-Very-Best-Poetry-on-WEbook-2009-Stan-Cohen-My-Entry
Thanks
Good luck
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8/8/2009 8:09 AM PDT
if your best friend if this one who broke your heart i hope to goodness he is remorseful and kind enough to say hes sorry. and shows a friends love, which will save it from a life of despair everytime you look his way or think you let him know you loved him. some guys run from commitment because they never grow up; peter pan at heart; got to watch out for them. they can be such a heartache; i know.
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8/8/2009 7:51 AM PDT
These were good. A yes my friend.
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8/8/2009 7:18 AM PDT
Touching and beautiful, publish.
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8/8/2009 5:28 AM PDT
Beautiful. Thumbs up from me :)
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8/5/2009 7:04 AM PDT
Well done... Good luck too. Shah. X
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8/5/2009 6:00 AM PDT
all three were very real, and emotive... my favorite type!
I say YES!
If you want to find mine:
http://www.webook.com/project/Voodoo-Hearts-My-3-Poems-for-entry-Webook-2009poetryVOTE
I say YES!
If you want to find mine:
http://www.webook.com/project/Voodoo-Hearts-My-3-Poems-for-entry-Webook-2009poetryVOTE
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8/4/2009 8:21 PM PDT
I was moved by all three of these poems and gave you a thumbs up.
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Poetic-Trilogy
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Poetic-Trilogy
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8/4/2009 5:49 PM PDT
These are very good hun honestly there really eye catching and "Woah" i hope you get threw to the end
Best wishes
Nessa x
Best wishes
Nessa x
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8/3/2009 8:26 AM PDT
i vote publish.
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8/2/2009 2:02 PM PDT
WT F I LIKE A LOT WHAT DID HE DO EXACTLY
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8/2/2009 12:19 PM PDT
Nice little trio here, for someone, like myself who does'nt normally write poety, I think you have an ability for it. These are heartfelt ... I hope your best friend isn't the one you talk about in poems one or two ... or if so ... hopefully you can still be friends.
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8/2/2009 12:04 PM PDT
Excellent, definitely a yes
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8/2/2009 12:56 AM PDT
A yes vote.
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8/1/2009 4:24 AM PDT
I love you poems, so many people can relate to them and there are so emotional. Well done! You get my vote :)
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7/31/2009 3:05 PM PDT
Amazing! Well done on the corrections, i think you have a winner here. Well done, i can't wait to read further submissions.
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7/29/2009 8:48 AM PDT
The overview is very intriguing. I must ask you to edit the spellings and grammar mistakes on the overview. I am trying to edit everyone's poetry before the vote, so everything can be perfect!
trying to Help,
Bookfan13
trying to Help,
Bookfan13
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7/22/2009 8:06 AM PDT
Yup, Charis ure right :) x
7/22/2009 8:03 AM PDT
jordan it not about u. u weirdo
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7/21/2009 1:02 PM PDT
Well to sayy Oh My God is an understatement. You're amazing. If i knew that i'd truly done this, i wouldn't have. lol. The smile did fade yes.. But just how dare you say
"I know I'm not that pretty,
I dare to say I'm bright." You're more beautiful and more smart than me.. <You know i'd say that's saying somethin'> but god.. It lifted ME up, just readin it. I feel almost the same is enough to say.. I Love You xxxxxxx
"I know I'm not that pretty,
I dare to say I'm bright." You're more beautiful and more smart than me.. <You know i'd say that's saying somethin'> but god.. It lifted ME up, just readin it. I feel almost the same is enough to say.. I Love You xxxxxxx
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7/18/2009 3:14 PM PDT
Simply awesome
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7/18/2009 2:55 PM PDT
Please let me know wat u think.
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