Good job!!!!!

First, I want to thank you for reading my poems. You were dead on about ship of fools and I know the other side. Your comments gave me relief knowing that may poetry truly spoke to you EXACTLY the way it was suppose to. Your work is yes amazing. The word usage is sophisticated and truly makes the mind dig deep. I agree with writer john tucker below. Within the masses the majority of the people are those in what I call the gray zone. There is much depth here which lacks on the outside. My favorite was the first and the last. I felt the death in the first poem as if it was my own, and the last it was as if God was describing his  once again ownership of this human soul now gone from its body. Overall it got me thinking and yet all along I understood. Thank you for sharing this wonderful work.

Imagery:
Oh my goodness, i could feel the words... I am honored you shared your work with me and thank you for writing a poem for a fantastic artist of the film....

I appreciated the quality of your work in all submissions and there is no doubt they are worthy of publication.
I feel these will appeal more to the thinking person than to the masses - who increasingly these days like to be fed their entertainment with a spoon and minimal use of the grey matter!
I enjoyed them as they were wellcostructed and grammatically well presented.
Thank you for your in depth analysis of my own submission and I wish you well in getting published.

Kind Regards  John

so, I was going through some of the poem submissions,
careful to make sure I was reading as many as I could.

I voted 'yes' for you long ago, but somehow came back to this page again and began reading...

I wanted to say that your first submission,
'Last Morning in Bangkok' is so fantastic. Let me say that I have yet to master my battles of the soul, which is evident in my poems. Your words, imagery, and all that you put into that piece is really amazing and quite captivating. Although 'self-hatred' isn't something that I think drives me, my mistakes in life have culminated in such pain and disaster that I should dislike myself! But, as I see it, there is some sort of master plan of which I just don't have the energy to know about, and I trust that, 'what is'
is so much less than, 'what will be'... does that make any sense?
anyway, I just really loved this poem and thought you captured a feeling so well, so incredibly well, that I wanted to elaborate more than my last comment of, "YES".

At the beginning of the month I was really trying to get to everyone and neglected to go into great detail of what I liked most about each, and I think that was a big mistake.
I just ended up needing a lot of sleep!
Again, you are a wonderful writer , and also I might add, you give long, detailed feedback to everyone you read, which isn't easy.
I think you should be commended for that.

Good luck and take care,
tuesday_rayne
(catherine)

I liked "dark moon child." I think the structure you maintain is wonderful and does not detract from the inner-workings of the poem.

Good luck!

http://www.webook.com/project/The-Romantic-the-Sucidial-and-the-Tortured-Soul

Content:
Your poetry is incredibly insightful.  Each one seems to grow towards and from the other.  I could read them again and again and come away with something else.  Really great work.

I voted yes
Niyahlove
http://www.webook.com/project/Pain-of-another

Dark wonderfully descriptive, capturing the emotional termoil that self hatred often instills.  The logical conclusion is to turn the pain inside, a truth rises in these words you express the feelings perfectly.

Wonderful a truly visual splender reflecting the last thoughts of a lifetime near finished....very well written

Very nicely done.  I voted to publish.

Last Morning in Bangkok was beautiful but haunting at the same time. The last bit of it kinda sends shivers down my back. Well done.

The other two are also somewhat haunting and very well written. I feel as if your imagery is portraying something light, as your tone in each of the poems is dark. It's very unique and interesting.

You've got my vote ;p

I think you made some awesome choices here!

really great poetry!  keep up the great writing (and reviewing)!  thanks so much for looking at my poetry, i really appreciate it!
I hope your poetry gets published!!!!!

Good on you, publish!

http://www.webook.com/project/Animal-Cruelty

Beautifully written! My favorite one was Self-Hatred. You got my thumbs-up vote for this! Thank you for messaging me to check this out. I'm glad I did!

General:
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Content:
I vote for this one

Now now, josy, I commented on these three before(or, at least, to myself)!  So, not much to say except repeats...or maybe, I'm just not in a 'perceptive ' mood today.. one introduced me to a celeb...one reminded me of me...and one made me sad....

Wow, I personally don't believe in human sacrifice, but if I did, this would be the poem I'd hang on my wall.

i liked the third one of them.. the other two seemed to be more like journal entries than poetry to me. maybe they'd fit better as short stories? idk, just my thoughts. good pieces though.

All three poems are in a way beautiful contemplations of nature, filled with color and imbued with the elements that you so sweetly describe.  There is a child-like feel to the poems, as if seen through very young eyes, when the world is a playful and magical place.  Unlike the other two, "A Late Summer Sunset" moves from the explosion of color to the memories that are left, connecting the awe-inspiring sight with an explicit emotion.  "Dandelion Seeds" is cute, creative, whimsical, and takes the reader through the air with the "parachutes" while at the same time exhalting the power of nature to continuously renew itself.  Finally, "Great Ball of Fire" again plays with color, and appeals to the senses by using metaphors of tasty fruit, cool popsicles.  There is an alchemy here, observing how the elements of fire and water seem to mix, affecting one another in an explosion of visual magnificence.  All three great pieces, worth voting for.  Good luck!!!

LOOK AT MY PROJEKT!

You have my vote. They were all wonderful, but I liked Dark Moon Child. Well done!

I love your poems

My Favourite is Self - Hatred

I'm giving you a.....Thumbs Up!

xD

I voted yes.  These were very good poems. I'm not much of a poetry person, but the emotion in these was phenomenal.  Good job.

I absolutely loved Dark Moon Child. I voted to publish. Good Luck!

Cindy

Definitely publish.  I found Self-Hatred very poignant.  Good luck!

Hazel x

Last Morning in Bangkok: That was beautiful, but depressing. I was enjoying the thump of each sound in the dream, but I was even more impressed by the last three paragraphs.

Self-Hatred: The flickering hope was very descriptive. I was realizing my past throughout the entire poem. I think the "calm winds" you speak of are trying to escape pain, but you can't and then the last line ties it all to together! Splendid here!

Dark Moon Child: The structure was astounding. It was perfect! It really expresses what is happening and the time frame. The sadness coming through had a rhythm rushing in my mind with all the suspense.   

VOTING ALL WAY!

~Courtney

Voted, I liked all your poems:-)

Yes I second that vote to publish, but my first choice would be dark moon child.


 If you feel so inclined to check these out I would be obliged:
http://www.webook.com/project/my-entry-for-the-poetry-vote

i vote publish
first choice Last Morning in Bangkok
second choice dark moon child
self-hatred i rate third of these.

great poetry!  keep up the great writing!
I hope your pieces get published!!!!!!!!!!!!

http://www.webook.com/project/Three-Poems-From-My-Freshman-Year-In-High-School

voted!

http://www.webook.com/project/Chelseas-Poems

Musicality:
Like soul songs, like expressionistic dance, your pieces tear at the soul.  I vote yes.

Your work do deserve my vote.

Voted... good luck.... shah. X

http://www.webook.com/project/My-Best-Three-Poems-WEBook-2009 If you have the time... ;-) X

interesting work here, well done, good luck


http://www.webook.com/project/My-Poetic-Thoughts-and-Rambles

Self Hatred hit home with me.  All three poems found a nerve in me that sparked interest.  You have my vote!

Wow - I love all three.  I would say Ditto to you about the extended metaphor.  You do a great job as well. 

This is a great line:

I raise you up,
in dreams,
above my head.

I definitely think these are three of the best poems I've read on Weebook.  Good Luck. Cathy

Great job! You got my vote.

~Kate

very nice job. my vote is a definate yes.

Very good work. It's a yes!

General:
Last Morning in Bangkok is terrific -- PUBLISH!

Imagery:
Effective in revealing the poet's vision of Carradine's last minutes to the reader.

Tone:
Sombre, sad, mourning what might have been.

Publish!

love these!
Publish!

Absolutely wonderful, and worthy of publication!!  The tone and imagery of Bangkok brings to life your description of death.  Well done!

Publish, publish, publish, publish.

I won't stop saying it until it happens.

i love the form and content of each submission. your mind runs deep.

i vote publish.

fairly good poetry I vote to publish

Publish.

Three very good poems - a yes vote.
Best wishes,
Mike.

http://www.webook.com/project/Verse-Macabre

I voted for this one.I like your writing style and I hope others notice it too.

Absolutely - you have my vote!

I like it - but I don't love it. 

I think you have a firm grasp of mystical imagery that helps to transmit your theme though at times the poems seem a bit circular.

There are a few typos but you probably are aware of them - just make sure you clean them up in a future edit.