Chapter 4 - Cornwallis Street
These chapters are, for the most part, quite good. I find passages that feel "ov ...
1872 - chapter 3
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Chapter 2 - The girl
Hi, again. Check the punctuation in the first paragraph. Commas, aside from ma ...
Chapter 1 continued
Once again, this is pretty well done, but it suffers from a lack of editing. Th ...
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