The_Dragon's Reviews

Number of Reviews: 246

Last Review: 1/31/2017

Midge Fly and The End of The World

Young Adult/Juvenile

A tale of adventure, friendship, space, time, ingenuity, the possible end of the ...more »

Submission Reviews

the Sphere of Time

Sci Fi/Fantasy

Have you ever felt too weak to do something you felt really strongly about? What ...more »

Submission Reviews

  • Chapter 3
    Finally found the time to read this second chapter - in between two breaths. ;?) ...
  • Chapter 2
    First of all: this really is nitpicking what I'm going to do. What you made of t ...
  • Chapter 5
    Isao filled me in on the marriage and both I and Kou’s father very happily offer ...
  • Chapter 4
    Good start.  When the doctor appears, something strange happens. I thought Isao ...
  • Chapter 3
    Beautiful: the humor when he tells us he, too, is afraid. It makes The Death mor ...
  • Chapter 2
    Over time my memories have faded, like a tapestry left exposed to the winds and ...
  • Chapter 7
    I never did see Isao or the man he was with again after that night. His energy v ...
  • Chapter 6
    Do I really have the right to be here? Do I have the right to just force myself ...
  • Chapter 5
    General: The start is clearly from Death's perspective, so he wouldn't know the ...
  • Chapter 4
    General: Back again for yet another chapter. Good start. I feel committed to the ...

Tobin's Window Chapter 1

Young Adult/Juvenile

Tobin Spencer, who has been haunted by daydreams of a giant white ship with bill ...more »

Project Reviews

  • Intriguing plot. Look forward to reading this.

Submission Reviews

  • Chapter 1
    The start is good. A bit dark (with the storm and all) but a delicious descripti ...

Survival Instinct

Young Adult/Juvenile

Would you dare to kill your friends to survive?

Submission Reviews

  • 1
    One remark on this first chapter: you use the passive voice a lot. Tone down on ...